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When Edmund is captured and imprisoned by the White Witch, he finds himself cast under the spell of the mysterious Phantasma.
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I Wont Forget You
(#) Elvenesse 2006-02-15
This was an interesting story! I noticed a few typos though - most noticeably in the story title. There are also inconsistencies in the use of contractions when Phantasma speaks.I Wont Forget You
(#) Enelya_Linde 2006-03-27
Yes, the inconsidfjhsdlkjd GAH! Cannot spell, can I? Inconsistencies... likely spelled wrong, but not the point. The ' ' 's in contractions are a bane to any fandom, and a drawback to any fic. I found your fic somewhat original, yes, if based upon Movie!Narnia, and the line was well-done. I enjoyed.I Wont Forget You
(#) Elliekin 2006-05-07
I admit when I started reading this I thought it was going to be a Mary-Sue, but you walked the line well between OC and 'Sue. :) This was a nice fic and quite sweet (and it helps that Edmund's my favourite character :P). The only problem with it, I think, was some missing punctuation, such as 's. Apart from that, well done!I Wont Forget You
(#) SayoriWakaba 2009-02-26
At first I was confused by the beginning, because it sonded like a Mary-Sue, but then it changed and it was very moving. I love how you captured Phantasma's innocence and portrayed it. I absolutely love any stories that have edmund in them ( and you ask why, PSHH ;D), and this one is definitely the best I've read so far. I love it ! Please keep writing!I Wont Forget You
(#) mina09 2025-12-27
Hey!
I just read your story and honestly found it very engaging. The emotions, pacing, and visual descriptions are so strong that it’s easy to imagine them as comic panels. If adapted into a comic or Webtoon, it could definitely attract even more readers.
I’m a comic/Webtoon artist and I also work on character art, cover designs, and scene illustrations. If you’d ever like to explore this idea, we could chat casually.
Discord: minakn0ws | Instagram: eve_verse_
Your story is truly beautiful!
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