Categories > Cartoons > Delilah and Julius
My last breath
8 ReviewsDelilah is dying, but she has one chance, one moment left...very dramatic sort of songfic, oneshot. Song by Evanescence.
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My last breath
(#) Trinda 2006-08-25 07:25:12 PM
SO SAD!
Made me cry, I just can't imagine Delilah without Julius, too sad for me.
You did a good job with it, I loved the story and the last breath being used to talk to Julius kinda thing. It was orginal.Author's response
Thank you, I surprised myself, since it turned out more sad than expected. And indeed, what's D without J?
The idea suddenly sprang in my mind, some days back, while I was listening to the song in the car. I'm very happy you liked it. Thanks again!
Ciao! xxx Tisia -
My last breath
(#) darks00 2006-08-25 08:12:51 PM
WOW. and I mean wow. I'm impressed, how you combined a story and a song so well together. It's so sad. Please make more stories...I wish this wasn't a one-shot, I liked it. I like Evanescence, too, lol
xxDarkness' KidxxAuthor's response
Thank you, your review really made me feel... okay :-D A great way to start my day. I even impressed myself this time, since my first fic hadn't worked out very well. This one was exactly like I wanted it, though it turned out very sad.
A soon as I've got a new, and great, idea, I'll probably write it down. Though it will probably be a oneshot again, I hardly ever write 'moreshots', to call it that.
And I'm totally smitten to Evanescence, too. Next to different groups of that sort :-D. Thanks again!
Ciao! xxx Tisia -
My last breath
(#) gucci84 2006-08-26 10:19:08 AM
I hate sad endings man. I'll pretend it was all a joke and she sat up throwing confetti everywhere. But otherwise, you described all the feelings really well. Your writting is really good!
-Gucci84Author's response
I hate them to, but no matter how hard I tried, I couldn't think of a happy ending, matching the song... And even if I could find something that would match the lyrics, then a happy ending wouldn't quite fit the song itself.
And thank you. You are one of the writers of this site I valuable the most, and receiving such positive commentary from you... It makes it worth to write more!
Thanks. Really.
Ciao! xxx Tisia -
My last breath
(#) vaiwandil 2006-08-26 04:53:10 PM
that was awesome! thank you for that story. It's not very comforting but moving and captivating.
but I got angry at one point: doctors and not even recognise belladonna? Hell this world is full of blockheads making the others suffer!
the song fitted in so well! sad but not slushy or something like that. great work!Author's response
Thanks! I know it wasn't really... real, but it was the first thing that sprung in my mind. And I always follow my first thought :-D. My explanation to make it sound reasonable: it is to easy. When you say 'poison' to me, I say 'Belladonna'. So, when it's that easy, doctors might not think about it?
...
Stupid explanation, but I was tired, okay? ;-)
Anyway, thank you very much for reviewing so positive, you really cheered me up in a time when it was needed!
Ciao! xxx Tisia -
My last breath
(#) DandJlover 2006-08-30 09:03:05 AM
I.am.crying.here! sniff I like how she told him in his "dream" and how time stpped! VERY original! I would rate it like that but I have no more rating points!Author's response
Thank you :-P I hate to admit it, but even I thought it was sad on some points... And thanks for thinking it's original, I didn't really know what to think of it, it just came into my mind, and I wrote it down. I'm glad the reviews are so positive! Thank you!
Ciao! xxx Tisia -
My last breath
(#) Delilah89 2006-09-01 01:45:47 PM
that was so sad cries i really liked this story especially when Julius was Dreaming. keep writing this was a awsome story -
My last breath
(#) panda_1418 2006-09-06 03:57:13 PM
that was soooo sad, but so good! I love that song, and how you put it in the story. Coodos to you.