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• The Candle

  (#) Ninsaneja 2007-02-22

  The first thing that I have to say is that I am not impressed. The second thing I have to say is that not being impressed at least means that you didn't impress me with how terrible you are, which is rare for amateur poetry. You could use work on some things, such maybe being a little more exiting and not repeating the use of the same word over and over and over but otherwise ok.

  Author's response

  Well, all I can say is that I'm working on it. That poem was not the best I have ever written, and I might publish some others. This poem did get an A in english, but the A was mostly for content. If I post some other poems, it would great if you could give me more feedback so that I know how to improve my writing style. Thanks!
  alloreli

• The Candle

  (#) taytor_tot102 2007-02-23

  That was really good! I think that is a very good life lesson!! Loved it!
  ~taytor_tot102 :D

  Author's response

  If you are who I think you are, I'm not sure whether I should take your word for it...... :)
  ~alloreli

• The Candle

  (#) MarkPoa 2007-02-26

  I'd have to agree that this was only adequate, but it did show good promise. I think my main complaint is that the imagery and words used here are a bit plain and rather than being moving, seemed to just be.
  
  On the positive side, though, your attention to the structure of the free-verse, a coherent thought and theme, and good spelling made this look competent and better than some of the other stuff here in Ficwad. Keep writing!

  Author's response

  Well, this WAS an english project. I needed to make sure I included all the necessary parts, which meant I wasn't concentrating as much on the words used then what I was saying. I really prefer to write free-verse. You'll notice that I don't have any sonnets or that kind of stuff on here.

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