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Chapter 15
20 reviewsA longer chapter. Training begins, Draco learns a painful lesson Cho shows some balls and Dumbledore has a really, REALLY bad day.
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JEDI POTTER
(#) Wolfric 2010-07-01
Good chapter. I especially enjoyed Dobby thrashing Draco. Thanks for writing. W.Author's response
Thanks, Wolf.
Drakey has had it coming for years, and who better than the Dobster?
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) erik 2010-07-02
A lawyer having that much fun and getting paid for it, should be illegal. Great update, thanks.Author's response
Awww! Everybody should have some fun...except the dursleys, I mean.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) MioneFan228 2010-07-02
Dobby is a baaaaad boy ;)Author's response
Naawww! 'E ain't bad, 'e's jes' misunderstood, is all!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) vheritas 2010-07-02
Excellent chapter and a rollicking read.
Loved Ron being told off, Dobby belting Draco, the Dursley's woes and Dumbles being shafted.Author's response
Thank you. I'm glad you're having fun.
Lessee...
Told off Ron........Check!
Draco abuse.........Check!
Dursleys hurting....Check!
Dumble-shafting.....Check!
Yup, Got 'em all!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Qellar 2010-07-02
Love this story.
What I like to see is since Dr. Granger is using the Force and is member of the Sport and Social group aka SAS is to have Dr. Granger get Harry in contact with more of the Sport and Social group members and see if they can use the force as well. Sometimes it is better to have blaster aka rifles and few snipers at your back in case Mr. Murphy strikes giving you FUBAR.
Who were those 4 eagle birds protecting hedwig? do not remember them being mentioned in earlier chapters...
Looks like Draco the moron, snape the idiot and dumbles the Dark Lord are having a bad day.... hope it gets worse... lol
Author's response
While a really good reccommendation, I'm trying to keep this group as small as possible. By my reckoning, roughly one person in ten thousand is magical,and I'm assuming that only one out of between ten and twenty magicals, is also force sensitive, it stands to reason that even with chance thrown in, there wouldn't be but five or six Jedi potentials in the entirety of the British military. It's possible, but not likely.
Mister Murphy will come to play, but Harry has Hermione to keep him occupied. (Not to mention Carolyn, Augusta, Amelia, Arthur, Algie, and Graswold.
Snipers: While an excellent idear, the venue for the final showdown makes that impossible...unfortunately.
Sorry.
The four Eagle Owls: They were extra's. Remember those dragon looking things from LotR?
Looks like Draco the moron, snape the idiot and dumbles the Dark Lord are having a bad day.... hope it gets worse... lol
It will.
BWAH BWAHAHA BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!
Glad you liked the show, and thanks for the review.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) CantThinkOfAName 2010-07-02
I love you.
I hope you continue this story. It's funny, exciting, draws you in and makes you want to get down on your hands and knees and beg for more.
Or maybe that's just me...
Keep up the awesome work and post again soon!!Author's response
Thanks. You free Friday?
I intend to. There's an interesting image! Hands and knees, huh?
It's just you.
Thanks for the feedback, and the next post should be next Friday.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) keichan2 2010-07-02
It was Dobby?!?! I can't believe it! (I thought it would be Tonks...)
And the hat's song... I can really see Minerva hyperventilating after something like this :-D
"GUY WITH MORE TITLES THAN YOU" Excellent :-D
I was honestly expecting Albus to find himself trapped in the Floo by some security measure... I can't imagine Bones as a minister not protecting her office... Must have been an inheritance from Fudge...
Anyway, thanks for the new chapter, and I hope to read more soon!
Author's response
Naah, it wouldn't be Tonks. She merely 'dislikes' him.
Now, Dobby...
I had a lot of fun making up that song. Minerva is aware of what 's going to happen, but still, something like that would definitely shake her.
Either that, or she was laughing so hard, she couldn't breathe.
"GUY WITH MORE TITLES THAN YOU" Excellent :-D
Thanks. Since Dumbley is so hung up on his status, saying that would be the fastest way to get under his skin.
She left the floo open on purpose. They wanted him there to make an ass of himself.
Thanks for your feedback. Next chapter should be up on Friday.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2010-07-02
Whistles........it looks as though Draco and Dumbles are going to have a very long year! I doubt that they'll learn from the situation, and when will dear Snape join in their remedial classes?! I loved the Sorting Hat's song and it's a pity that Winky couldn't get audio as well as the pictures. Dobby and Winky are excellent stealth operatives. Will Draco make it through a few classes before he's arrested? At least he won't have to worry about tests and homework in Azkaban, or getting the beatdown from a first year/jedi!(snicker) I bet the story will make the rounds for years, how Draco couldn't deal with a firstie! Hedwig's delivery of the envelope was also priceless, and I thought the escort had class! Dumbles must feel like the world is crashing around him between that impromptu meeting with Amelia and Harry, and the later set-to with Moody! Here's hoping that there will be many more moments like that in his future! The training scenes at the castle were great, and I liked seeing how several of the family members were able to contribute to the endevor! I'm looking forward to the "guest speakers" and future glimpses of Voldy-pain! The Dursleys scenes were well done, and I thought that Caroline's actions were perfect, there's nothing like seeing a person enjoy their work! Maybe Dudley can learn, if so he's definately smarter than his parents! As always, many thanks for the chapter! :)Author's response
Yeah, Draco's rep is in shreds. Nothing Daddy can do will help him out, since Daddy's on the lam, and Drakey's got a new tattoo.
None of the usual victims ar there to share his witty repartee during the extra torment classes, so I guess for the time being, Snape will continue to be his snarly ol' self. On the other hand, since Cho stood up to him in public, others might as well, Most of the story from here on, will be centered on the Jedi Training, with occasional forays onto the wizarding world.
Dumbledore will be getting reminders from time to time as to how he's lost pretty much everything, but he'll keep on trying. Gotta love a guy who don't know when to quit!
Although Winky took the pics on a muggle camera, in GoF, Colin said the trick was in the progressing. Sound? Well Harry does have a pensieve...
Dumbledore will do his best to keep Draco in the school. Since the Aurors will be waiting outside the fence with their nifty new 'Dark Mark detectors', I'm sure he won't mind too much.
Draco in Azkaban...
If the word got out in prison that he was trashed by an ickle firsty, his name would be 'Bend over, bitch!'
Thanks. I thought long and hard about the Escondido for Hedwig, and considering what Dumbledore could have done to her, I figured it was important to protect her as best I could.
About the only thing I could have added was Wagner's 'Ride of the Valkeryie'.
The gravy boat was a combination of two things, actually. One was an accident at the dinner table, many years ago, when my brother threw a breadroll at me. It missed hit the gravy boat and ended up doing exactly that.
The second was watching a seagull open a clam (or mussel, I'm not sure which) by dropping it onto a rock from thirty or so feet and at around twenty miles per hour. It hit the rock and busted open and the bird was on top of it in a second flat.
The incidents with Amelia and Moody were both carefully orchestrated...behind the scenes, of course. That's why Amelia was smirking, and why Moody seemed to have been waiting...
Glad you liked the training. My first days at the Regional Academy in Santa Fe, was very much like that. (We were in horrible shape!)
After I left the APD and joined the navy, I was in much better condition.
SEAL training told me I wasn't nearly as good as I thought.
Family: Who better than the ones who know...
'Guest Speakers': Will be used sparingly...and much later. I want the through Shii-Cho, and well into Makashi, or even Soresu, before new faces are introduced. When I do use them, it will be mostly to see how the students deal with multiple casters at the same time.
Voldys pain will continue, and often get worse. After all, Hermione's birthday is coming up, and Halloween Guy Fawkes day, Christmas, the new year, Valentines and, whenever wthey can find time to 'relax'.
I've already begun to get him 'fond' of the headache remedy.
Carolyn: Too many people give attorneys a hard time, until they need them, and then, bitch about the cost. My attorney Carolyn was a sweet woman on her sixties, when i met her, who specialized in family law and custody cases. Unlike most attorneys, she did her best to keep the men in the children's lives, often gaining custody for men in a time when that was almost unheard of. She loved my daughter like her own, and frequently babysat for me while I was doing my reserve time. In court, she was a determined bulldog who absolutely would not let go, until the case was decided.
The Dursleys: Like I told Axelrajr, Dudley can be salvaged. It's gonna take a hideous lot of effort, but he has begun to think for himself.
The elder Dursleys are beyond repair, but he is not.
Thanks for the loverly review.
Alorkin
I don't now how I managed to get Escondido for escort, but I apologize.
Program must have been written in California!JEDI POTTER
(#) axelrajr 2010-07-02
this has rapidly become one of the fics i look forward to seeing chapters of. every one of them has been fun to read. nice touch with Dudley. rather hard to treat the guy who saved your life as trash. even if you go to just being afraid of him...
that lawyer has rapidly become a favorite character too.
im looking forward to more soon.Author's response
Hey Axelrajr,
I'm glad you're enjoying the show.
I really, really wanted to hang Dudley, but I just couldn't. He's a product of his environment. He did what he dis as a child because 'daddy said it was OK'. That's not an excuse by any means, but is it a valid reason. Even in canon, when he began to think for himself, he was remorseful for his actions. As far as I'm concerned, his parent's are beyond redemption, but he's not.
Here, anyway.
Carolyn is a lot of fun to write. She's actually an aspect (carried to it's logical end) of my attorney, Carolyn Chapman, before she retired,
Next chapter should be up on Friday.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Celexs 2010-07-02
Draco gets a beat down by Dobby, and Dumbledore has a small panic attack. Everytime this story updates it get better and better, i look forward to see what you have planned next for training. I also like the idea of Tonks and Lupin as drill instructors.
CelAuthor's response
Hello, Celexs.
I'm glad you're having fun.
Draco has deserved a royal smack-down for years. I really can't understand why Rowling never let Harry pound that smarmy little poss pocket before book five. Le sigh!
Training will be a -much- milder version of the training I went through both as a SEAL and while I was with the Marine Corps.
I want them in shape, but I have to walk a very fine line to avoid boring the audience. Tonks, Remus and Mackenzis will center stage there. Hopefully they can make it fun for all.
Training will be vignettes, beginning with some PT, followed by hand-to-hand, in two weeks (subjective) time. After that it's back to PT and on Mabon, they get their lightsabers.
Tune in next week. Same Bat-time, Same Bat-channel.
Alorkin
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