- Wow!!!! I'm impressed. This is really well written, I was completely drawn in after one paragraph. I love how you write the action scenes; they're exiting, without being over detailed. Hurry and post the next chapter, 'cause I'm dying to know what happens next.
I also like how you're critical of religious men, without being critical of religion. Your concept of his magic being an extension of Goddess' power is good too, different from a lot of fantasy stories I've read. Grin I love your girl God, it seems like in a lot of stories I've read the only time you get female deities is if its in a polytheistic religion. (Of course, it could be a polytheistic religion, with the other deities being unmentioned…oh well).
Anyway, I’m really enjoying it so far, so keep going! ^_^
(#) minkhollow 2006-05-02...Okay, you've got my attention. This is great - funny and intense all at once.
There're a couple moments where you have homophones (reigns/reins, and donning/dawning in the first full chapter), but that was the only real problem I noticed, and it's barely a blip.
I'd like to know how your main character figured out the difference between what the church says their god wants and what she's really after. (And is it really magic if he's praying, one wonders? XD)
This is rather going on my favorites list. Brilliantly done.
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