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Battered Hearts
(#) BJH 2008-02-29
Hmm, if I were to follow Occam's Razor, all things being equal the simplest solution is lost often the correct one, then I would say that Ginny came through the fire found Ron beating Hermione and stopped him, however in the fight they both recieved fatal wounds. Too simple.
The next step would be that Ginny tried to stop Ron, Ron killed her, Hermione got hold of Ginny's wand and killed Ron in self defense. Still a tad too simple.
How about a third party is involved, they have been repeatedly raping, beating and obliviating Hermione over the years, maybe even while polyjuiced as Ron. Ron too gets obliviated, perhaps to aid in the coverup. One day Ron comes home and sees it going on, there is a struggle in which Ron is killed. Ginny comes to the rescue but gets killed as well. Knowing that Harry will be there any second the killer flees before he can finish off Hermione. Sounds good but who is it?
It could always be Draco, he's such a bastard. It could also be Krum which would justify Ron's jealousy of him. But then again, Neville took down that Auror awfully easily didn't he?
I can't wait to see what happens next.Author's response
Okay, have you been reading my outline? Occam's Razor is, indeed, an element in this story - it's also a red herring.
There are plots within plots here, and you are the closest, so far, to sussing it out. Good on you!
Of course, now I will be forced to re-write the ending. . .
GGBattered Hearts
(#) jjracer24 2008-02-29
Good chapter. Well, I thought I had it all figured out but with BJH's review I'm at a total lose. Either way, I look forward to the continuation of this story.Author's response
Thank you. I think BJH hacked into my computer and looked at my story outline! I'm kidding. Just kidding.
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(#) Cateagle 2008-02-29
BJH laid out several possibilities that I agree with. Personally, unless there's evidence to the contrary, I'd take the first solution, followed by the second. However, this is harry Potter we're talking about and I suspect it might well be the third possibility. I would hope that the pensive memories would eliminate some possbilities, though if it is the third one and the perp is still polyjuiced, that could start getting problematic.Author's response
Thank you. Polyjuice, glamour, memory spells, just different ways to say BOHICA!
Expect the unexpected.
GGBattered Hearts
(#) Nautilus 2008-02-29
i don't think it was neville, and i'm guessing that the weasley family was involved somehow? how? i don't know... maybe have ron's curse backfire on him... though then ginny doesn't fit into the picture... not sure...
i personally don't like ron or ginny, so i'm trying to make them both bad guys, though i can't find a scenario where that happens.. damn.
anyway, excellent stuffAuthor's response
Thank you. I won't say who or what is the real culprit here, but expect a surprise or two.
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(#) Cateagle 2008-02-29
The odd thing is, from what we see in canon of Ron's behavior, I can't say that his abusing Hermione would be all that surprising. :( Still, given those facts, a party or parties wanting to make trouble would have all sorts of opportunity to do so. I wonder if there are any experts who can undo the oblivations that Hermione has been afflicted with? That would go some way toward reducing the universe of suspects. Mind you, this reader would have trouble expecting such violent behavior from Neville, but he'd consider it a low-order probability rather than a complete impossibility.Author's response
If it makes you feel better I will say that Neville is nothing more or less than he seems in this chapter. Call him quietly capable. A good one to have at your back when all hell breaks loose.
GGBattered Hearts
(#) ed168 2008-03-01
Given the events that happened at Hermione's home it does not make sense to bring her there when released from the hospital. It would be too traumatic so soon after. I would think Harry would have her stay at his place along with all their children to give her time to come to terms with the memory charms of apparent constant abuse and deaths. Also since her home is also a crime scene it seems too soon for the aurors to let people in.Author's response
You've made some good points here, and indeed one of them is part of the framework of the story.
After all, there has to be a compelling reason for her to move in with Harry, right?
As for the crime scene, this isn't CSI, it's a magical crime scene. The investigators are in and out quickly.Battered Hearts
(#) Vanir 2008-03-01
How's this, then? Harry did it! Multiple personalities! Or not.
Me? I'm the lazy kind of reader who's content with waiting for the truth to come in from out there. I'd like to point out, though, that wands aren't really necessary to a mage in trouble. Accidental blasting curse perhaps? Many authors have made a point of pregnant witches having an upsurge of accidental or wandless magic. As such, we're back with good old Occam.
VanirAuthor's response
You are tantalizingly close to the solution here, but then again, not.
Am I evil or what?
Keep reading, you'll see.
GGBattered Hearts
(#) Sch1av0na 2008-03-03
Well based on BJH and Vanir's thoughts, I'd go out on a limb and say that it was Hermione's unborn baby that did the final deed to protect itself from imminent danger. The question then becomes who's baby is it to be this powerful at this stage?
Other than that, you have to start bringing in outside players to the scene if anybody else is involved.
ChrisAuthor's response
/Dayum/, you guys are good. I don't want to post any spoilers here but I will say there will be no "surprise" characters coming in at the last minute. In my first outline I had Kreature respond to Ginny's death with explosive force, but then changed my mind.
I'm allowed to do that.
It's my prerogative, right?
GGBattered Hearts
(#) Cateagle 2008-03-10
Y'know, your answers on this chapter make it sound suspiciously like Ron has MPD, which would explain the different behavior as well as why Harry, who's likely only seen the one Ron, doesn't think it's him after seeing the memories in the next chapter. Quite a convoluted and interesting plot you're weaving, my congratulations.Battered Hearts
(#) twilliams1797 2008-03-10
I almost didn't read this, because I cannot abide violence against women.. now certain males, yeah..
I want to see what happens and how, so I will return.Author's response
I almost didn't write this for the same reason, I cannot abide violence against women, but in this case it's important to the story - you have to sympathise with Hermione and really hate what happened to her.
Stay tuned.
GG
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