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After Maturity16 reviews
Harry finally wakes up and gets a big surprise.
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-07-27Yay Dr Bombay, LOL. Fun part here, and glad that Harry and Hermione are officially together now, and can't wait for the nastiness that some folks will have about that when they find out.
(#) dennisud 2008-07-27I can't wait to see how the British Wizarding world will react to these two and will we see more references to my favorite American 1960's witch???
Could be fun to see how Tabitha is!
(#) Vanir 2008-07-27Just who can resist Dr. Bombay?
Erm. I just love this story, and i do love the whole Bonding thing as well as the inking. Everything here has such a living feeling, so that you can almost smell the warm oil from the bike. Just kicking back now, enjoying the ride you bring us. Thanks
(#) DavidMPotter 2008-07-27I loved the Dr. Bombay reference! I am so "Jonesing" for more of this fic! BRAVO
(#) jump_jives 2008-07-27Another excellent chapter. Like Vanir, I enjoyed how you portrayed the bonding. I also thought it showed a touch of realism for the mayor to be reluctant to marry them at their age. I am kinda looking forward to them meeting up with the Warlocks again, and especially their return to England.
I'm also glad that you acknowledged that a back piece tattoo would require a number of visits. Even if Harry could handle the pain, even a small tattoo can take hours, depending upoon the level of detail. I have a 5" x 2" tattoo on one calf that took three hours because of the level of detail involved. My first thought when you mentioned tattoos was that you should handle the amount of time by using a magical tattoo artist, however I quickly realized that would not work since a magician might recognize that they were covering runes, even if they didn't recognize the specific runes being used.
This chapter had fewer errors than the last one, and the ones that were there, were very minor (punctuation mostly - a couple missed commas and the like). As I offered in my review for "Family surprises" (which by the way I would love to see you continue despite the fact that it was supposed to be a one-shot), if you would like a second set of eyes drop me a note and we can discuss it.
Plot point issues:
Since this is after their sixth year, I take it you decided to either ignore that they already knew about horcruxes or have Harry and Hermione lie about what they knew. My guess was that their were hiding what they knew from Bill and Fleur, however that was not entirely clear in the story.
Also, for Ginny she would have went to Egypt after her first year as the trip was prior to Harry, Hermione and Ron's third year and she was a year younger.
Having said all that I must, again, say that I am really enjoying this story and can't wait for the next chapter.
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-07-27Very interesting update, there wasn't a bit of it that I didn't enjoy. Hopefully we'll see Harry and Hermione reunite with the rest of the world in another few chapters.
Looking forward to more.
(#) jabarber69 2008-07-27Bewitch much! great chapter, thier married, but I dont remember but do they know that remus, ron, gin and others were spying and dosing them?
(#) Cateagle 2008-07-27Ohh, a very nice chapter and I loved the level of detail in and manner of their bonding; I doubt that anyone or anything is going to break that bonding. THe honeymoon and the rest of their travels were pretty enjoyable, too, and I loved their gettign tatoos with a purpose and some very nice dragon hide outfits.
It'll be interesting to see the reactions when they join back up with the Warlocks. Even more interesting will be the reactions when they return to England and various folks find out just how thoroughly their plans and machinations have been set to nought. I rather suspect that there's also going to be considerable surprise that Harry knows that he was a horcrux and that he isn't, now. More to the point, the fact that Bill knows about the situation and is able to help them is not going to set well with Molly; not that she can do anything. I think the fact that Harry & HErmione are bonded and married is really going to stress out several Weasleys as well as a number of other manipulators.
(#) LordSeagen 2008-07-28Very good Chapter. I really love your story. Keep up the good work.
(#) michae1ange1o 2008-07-28Nifty!. Nice change in Remus, I don't believe I have seen him written like this before. I love this type of story where Harry just up's and goes on holiday, like 'Make a Wish'. Will there be more TV/Movie/Book crosses in the future?.
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