(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25It felt a bit rushed. That' all I will say on that. Two reviews above you responded to a flame. Do not give them the satisfaction of letting them know they get to you. You're having fun writing your story. You've got some really good reviews. Focus on that and keep writing. The longer you write the better you will get.
(#) silverthescribe 2010-06-30The story over all is good. The flow is a little off at times though and the all the "!" are a little distracting. I've never read a fan fiction with a emotional HP its an interesting change. However I do think Harry shouting I love you so soon was a bit off. Seeing how he seemed to be a little wary of people after his friends turned on him. I have a question though: Were they making out while covered in blood and guts,etc?
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