- I'm all for intelligent!Harry or super!Harry, but what you're doing is just stupid. Your Harry needs a swift kick up the ass, I won't even go into the annoying scientific magic concept and even more annoying brilliant!Harry that figured it out at the age of 7 or 8 or whatever it was.
I find stories that start like yours do finish in dead ends, since there is no plot to speach of to drive the action and you'll have to use cliched plot-twists to keep things interesting.
All in all 2/5 until now.
Author's responseNobody can please everyone. If you don't like this then read something else.Or write something that pleases you and see how it turns out ne.
- Definitely an interesting chapter (I caught the Xavier Academy mention) and I wonder how well Minerva's going to be able to sell Hogwarts, esp. considering that Harry already attends a private borading school where he earned admittance on his own abilities. I can see her reporting back to Albus and the MoB giving Harry a "religious experience" (a "laying-on of hands" that rushes him through Diagon Alley and plunks him down in Hogwarts, all on the instructions of his "magical guardian" - or so Albus will claim he is). Force majeure like that will not set at all well with this Harry and likely will lead to some "interesting" confrontations later on. Given how Harry is already developing his abilities, that does not bode well for a lot of folk.
(#) red_jacobson 2008-05-09i'm really enjoying this story; but have to wonder; do the chapter titles actually mean anything? I realize they are mathmatical calculations; but considering I flunked 2d year Algebra twice (once in high school, once in college) I have no idea what they are supposed to mean.
Looking forward to more
Author's responseI was actually wondering how long it would take for someone to ask. Yes the titles have meaning.
Chap1: putting the pieces together.
Chap2: unknown quantities
Chap3: unending possiblities
Chap4: boiling point
Chap5: two parts to resolution
- I suspect the chapter titles are simply mathematic expressions of increasing complexity which could indicate the increasing complexity of Harry's thought proceses. Am I right? I do know that the title of this chapter breaks down to (X-2)*(X-3) but I don't see that signifying anything in particular.
Author's responseThe complexity isn't important just the expressions. The breakdown is actually the title of chapter six though because I'm going to finish up his pre Hogwarts workings and it's the second part of chapter five. Go back to red jacobson's review and the author's response should shed some light. The titles should make more sense in relation to the chapters' contents.
- You indicate that Harry will be going to Hogwarts. I wonder what house you will put him in. It maight be the standard for plot reasons, but i feel this harry wouldn't be suited. In this case, Ravenclaw or Slytherin would seem more likely.
Author's responseThere'll be a toss up between the two.
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