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A New Dream
(#) Coolone007 2008-02-12
This was a good start but it seemed that harry was too confident. He never exhibited these qualities why now?A New Dream
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-02-12
So wait, Hedwig was killed, and Harry seems to not be thinking about it at all? That seems off, unless he's being more controlled than he realizes. Nice way to get rid of the elder Malfoys here, and would enjoy seeing this a H/Hr/L fic, as those are the three closest girls to his heart in my mind. Looking forward to seeing more of this in the upcoming months, and to see how Harry does when his training is complete.A New Dream
(#) iamspammer 2008-02-12
why you evil person. why did you kill Hedwig? Bring her back. Make her a Phoenix.
Now that that's out; I think H/Hr/L is good pairing.
Waiting to see where you take it.A New Dream
(#) lycus 2008-02-12
Well that was an intresting chapter, but harrys' change in attitude was too sudden. maybe have him realise that stunningg an enemy doesn't work or have it that harrys new queen had forced her will on harry, and after the fact he went into shock so the reality won't hit him until later. and as far as hedwig I didn't see it so it didn't happen, plus tat would have been cruel to have harrys' relationship with hedwig improve just so that she would die is just wrong. and harry/hermione and luna I love it and I really hope that you have that as the relationship, you even gave a clue about how harry has some one who can calm him down even when he is in a rage that would be hermione, and the firts person to contact was hermione. anyway i'm enjoying your story and i'm waiting for the update.A New Dream
(#) Ryusuken 2008-02-12
Hedwig death is strange to say the least. The rest is pretty good. It makes us want to read more as soon as possible.
Abouth the pairings....let me see Harry geting both Hermione (I am a devote of Harmony, so...Hell yeah!) and Luna wich is quite a sweet character JK didnt use as she should have....count me in! Put those two babes on Harry's bed! He deserves you know! See ya soon!A New Dream
(#) Dark_Core78 2008-02-12
That was interesting but hedwigs getting killed? Come on. The Harry/Hermione/Luna is a great idea so I say go for it!A New Dream
(#) drifter 2008-02-13
Sad this can't be rated anymore, I think it very good.
That said, I have to agree with the other reviewers comments.
Harry needs Hermione for her intelligence and curiosity and common sense.
It was pointed out the Luna's eye were now white. That usually means that someone is a full blown seer able to see the lines of possibility. I think Luna could play a major part in guiding Harry.
(Grin) I think the threesome H/HR/L (possibly more)would be great. But that me, I like harems.
I also agree that killing Hedwig so soon after they have learned to talk to each other seems to be terrible timing. Course, I HAVE enjoy the stories when she comes back as a Phoenix. Either way, I think her opinions should be heard.
OK, Harry's attitude. I have all seven cannon books, and still thinks Harry was something of a wimp. But I agree that the quick change to "slaughter them" is a little fast. Course, the reactions of all the different ladies and teachers when he realizes what he had done should be interesting considering all their origins.
As indicated above, I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
May the MUSE be with you!!!
A New Dream
(#) dennisud 2008-02-13
I'm all for that trio as I'm outlining one for the three as well. A bit more background on his new teachers and of course involving Hermione and Luna in the trianing should be your next step as you whittle down Riddle's minions!
dennisudA New Dream
(#) Thelvyn 2008-02-14
I'm finding it a little hard to review this due to it's sharing with the-caitiff so I apologize if this comes across as being overly critical.
Firstly Hedwig - no offence but you should have taken note of not being able to kill her off and left it that way - JKR killing her off for no good reason was bad enough, no reason for you to do it as well - also given that you had Hedwig plot (ie the kindred talking etc) in the previous chapter it doesn't make sense to kill her off without a very good plot reason straight away.
Secondly the way Harry behaved and his powers this chapter. I think you've overdone them, especially the whole black jewel-like shield, as Harry hasn't got his jewels yet (not had his birthright ceremony yet) so shouldn't be able to do any black jewel type magic yet.
Thirdly I think you need to consider how powerful you intend to make Harry - in this chapter you have shown him display powers that in the whole history of the dark jewels trilogy only one other person has had - Witch - at the same point in their lives (ignoring that harry hasn't had his birthright ceremony yet). Remember that we only know of 3 other people that have wielded the black even after their of age ceremonies and don't forget what things they have done with that power. Saetan totaly removed a country from existance and Witch effectively and selectively destroyed a whole realm (world) so I think you need to decide what you are planning to have Harry do before you give him such dark Jewels.
Finally, Harry's knowledge - you have his bemoaning the fact that he hasn't got anything to help him learn dark arts in the first chapter then have him casting an aparently dark spell in the second - without any explanation of how he learnt it. Nor did he have a good reason to use it - casting dark magic in the middle of the street is generally considered a bad thing...
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