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  (#) Wonderbee31 2008-10-10

  Well, Remus sure shot himself in the foot with an AK-47 on full auto imo. I understand how bad things got in England, but he sure should have known that whatever training Dumbledore was giving him was minimal at best, but hey, maybe if he'd been there for Harry after third year like he should have been, there might have been more there. Liked how Bill handled him, and glad to see that he got some sense smacked into him somewhat, and to see this different view of how to get rid or Voldemort and his horcruxes.

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  (#) OdinMage 2008-10-10

  I LOVE this story, glad to finally see an update, keep up the good work! And KEEP WRITING!

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  (#) Snowdove30 2008-10-10

  I was very thrilled to see that this was updated. So glad this wonderful story was not abandoned. Remus is such as ass :( I agree with Wonderbee, if Remus had been their for Harry all along he would have known about the lack of training. And Dumbledore's taking an entire year to tell Harry about the horcruxes instead of a couple of hours. Hope Harry doesn't forgive any on them anytime soon. Can't wait for the Order to see the new Harry with backbone and some serious power.
  Thanks for the post.

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  (#) rtc5873 2008-10-10

  I was pleased to find this story updated. I like the unique premis and the realistic portrayal of Remus Lupin.
  Sincerely,
  John

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  (#) Cateagle 2008-10-10

  My, my, Remus, that couldn't have been done worse if your name was Ronald Bilius Weasley. It should be interesting to see Harry's future dealings with Remus, I suspect the best "wolfie" can hope for is formal and cold. If he's been part of Dumbles' "inner circle", he should know what training, or lack thereof, Harry received at Hogwarts; I don't think he and the rest of the Order of the Fried Chicken are going to appreciate the new and improved Harry. On the other hand, I'm not sure Harry's got incentive enough to do more than go back and retrieve Hermione's parents before leaving wizarding Britain to their justly earned fate.

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  (#) ROBERT_1958 2008-10-10

  Great story.
  
  Dumbledore needs to goto Azkaban for putting Harry with the Dudleys, as well as the Dudleys to goto Azkaban for what they did to Harry.
  
  Where are Dobby & Winky?
  
  
  Harry needs to get help from Her Royal Majesty Queen of Britain, Canada, Australia, New Zealand, Jamaica, Barbados, the Bahamas, Grenada, Papua New Guinea, the Solomon Islands, Tuvalu, Saint Lucia, Saint Vincent and the Grenadines, Antigua and Barbuda, Belize and Saint Kitts and Nevis, The Duchess of Edinburgh, Princess Elizabeth and Princess Elizabeth of York, Elizabeth II to kill Voldemort & his Death Eaters.
  
  Harry & Hermione need to stay out of England untill Harry is ready to kill Voldemort & the rest of the Death Eathers.
  

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  (#) jump_jives 2008-10-10

  Excellent update and, like the others, I was starting to get concerned that this story had been abandoned. I really enjoy this story and hope to see another update in the near future.
  
  Your writing does seem to be improving as the only issues I immediately noticed were some relatively minor punctuation errors (for example - "Merlin, I’m male. Put something on that shows me some skin and I’m happy") and a couple places where I had take a moment to figure out exactly who was speaking.

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  (#) JVTazz 2008-10-10

  I will admit that while this is a good story I'm somewhat disapointed that you've got an X warning yet nothing seen so far warrants an
  X rating. Still a very good story otherwise.

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  (#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-10-10

  Is there any special reason that you decided to put Remus' character through a blender in this update?
  
  Him aside, it was a pretty good chapter.
  
  Looking forward to more.

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  (#) Cateagle 2008-10-10

  I caught minor typoes and punctuation problems throughout (not enough to jar my enjoyment, just to stand out). For instance:
  
  Remus for Merlin’s sake man quit shivering when I say Voldemort your embarrassing yourself!
  
  Should be punctuated:
  
  Remus, for Merlin’s sake, man, quit shivering when I say Voldemort; you're embarrassing yourself!

  Author's response

  Thanks for the comment I had it punctuated differently but didn't want to use commas excessively.
  
  BTW: I've found that having Word speak the story has helped me catch word usage errors now I've just got to use it on the entire part not just where I'm concerned.

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