(#) Nightspore 2006-01-21I got quite a laugh out of this. Recognizing what it was waaaay before the clueless Arthur and going, oh no, oh no, oh no . . . poor, silly wizard, bless him.
"Maybe Harry, Luna and Gin (this nickname would finally be suitable) would become parts of a traveling circus, freaks that they are?"
Please write this, or dammit - I WILL. And no one wants that . . .
- Your formatting needs some work. Since ficwad has a tendency to eat tabs, I recommend adding an extra carriage return between paragraphs. That would make this much easier to read.
Numbers that take two words or fewer to say are best written out.
Otomogule. Thank heaven for dictionary.com ...but it's not in there. Unlike the other Arthurisms, I can't tell what this one's supposed to mean.
How can he have a tongue in each hand?
This would be funnier if the description of the object and its functions were a little clearer.
- As soon as you described the heavy metal cylinder, surrunded by guards in funny suits, I thought to myself, "Where on Earth did Arthur find a nuclear weapon?"
The radiation symbol only confirmed my suspicions.
Add Power and it goes BOOM!
This was funny and more than a bit distrurbing.
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