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A multi-chapter, 'sorta' crossover, HP/SW, but not exactly. Harry/Hermione, some Dumbles bashing, the Weasleys are on his side. After being beaten to death by Vernon, Harry is faced with ...
(#) David3560 2010-04-03Please update soon so far this story is great!
Author's responseMore in a few days.
(#) HallowsNotHorcruxes 2010-04-10Alorkin, I've read your stories, and really like them, but I can't help wondering why you dislike DH and the Horcrux plot line so much. It's not like it was something randomly added. No offense is intended, I just would like to know why.
Author's responseI'm glad you enjoy my stories.
As to your questions, I despise HBP, because Rowling turned the whole thing around. It started off as a light hearted adventure story, not a romance.
Her intention was to have Harry fall for Ginny and Ron and Hermione together. Unfortunately She failed to develop the character of Ginny Weasley /at all/, leaving us instead with a Mary-Sue of the most blatant sort.
In the first four books, she is either a background character, a damsel in distress or invisible.
In Book five she becomes the wonder-girl, literally able to leap tall buildings, etc. Nowhere in canon does it say she has the slightest interest in Quidditch, even on the three occasions where Harry visits the Burrow, and she could have shown him her interest. Nowhere is there any indication that she's anything other than Ron's little sister.
In book six, she is even worse. She suddenly decides to make Harry jealous, by snogging Corner and Dean. What kind of basis for a relationship is that?
HBP also takes the only developed female lead and has her brains leak out her ears, abandoning Harry because she's jealous. Where in canon is that supported? Hermione has supported Harry since the very first, even when he turned on her for it. Suddenly she's jealous that he's doing well? Her argument seems to be "Because it's not the 'official' instructions, using them is an academic crime!"
It's interesting to note that love potions are covered sop thoroughly in HBP while several of the main characters are acting like they're under the influence of narcotics.
DH is actually a decent story, with the exceptions of the Goldbergian plots and schemes the trio come up with to gain information, or in the case of the locket, steal.
Another, If Ron had left me on my own, to literally save the world, simply because he was hungry, I would have closed the door...and locked it. this is the third time he as divorced himself from Harry for his own selfish reasons. That is a friend? I don't think so.
the ending was entirely ridiculous. Who would have thought, after Dumbledore's lengthy discourse on love, that the 'power' was sheer dumb luck.
I have thirty seven other reasons to despise the two final books, but we don't have enough room here.
Sorry, forgot about the horcruxes. It's along the lines of my first complaint. While they were a -minor- part of the storyline, as introduced by the diary, there was no real indication they were going to be anything later. Dumbledore decides to tell Harry about them only after he has condemned himself to death, through his own carelessness, and even then, he refuses to tell Harry anything useful. His Psychobabble 101 class seems more designed to get Harry to understand and even sympathize with Riddle than to destroy him. Why didn't he tell Harry anything before? He could have at least tried to prepare Harry for the inevitable conflict, but no, he kept every secret to himself, trusting in his pet Death Eater instead.
(#) oximoron 2010-04-10I read the premise of this story and had no intention of reading until I saw who the author was. Now I am thankful for having read it. Please continue providing excellent writing.
Author's responseHello Oximoron. I must thank you for reading despite the somewhat lacking intro, and thank you for letting me know that my nom-de-plume is enough to get you to read. Wow! I don't think I've ever received such a nice complement before.
(#) kreep13 2010-04-12This story is great! I can't wait to read more.
Author's responseThank you. More is on the way.
(#) HJHOWE 2010-05-14Love the first nine chapters to date and hope you post more soon.
Totally agree JKR let someone ghost write book Six and Seven. That and the love potions and the hints at a Potions Molly from Canon (or at least the HP Lexicon means that we have carte blanche to think the worst of both Dumbles and the Wizarding World.
Author's responseThank you for your kind words.
Actually, It's the only way to account for the hard right turn she made. I figure she paid some 13 year old FF writer $100.00 for both books and went on tour. Incidentally, I picked up no less than seventeen different ideas in book seven that appeared in fanon by book five.
(#) Steves_Place 2010-05-18Alorkin why don't you post these stories also on your Fanfiction.net account assuming you are the same Author with the same name?
Looking forward to reading this one too now that I found it.
Steve aka Steve's Place aka
D.J.J.L.D.H.B 'M-PC' 7th STEVE --> on FFnet
Author's responseThat is indeed my site (and my painting).
I initially began posting on FicWad, because FF.n had some rather draconic policies in place concerning complaints. Instead of investigating such complaints, they would simply yank the works of the (complained-about) author from the site, leaving said author no recourse.
Since then, they Appear to have eased back on those restrictions, so I might give it a try there.
(#) Teresa 2010-06-04Ponders......if Fawkes is the "inside source" does that mean he's the Wizarding World's version of "Deep Throat"? Would that make Luna his "Bob Woodward"? He'll need a code name........ Then again I was also thinking he's like a deep cover operative a la James Bond; just with a "licence to flame"! After all, he did have a rendevous with that female phoenix in Japan, and I'm sure that he knows several more in other places! :)
Author's responseEven when that came out, I thought whoever came up with those names should have gone further than his favorite theater.
I intend having Fawkes 'go undercover' as it were, and for the time being, he'll appear to be the same, but that will change in the later chapters.
"My name is Fawkes...just Fawkes."
I'd think Fawkes has several Phoenix friends throughout the world. (Would be funny to have him and Luna arguing in their inimitable fashion over his promiscuity.)
(#) roderickt93 2010-06-12this story i really good more please
Author's responseTHhanks. More is on it's way,
(#) Steves_Place 2010-07-01Thanks David for letting me know about FFnet. I see no reason why anyone should complain about any aspect of your stories to the point admins might delete them. I have heard this before though.
It is likely the most popular FF site on the web and, at least from my point of view, it is so much easier to find writers and their stories when posted there, and get notified about new updates. It's just that it is my personal preferred FF web site.
Anyway, I look forward to seeing your stories posted there if and when you feel you can do that.
Jedi Potter is a really good story and I am glad I stumbled upon it when I did. After that I looked over all the other stories you have posted here and saved a few of them for entertaining reading.
Good Luck and take care David.
(#) Steves_Place 2010-07-01PS. . . I like your painting.
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