FicWad

Categories > Books > Harry Potter > Harry Potter and the New Powers

Reviews

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) einuom 2008-05-09

  the story is ok. could be better if the chapters were longer and had some more detail.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Cateagle 2008-05-09

  Some definitely amusing bits here, but, again, the whole chapter feels too rushed to this reader. You seem to be having a bit more fun, now, with cliches but you do need a light touch, there. As to the end, I'd be inclined to believe a descendent rather than a re-incarnation, though I could see either happening.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Mcmllnchrstn 2008-05-10

  good please update soon and try to put up longer chapter and more detail

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Mcmllnchrstn 2008-05-10

  Good please update soon and please try to put up longer chapters and more detail

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Marshmallow 2008-05-11

  Oh wow! It was made of love and gold? thats the best. I hope you carry on with this. It's a bit cliched, but I love it.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) GryffindorDragon 2008-05-12

  Not a bad chapter. That's an awful lot of money, isn't it? Well, it is Harry, after all. Keep it up!

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-05-21

  Good chapter, still too short.
  
  gunny

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25

  It seems that it's a re-occurring complaint about your chapters being on the short side. I've not seen much helpful suggestions either. What I would like to suggest is that you add more dialogue to your chapters. When you have more interaction, it brings more into the story as far as what is going on. Also, with added dialogue, you have the opportunity to describe your chapters point of view and underlying emotions. Food for thought.
  
  Geovanni Luciano

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) kaptin_hippy 2009-04-03

  Not horrible, but your ruining what it could be if you would just slow down and explain everything better. For Example, where did he acquire his staff or the knowledge to use it. Your chapters or too much like a list of events than a flowing story.

Sign up to review this story.