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Chapter 4 - Barely Touching In Our Cold Bed
9 reviewsThese are my children and she is my Wife. Co-Written with CeCe ( LovelA )
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(#) punkypromqueen 2007-03-02
UHH-MAzing!
i'm in love with this story and thusly you for writing it !!!
have a point!
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(#) FrostedGlass 2007-03-02
"Moods? What moods!? If anyone has moods, it's Pete!" Patrick said sounding irritated. -> That was so fitting. Not only because I guess it's true what he says, but also because this is how people go about denying their own faults.
It's so intriguing that they're still communicating somewhat normally at home. I don't want to put too much stress on the fact that it seems forced sometimes because such is life in a relationship, right?Learning to Love Again
(#) riaryder 2007-03-02
You have an amazing ability to capture reality.
Your stories are full of the emotions and intricacies of real life and real situations.
And the end? Touching, but very worrying. Oh Shay.....Learning to Love Again
(#) GwenMerlon 2007-03-02
Uh oh... sorry? Sorry for what???
You know, you are pretty cruel yourself... leaving me hanging in such a manner. I love Patrick and Shay!
You are amazing, you must know. I'm completely drawn into this story. :)
And a third party in the relationship? lol... Poor Pete, getting all tangeled up in a marriage that isn't even his.
I can't wait for more of this lovely story!!!Author's response
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(#) pixied_secrets 2007-03-03
oh no. what did shay do? "i'm sorry" never equals anything but trouble.
first of all, i thought i would be able to tell what parts katy wrote and which ones cece wrote, but i can't. this story flows seamlessly and you two are amazing together, in a completely platonic, creative way.
list time:
1.)i love sues notes. i like the narrative it's written in because it makes us analyze the situation at hand as well. good job, ladies.
2.)shays interaction with the children is very genuine. she takes interest in them, and it's kind of cool to see the grown up rory. i loved him in the first one, so it's only natural...
3.)i think it was good to show a weak moment for patrick with bee. it's realistic that he wouldn't/couldn't always remain faithful in the situation he is put in.
4.)damn pete. i don't know what it is, but i'm waiting for an explanation on that one misseys.
that's all i have right now. i love you both!Author's response
We love you too. DoJ BABY!Learning to Love Again
(#) MMMramen 2007-03-05
I suck. I suck so badly. Terrible DoJer, I am. But better late than never, I guess. This chapter was...I don't even know a word to describe how well written it was. Pete's involvement is deeper, I know it. I'll keep my theory to myself, since I don't want the offhand chance that I'm right to ruin the plot. I'm hardly ever right, but just to be safe, I'll shut up. Awesome chappy, my dear.Author's response
Yeah you do suck, get out and take your husband with you...you little punk.
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