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• Nephilim's Power

  (#) DarthRevan 2008-01-05

  Great story! And, I've an idea for Harry's next witch. Why not Emmeline Vance or Hestia Jones? I mean they're both members of the Order of Dumblefuck and they watch Harry (normally). So it would be relatively easy for Harry to seduce them and to make them members of his harem.

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) codyesh2 2008-01-05

  Once again I am liking your story more and more by the chapters. I thought the Hermione deal was genious and it shows his anger and dark side, The sex scenes in this chapter were very well the only suggestion I could give about that would be is to include more dialogue in the actual sex scene, Also I to believe that there shouldnt be every girl in hogwarts in the harem but he should get around to most but keep a selective few like you said, Also the black sisters should stay as a pair like the patil twins, I like you also like Ginny and dont understand why everyone hates her but I believe you did right by keeping her or using her in the story as part of the harem. Harry should seduce atleast one teacher throughout the story. Instead of slughorn you could have a hot sexy potions teacher, Other wise I am liking your story by the chapter and its easily getting into my top harem stories as it has a better plot than most and is well written, once again only suggestions I would have for sex scenes is even more detailed and dialogue durring sex (Moaning,Yelling,shouting,talking and what not because chances are they wouldnt just have sex and not a word go between them) Keep it up and update often as possible but dont rush your work

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) LDA 2008-01-05

  why I hate Ginny... hmmm, well for one the way she is written in so many fan fics she reminds me of a few of my ex's, the way JK wrote her well said it in your A/N other than she has a huge crush on Harry and that she is a moderately powerful witch the only thing she is noted for is being Ron's sister, the bat bogey hex and that she dates a few guys trying to get Harry to notice her... to me she is a psycho stalker fan girl who is after Harry's money and titles so she can get out of the poor house and lets not forget that her mother is Molly Weasley and well 95% of the time the daughter turns out exactly like her mother... so if that aint enough to kill her off turn her into a mindless sex slave that services everyone else..

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) pfeil 2008-01-05

  Naw, no need to kill off Ginny. I enjoy her being a slave =)
  
  You might classify me a Ginny-hater, but I mostly just get pissed that JKR seems to think she's a good match for Harry in canon. The problem is that she's just as you have her in this story -- basically without personality or any real use. (Well, besides perhaps breeding :P) Hermione's a much better girl, a better person for Harry, and worth so much more than useless!jealous!git!Ron.
  
  You don't think she's suddenly Harry's "destined soul-mate" or anything, which is my biggest Ginny-complaint. To pair her with any main character she needs to become a real person. If that actually happens, I have no complains about H/G, I just hate it when authors have him sitting alone at home and suddenly decide that he's going to marry Ginny, which happens FAR too often. With Hermione it'd at least no be completely ludicrous, since he actually knows her, but he never really talks to her. Not even in JKR's books, despite them supposedly ending up together.
  
  (That was kinda repetitive, wasn't it. Oh well...)
  

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) pfeil 2008-01-05

  Naw, no need to kill off Ginny. I enjoy her being a slave =)
  
  You might classify me a Ginny-hater, but I mostly just get pissed that JKR seems to think she's a good match for Harry in canon. The problem is that she's just as you have her in this story -- basically without personality or any real use. (Well, besides perhaps breeding :P) Hermione's a much better girl, a better person for Harry, and worth so much more than useless!jealous!git!Ron.
  
  You don't think she's suddenly Harry's "destined soul-mate" or anything, which is my biggest Ginny-complaint. To pair her with any main character she needs to become a real person. If that actually happens, I have no complains about H/G, I just hate it when authors have him sitting alone at home and suddenly decide that he's going to marry Ginny, which happens FAR too often. With Hermione it'd at least no be completely ludicrous, since he actually knows her, but he never really talks to her. Not even in JKR's books, despite them supposedly ending up together.
  
  (That was kinda repetitive, wasn't it. Oh well...)
  

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) M16totheface 2008-01-05

  I don't really think anyone hates Ginny for any reason other than needing a few people to hate. Granted, most people seem to think the 6th book relationship came out of nowhere and they hate that, while others think she pulled a Merope Gaunt and dosed him. Personally I'm indifferent to her. I like her better when she's dark, like I'm planning her to be in my future story. If she's a follower (goody-goody, dumbdore follower, etc.) in a story, then I'd off her without another thought. Anyway, these scenes were better, but I still feel they need a bit more fleshing out as you said. Good chapter. Keep up the good work, and I hope you keep these regular updates up.

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) M16totheface 2008-01-05

  Also, I have a "Must have"
  
  Patil twins. You can never get enough of them.
  
  You can choose not to put them in and I won't mind, but thats who I'm voting into the harem.

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) loonage 2008-01-05

  Hestia Jones is a good idea since the order is still using #12 and an extra auror to help with his training would be a bonus. This way Harry doesn't have to leave headquarters to shag his next victim and i hope you do a bit more of Ron bashing and have harry send pictures to Ron of him making Hermione and Ginny women... lol

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) Maverick512000 2008-01-05

  First of all good story and I think it's progressing well.
  
  Now as to why I don't like Ginny these are my reasons. Ginny seems to be this random character that JK decided would get together with Harry for no clear reason. I mean she is the sister of his best friend and when we are introduced to her as a character in book 2 she comes across as this star struck fangirl.
  
  Truthfully nothing else is done with the character till book 5. At this point she has made an astounding change from a traumatized, star struck schoolgirl to a powerful, self confident witch that "would be perfect for Harry". JK didn't give any real details on how this change happened. The events in book 2 are not enough to explain them because if anything that should have made her worse because now she would see Harry as her owe personal white knight.
  
  Jump now to book 6. In this one Ginny is now basically the head cheerleader. Every guy wants to date her and she is a living goddess. Throw in Harry's unexplained sudden interest in her, that whole "monster in his belly" shit still makes me cringe, and you can't help but feel you've missed something here. I thought for sure it would turn out to be a love potion or something used to explain this as there is no evidence in the books that supports a Harry/Ginny pairing, from Harry's point of view at least, until it's practically shoved down the reader's throat.
  
  Indeed the whole reason behind her being Harry's love interested seems based around that she likes him and she's a red head like Lily. This seems to be a strange theme JK was going for as we are constantly reminded that Harry looks like James. She seemed to be very insitent that Harry and Ginny be seen as James and Lily 2.0
  
  To sum it up for me it's not that I so much hate Ginny as it is she gets far to much credit and is used way to much when from books 1-5 there is no real evidence that supports a relationship. Hell Harry had more heart to heart moments with Luna than Ginny up until the clusterfuck known as Half Blood Prince that is.

• Nephilim's Power

  (#) soekhoe 2008-01-06

  I can be called a Ginny-hater but i got my reasons.
  Harry never geve any indication that he liked Ginny but then out of the blue he kissed her(An effect of love potion?) Or he gets angry when sum1 else kisses her.
  
  Anyway i just hat the slutty way how Rowling got them together, so no need to kill her off, good chapter

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