- Odd. I reviewed chapter 5. I'm sure I saw it posted. Yet it doesn't seem to be there now.
Is this web archive prone to losing reviews?
Author's responseNOt that I am aware of. I saw your review and your cogent questions regarding the plots of CoS and PoA. I even posted a reply. As always thanks for reading and taking the time to review. BJH
- Interesting story so far. I don't see this Harry as being into cross-dimensional incest, but James wouldn't know that.
So this is the start of the sixth year for Hermione and Ron, while Ginny and Luna are in their fifth year. That would make him about the same age as Tonks. Based off his memories he has a strong idea of where the other Horcruxes are located and what major events may take place this coming year.
The continuing affair with Narcissa is interesting in that it provides an ongoing challenge to Draco for the honor of the Malfoy's and that it might be useful in gaining more information about various DE's.
I'm looking forward to seeing how this story develops and how Harry is going to deal with all of the people in this world that he knew in the other world and with the Potters.
Author's responseYes indeed, this story basically replaces HBP. Harry, or Odysseus in this case, is five years older so within a year or two of Tonks, who is already pining for Remus as in Canon. Do you think he ought to dump Narcissa for her? Might make for a couple of interesting triangles: Harry!Tonks!Remus not to mention how Draco could now be angry with Harry for both seducing his mother and then dumping her. Hmm. BJH
(#) apocalypso 2007-02-23Another excellent chapter. I find myself impressed by how you simultaneously create anger and appreciation between Harry and James. The only thing I could ask is to have Narcissa's character fleshed out more. I understand that Harry is indifferent at best towards her, but as she is (currently) a major character, it'd be nice to have more than just some vague knowledge of her character.
Good luck writing.
- Very nice and enthralling story. I look forward to its continuation. Teaching alongside both his parents? Should provide ample opportunities for entertainment.
Not sure where you are headed with the open antagonism for Snape. Harry should be more cautious and try to use Snape to his own benefit. Hell, he could use Snape and his father's natural hatred for each other to his benefit.
One plot hole I must ask you to consider is the Marauder's Map? How do you plan to work around it. I would certainly think that James would have it at his disposal or have recreated it especially in light of the 2nd year and Diggory's death. (I would have changed it to Krum. It just strikes me that Krum would have won if he hadn't been Imperiused - it would have been vengance at Igor for betraying him by taking is prize student. Something to consider...)
With the death of his father, I wonder if Draco has the mission to kill Dumbledore? Probably not. I also doubt that Snape was coerced into performing the unbreakable vow.
I'll be interested in seeing where you take this story. It will be curious to see where you take say Hermione's development without Harry's influence on her life.
Author's responseThanks for the kind and thoughtful comments. You've given me a bit to think about, especially with the Marauder's Map. I'm imagining that it was confiscated years ago as in canon and wound up with the twins. I may consider what they do with it if something fun strikes me. As for recreating it... hmm, maybe it wasn't feasible without Sirius or perhaps even Peter, we'll see.
Now as to Krum vs. Diggory, the ritual used in canon required the blood of an enemy and to me Krum is still too much of a question mark for that role. Cedric, the perfect Hufflepuff, I can see as an enemy of Voldemort's. Not as powerful a position as a living Harry would have been but maybe the best available.
Draco still has his two missions and Snape his vow, and they will become important in a few chapters. And speaking of Snape, I doubt Harry will be able to overcome his hatred of the git to think about using him for anything but kindling. As shadowy as Harry is, in this story at least he is not nearly as Slytherin/manipulative as he would have to be to do that. He is still, at heart, an actions speak louder than words Gryffindor.
Remeber, at this point Harry's goal is to free Sirius and nothing else. He has just given himself another task with Luna, but he still feels that the world will destroy Voldemort in a few years with or without him so why get involved?
Thanks again for reading and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
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