Categories > Books > Harry Potter > JEDI POTTER
Chapter 11
15 reviewsHarry and Hermione have a little chat with McGonagall, and take a day off. He visits the queen, and explains the situation and then he and Dobby make a focusing crystal.
5Original
Reviews
JEDI POTTER
(#) erik 2010-06-06
Another great chapter, I especially liked the Guard's intereaction with Harry.Author's response
Thank yeeewww! I swiped that scene from 'Dirty Harry' as well.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-06-06
Heh, I rather liked that Prof. McGongall came to her realizations on her own, aided by the fact that a distracted Albus failed to renew the compulsions, and was much more open to their discussion; Harry has now gained a most valuable ally.
The whole scene at the Palace was fun. I can see the guards taking to hear what they've learned and revising security procedures and policies to provide better protection against wizards. I suspect it's been quite the learning experience all around. The discussions with Her Majesty were quite enlightening and I suspect Albus' power base has just taken another hit, especially after the Queen verifies that everthing he's told her is the truth.
Finally, we're seeing the training of the first elves to make the crystals and I reckon the advice at the end from Hermione and Winky is going to imporve the process flow nicely.
Finally, I was amused by their visit with her folks and the discussion there. I suspect he's going to have an "interesting" talk with her father in the near future. Probably a good thing that her father is an intelligent man who seems likely to hear him out before taking any action.Author's response
Heya Cat!
Yeah, I felt that if McGonagall found out any other way, Dumbledore would deny the information as being mere Propaganda. As you said, since it was Dumbledore's own damn fault she did discover them she will now, stand firmly behind him. I decided when I began this not to have her in the front ranks, but in a more 'subversive' role...first because most of the Deez were once students of hers. that would cause a conflict within her. Second, she's in her eighties. That might be middle aged for wizards but she's still past the time when she can effectively face multiple opponents with the intention of killing. A mistake in combat would end up with her dead and I'll need her to run the school, when Albie is neutered.
You're right. They're gonna have to come up with something to keep the wizards out. As it is, they have no defense against the Deez...or any other wizard for that matter. Perhaps they should contact a muggleborne or half-blood to help design such a system?
The Queen: Yeah, Queen Elizabeth is one of the very few national leaders I actually respect. She's always listened to her advisers, and as I understand, she will not tolerate lies...even little ones. With this new information coming to light, Albie has lost a great deal of his standing. Once she confirms that Harry is telling the truth, (starting with a quiet investigation of the Dursleys), she'll spread the word to other national leaders. Albie is going to continue to lose prestige until the very last. Then it'll be too late.
Elves: Yepper. Dobby is a little overzealous, but he's competent as all hell. Since they're going to concentrate on making the single stones, (which would still be able to deal with full power) It won't take too long. I did the math and with nine force sensitive elves, not including Dobby, and a half dozen others, the whole batch of focusing crystals can be made in 28 days, and give each primary elf a day off to recover, between each one. I figure it will get easier with practice and so, if they stagger their production, the primary elves can assist others during the process.
The added benefit is that the other elves can also help Harry make the other parts of the lightsabers. The hundred power cells will be delivered in the next chapter, and those elves with appropriate experience can help him grow the 'Organic Connectors', and those with tool fabrication experience can make the shells. The electronics are simple to assemble and since the lightsabers are designed to be used in all kinds of environments, I'd assume Yoda gave him ideas on how to shield them from magical interference.
Discussion: How do you threaten a kid who can use both a wand and a lightsaber. It's a good thing Harry respects Hermione, and that Hermione's mum knows. I have the feeling that both are going to be needed during that discussion.
I'm a dad. When my daughter went to her first homecoming dance with a guy who kept looking at her like a piece of meat, I took him aside and told him: "There are 26 bones in each of your hands. I can break all but eight of them without a hammer." Then I showed him my well-used, 28 oz, Fat Max framing hammer.
He got the picture.
Until next time...
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) ROBERT_1958 2010-06-06
Good chapter.
I have an idea, the next time DumbleDORK or any Death Eather steps into Gringotts, have the Goblins put DumbleDORK or any Death Eather on trial by the Goblins.
Why has Fawkes not unbond with DumbleDORK (for what DumbleDORK has done to Harry and others) and bond to Harry?
If Fawkes can not unbond with DumbleDORK, Harry needs to help Fawkes get free from DumbleDORK.
Author's response
Thank you.
While it would be fun, to have Dumbley and/or the Deez on trial, it can't happen...just yet. Gringotts is an embassy of a sort, but to try any wizarding national of sufficient prestige, or personal worth, would be fought assiduously by the wizards.
It could even cause another goblin 'uprising'.
Just now, as he has no gold available, he's considered Persona non Grata.
Don't worry. He'll get what's coming to him near the end,
I'll explain the bond (and my way of getting around it) in the next chapter.
Until then...
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) twistyguru 2010-06-06
Yet another excellent chapter. I especially enjoyed the interaction with the Queen, which I believe is neglected far too often in fanfics. I also like the way you've brought McGonagall over to Harry's side against Dumbles, and can't wait to see the inevitable confrontation between Professor Kittycat and the Old Coot.
The rapid updates are greatly appreciated.Author's response
Thank you.
When you're right, you're right. The queen is the monarch of her country. As such, she and her cabinet should be well aware of the wizarding world. According to everything I could find, all ministers are subordinate to the Prime Minister, but in that horrible pile of...typing, called HBP, Fudge and later Scrimgeour treated (presumably) Mr. Blair like an idiot who'd lost his village.
McGonagall: I felt it was better for her to learn of the compulsions on her own, or Albie could make the claim that she'd been hoodwinked by Harry & Co. That her discovery was due to Uncle Albie's carelessness, is only gravy.
The confrontation will take place, but it might not be as explosive as you'd hoped. After all, I don't want him dead...I want him to /Suffer/!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Wolfric 2010-06-06
Fine chapter. I liked the bits with the Queen and McGonagall. Thanks for writing. W.Author's response
Tank you Wolfric. Each of those parts will come in to play in the future.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2010-06-06
Pity Dumbles didn't meet the buisness end of McGonagall's sword, but I expect that she'll give him her opinion of him and his actions at the appropriate moment! No doubt she'll also approve of Harry's chipping away at him bit by bit, cats can be very patient while stalking their prey. Methinks that "Professor Kittycat" will add a few touches to the plots against Dumbles; since she's his "devoted" SIC!(snicker) She could make him look like a fool in front of the Board, the staff and the parents quite easily! I can see her using Mark Antony's technique at Ceasar's funeral to discuss Dumbles with various people; I've always loved how Brutus and the other conspirators were brought down with a few well chosen words! Harry's explanation of what his mother might have done that night also makes sense. Hopefully if Lily left any notes they didn't end up in Dumbles hands! He'd supress that information for his "greater good" in a heartbeat! There could only be one "Person who Lived" after all. As for Dumbles' final fate.....if he slips on a banana peel and impales himself on a ligthsaber well these things happen. There's no need to wonder if Peeves was given said peel and asked to get creative! Though Professor McGonagall's apprehension at the thought of a collaboration between Peeves and Harry is understandable! Harry's visit to the Queen was also well done; and in case Dumbles tries reaching out to other non-magical leaders though thats unlikely with his predjudice. Dobby and Harry's work with the crystals was also well done; and if the elves and wizards can meld like that it would give both an edge vs Voldy and company. Perhaps Hermione's discussion with Winky about the their bonding capability could play into their jedi training. By the by, will the Harry and the others also read things like the Art of War? It would lay a foundation for Harry's hope that the group would eventually become peacekeepers and diplomats as well as warriors when necessary. As always, this was an interesting and enjoyable chapter! :)Author's response
The Claymore would be too fast. Remember, I don't want Dumbledore to die...I want him to /suffer/.
Minerva will actually be one of the major players, in keeping Albie in the dark. She'll turn a blind eye to Peeves, and gradually 'downsize' Dumbledore's job.
After the events of September first, she will begin a whispering campaign to further erode Dumbledore's influence. By that time I want Harry to have a controlling interest in The Daily Prophet.
I haven't read 'Julius Caesar' in Decades. but one of my favorite passages is: "Let me have men about me that are fat, Sleek-headed men and such as sleep a-nights. Yon Cassius has a lean and hungry look,
He thinks too much; such men are dangerous."
I reserve the right however to steal part of the speech, suitably adapt it, of course, and have Harry use it. No promises though.
Harry's explanation as to this runic/blood ritual fits all the requirements of canon, and seems to make a great deal of sense to me. The glaring hole in Dumbley's story (and who else could possibly have spread the word?) is Lily's sacrifice. It's ridiculous to assume her refusal to allow Voldemort to kill Harry is what banished him. Unfortunately Rowling concentrated on Lily's sacrifice and completely discounted James', as she said: "Lily had the option, James was going to die anyway." It makes more sense that both were aware of the possibilities and both were involved. Both were highly intelligent and Lily was a near-genius, and though not canon, the most common back-story is that James was either an Auror or well versed in combat. Did someone 'influence' his actions that night?
I believe you're right. Had Dumbledore known about the ritual, he would have done anything he could to preclude its reuse.
The banana peel thing was actually a line I swiped from an old MAD Magazine issue on Star Trek, where there's a person on board with a contagious disease. Kirk is about to push him out a porthole, when Spock stops him and says: "You cannot push him out that porthole."
Kirk returns with: "How dare you suggest I would do such a thing? See this banana peel? He's gonna slip!"
Don't worry, I have something much better lined up for Dumbledore.
Minerva has good reason to be wary of Peeves. He has caused her no end of trouble nearly every year Harry has been in the castle. According to canon, only Dumbledore and the Bloody baron can control him. I wonder if it's the headmaster's position or something Dumbledore did in the past that makes him so afraid of the supreme mudwump?
On the other hand, according to Rowling, Peeves came with the building and like dry rot or leaky plumbing, he's there to stay.
I see him as the manifestation of all the mischievous and/or malicious feelings of a thousand years of teenagers.
Still, he can be influenced, as indicated by the bribes of Dungbombs and fireworks, he's gotten so far.
In a couple days, Dumbledore's word is going to be worthless to the Queen. She's gonna be mighty pissed at him for the years of lies he's told her. I wonder if she should fire him from whatever position he holds in her court (Royal Vizier or the Crown's Sorcerer or somesuch)?
Once she knows, other leaders will. when they do, they will contact their magical divisions and see if there is anything they can do. Bones will accept Auror and Healer assistance from them to deal with any attacks until this is over, but that's about it.
Dobby and the focusing crystals. I needed a viable way to produce so many in the time they had available. The only thing I could come up with is were the powerfully magical house-elves. Still, it works well intent story.
Winky will not be force sensitive. I'll explain that in a later chapter, and Dobby will be the only elf involved in the fighting. I explained that in the last chapter.
As the Art Of War is a favorite book, it will most definitely be part of their training...later. For the time being, he has to focus on calling upon the force during lightsaber combat. He may quote a few passages from time to time. And yes, it would.
Thanks for your though-provoking review.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) jabarber69 2010-06-06
now that was probably the most realistic scenario of the queen's visit that I have ever read in a harry potter fanfiction....Author's response
Thank you Jarbarber. I did a huge amount of research to get it just right. I'm happy my effort is appreciated.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Stormwatcher 2010-06-06
It has been some time since I read a Harry Potter fanfic that is as well thought out and enjoyable as this one. I have read hundreds, if not thousands of fanfics and I would have to rate this one in the top ten. Thank you for your hard work.Author's response
Wow! Just...WOW!JEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-06-06
Regarding using something of Marc Anthony's verbal take-down of Brutus from /Julius Ceasar/, Octavian's verbal take-down of Marc Anthony was pretty good that way, too. From the first, I can just hear "...and Dumbledore is an honorable wizard..." used as appropriate.Author's response
I may or may not. Harry is not a Jedi, therefore he can get away with the subtle sneers, but he wants to train Jedi, and so, he has to be a cautious statesman. Meh. He's got a year to figure it out.
Alorkin
Sign up to review this story.