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Fatal Facination
(#) endofmylife 2010-03-22
update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update.......please? :DFatal Facination
(#) mysilentromance 2010-03-22
jaw drops Wh-what?! Ayln just-WHAT!?
Goodness, this story is so exciting!
You're a great writer. You truly are. And I don't know what else to say because that ending just left me speechless.Fatal Facination
(#) GoddessFire 2010-03-22
Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omg! Omh! Omg! Omg! Please say u r gonna update soon!. And no-that chapter didnt suck! :-)Fatal Facination
(#) Fantasy_Fairy 2010-03-23
What a GOOD CHAPTER!
Srsly.
One thing i don't get, why did they not use a condom? Do people not get pregnant anymore? idk idk.
Its good that Alyn is actually fighting her feelings for Gerard, it would be pretty boring if she just submitted to him. I'm slightly surprised she doesn't think about Ray or Frank more though.
I guffawed at Gerard at the end there lol! He had a tough childhood and all, but when he said something like /why could he not be loved?/m, i was just thinking, maybe because you killed Alyn's best friends? Best way to worm your way into her heart ovio.
More soon please :)Author's response
I know right, i thought that after i posted so i felt like it was a shitty chapter. also... since you ask about the condom i might as well tell you that you are on the right track with your comment... lol.Fatal Facination
(#) nukyster 2010-03-24
Kay I love serial killer fic, it's I think one of the intenses things to read and I love getting into charachters minds. I've been writing a serial killer fic for a while, but that's not so not the point. I really LIKE that indeed Gerard seems to be a 'hopeless romantic' he doesn't 'seem' to be killing because he loves all the blood and the gore. He likes the attention he gets from the girls right? Their full attention, he sort of reminds me of a highschool shooter. You know those kids that kill half a school just to make the world to notice them. Kay I am obsessed with mental illnesses and disorders and yeah serial killers. (I also tent to ramble so this is going to be a long reply/review, still new at this site dunno how you guys call it over here) Anyway, yeah I once attended a class about school shootings the how and why. Fucking interesting, the whole 'now you will notice me' struck me because I hadn't thought about school shootings other then revenge, a pay back. I never thought about people being so left out that they could so such thing to get someones attention, make everyone see that their alive. You're Gerard reminds me of that, notice only me, love only me, fuck only with me, cry for me, be there for ME. Make sense I guess, I mean he pretty much got 'backstabbed' by his baby brother although his bro couldn't help being sent away to camp and prob had no clue what happened. His mother also stabbed him, in his heart becaus she wouldn't believe him, his dad was the whole start of his problems so he was pretty much left all alone. Then that bitch who told him she love him, would be only with him, would have sex only with him, acted like she cared about him, stabbed him as well. So in return he stabbed her and she bled only for him.
Hmmm and Alyn, I think it's a little too early for stockholm syndrom, but she has been pretty much obsessed with him and vise versa, so it's not THAT weird she feels something for him. Indeed he is the ONLY person she can talk to right now, but besided that she has been obsessed with him. I know this won't be the same but if my favorite actor would kidnap me I would scream bloody murder to get free (or maybe I will). So I sort of get that too and Gerard hasn't done 'much' harm to her yet. Sure he killed her friends but I think something like that won't get through your skull into you really see their dead bodies and she has been through so much that she prob blinks out a few things to coop. (yeah this is going to be a long reply, hopefully you will not be annoyed by this I just really like to comment on interesting stories like these) and besided nearly roasting her face he hasn't tortured her and he didn't even raped her right, sure she wasn't asking for it but... hmm not touching that subject.
Point is, this story is fresh. I like that your serial killer isn't completly cold or dead inside. In the first few chapters I wondered if he was a crazy psychopath, little like the Joker with his rymthes and nasty sense of humor. Now I wonder if that's all a cover up and if he indeed is a hopeless romantic craving for his victims complete attentions. I also wonder if he's going to kill her or not, if she's going to escape or not or if maybe she kills him. Pretty much doubt that their going to get married and start a family, although they didn't use a condom so who knows.
Love your serial killer, victim and story so far, hope to read much more!
X NukyAuthor's response
I really do honestly appreciate your long reply. I am glad that you find this story interesting I was thinking that I was losing some of my readers along the way. But reading this gives me confidence. Yes I am just having Alyn conflict with herself, because I also feel like she is too soon in this to show more Stockholm Syndrome symptoms. The thing I keep having trouble with is how to "further" Gerard's character. How can I one up, if you will, the other chapters. So its a but difficult. And that is also the thing I do not want to soften him up completely I want him to be very complex and not give into Alyn as quickly as she might be giving into him. I need him to do more. I am thinking and now i am even DREAMING about these situations, I had a dream last night about the Pregnancy thing, plus a diff dream of being kidnapped blah bla bla, so the story is a huge part of my mind. I think I might be either OVER thinking or UNDER thinking. Over being as I am trying to hard to make the story all fit, but UNDER thinking how to develop the characters more. I love the long replies and it is awesome to find someone who shares the same interest in mental health, we should totally do a collaboration one day for a story!
~BandiitFatal Facination
(#) nukyster 2010-03-24
Hmmm yeah I know what you mean with over and under thinking. I have a bit of the same problem, I basically have the whole story wrapped up in my head but now I have to write it down and I don't like to write 'boring' parts. You know when you need to explain and insert their information in a good interesting way and blaaaa... I really hope you don't give Gerard a soft spot, I like him being unpredicatble and personally I would be bummed if he would act like a love-sick pup. But I am a big fan of angst and all those weird psycho things, can also love fluff and sugar-coated but that doesn't really fit with this story if you ask me, personal oppinion. Girl, you know I've been thinking about this story since I finished the last updated chapter. Because I sort of place myself into their situations. and if I was Alyn I'd simply try to survive and playing slut, yeah if that's what it takes. Gerard, I'm still not sure what is deal is, is he in love with her (hope not) is he just completly obsessed with her (which is funny because she's obsessed with him, it's like a celeb stalking his stalker)or is he just a bit shocked that someone didn't react the way he figured all girl would react to him (the pessimist!) bet he didn't see this twist comming:P Awww I really love his complex and that he sort of somewhere has a human side dying to get out. Owh and for I forget! You really gave me a lot of insperation to continued my own psycho fic so thank you for writing this!
and since I'm the noob around this site, aren't I suppose to get a mail telling me someone review or replied to me? Like how does it work, do I need to search my own story if I wanna check if someone reviewed?
that was all for now, good luck writing!
X NukyAuthor's response
I am actually new to this site too, so I do not really know all the ins and outs yet. Yeah I hate writing boring informational parts. Like when I was writing about Gerard's child hood! ugh! I thought it horrendous! Yea I wanna work on his complex more and more, I like it right now, and How I wrote the story was, it was just a basic Idea in my head, and when I sat down to write it, I wrote what came to me. It was sort of spur of the moment writing, and now I am paying for it. Because now, everything has to string together some how. So I sort of shot myself with that one. I am glad I inspired you to write your fic! I am gonna love reading it if you post!
Yea the next chapter is hard, I really can not skip into months, I SHOULD be going back to the police and writing about them, and It would be sorta soon to see if Alyn is pregnant, ya know? so it is kinda hard. Since this is my first story I suppose I am living and learning from my writing mistakes. Thank you for the update I will always reply to your reviews. Yea I never get an email telling me if I have a review or not, so idk bout that.
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