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Goodbye, Florida! Hola, Nevada! (chap 1)
3 reviewshmm...summaries. Not too good @ them but I'll try. this is my 1st fanfiction so please tell me what u think. this is a story about a girl who moves away from her sucky life in Forida 2 a new life i...
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Lovers and Friends
(#) xxACoalminexx 2007-08-16
Hey Bev. Nice story. May I make a few suggestions though? well, when you wanted to say for example "I want to go home" you're saying "I want 2 go home". That's okay if you're like...IMing someone but in a story its a little unprofessional. Also, when you're writing numbers (like 2 bedrooms) you should always write out the actual number (two bedrooms) if the number is below twenty. I'm quoting my IRLA teacher, but I agree with her. These little things can make a huge difference. Sorry for the excruciatingly long review. Great idea, I'm gonna read the other chapters now.
XOXOXOXOAuthor's response
thanx for the advice!
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