- great story!
nothing earth-shattering new so far, but good and solid written...
i think you made a mistake at the beginning of the last chapter. you said molly was the mother of 5 boys and 2 girls...i think you include hermione in that, but if you include harry as well it would be 7 boys..
(#) GryffindorDragon 2008-06-01This is pretty interesting. One question: if Harry has the knowledge from his future self, why does he have to take books from his family vaults (presumably he already knows whats in them -- perhaps you should have him start to take some books and then leave them behind for others he hasn't had a chance to learn yet) and why does he have to relearn languages? He would just learn the ones he hasn't learned yet. If he knows a language, doesn't he know it? The same with the device to absorb information; does he need to use it unless he absorbing new information?
I can accept Fleur and Tonks with Harry, but Hermione should be in there too -- she way too good for Ron!
Nine Horcruxes? Remus said Harry listed 8 but he only listed 7. I know you were thinking of the diary, but it isn't mentioned. You shouldn't presuppose anything.
- I see you worked around Harry's mistake of showing his new form to his relatives by just having Snape test for the truth and not actually view the memory. Why the additional horcruxes? Wasn't the original seven enough? Will Snape turn into an ally as he figures out Harry's childhood or will Harry wipe his ass first? I vote of a all out duel/physical fight were Harry wins and by doing so wins Snape's approval and support.(Don't think I've seen this done.)
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