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JEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2010-08-19
Hmmmm....if Voldy will just "know" that blood traitors ruined his raid, will Lucy be at the top of his list to torture again? After all, Selwyn's dead, and someone has to take the blame since it's never Voldy's fault! And as for Snape, that scum sucking worm deserves everything he gets and more! He'd better make replacement supplies fast! Will the new addicts start buying up all the supplies and make things harder on Snape? Pity that..... Voldy facing withdrawl. Of course, Snape might find that his last session of torture via Voldy was the "good old days" in comparison to what might happen with a desparate, withdrawl suffering dark lord. If Harry and Hermione's "exercising" gets even more intense he might run out hours after a delivery! Would Snape take the chance on cutting the dosage? He's scum, but not suicidal; at least not yet. On the other hand Snape and the other DE's might consider that facing the Grim Reaper is the safer option...... As always, your stories give me both enjoyment and interesting points to consider! Take care, and many thanks! :)Author's response
As I explained to Lycus: Basically, yeah. Lucy is actually safe for the time being. He's immobilized at Malfoy Manor, learning how to walk again. He'll come into play later in the year though.
I agree. Snape should be introduced to a specially commissioned level of hell, made just for him. I have no pity for him under any circumstances.
New addicts: Addiction is an interesting thing. the addicts have been created, but for the time being they aren't full blown. just a little twinge here and there. they can start off on the lighter stuff. As for buying...Naah. they'll jut steal the stuff...or try.
He's only concerned for himself. He believes in the dark lord's ideals, but when the chips are down, he's in it for himself.
Rather than cutting the dosage, he's going to try to substitute a different formula which is not so addictive. Since Voldy is already hooked, he's going to notice the difference and Snape's life is going to become that much more...difficult.
Thanks for the kudos. It's been a pleasure to write this.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2010-08-19
Just had this thought: Hary standing before a bunch of the DE's saying " the name's Potter, Harry Potter.....and I prefer my DE's sliced and diced, not stirred. Who'll be first?" What can I say, I love James Bond! Will Harry's R&D crew give him a suped up broom like Bond's Aston Martin? Shakes head at the thought of McGonagall and Flitwick as Q! :)Author's response
Naah! McGonagall is M! (See: 'Agent Double O hex' by KafkaExMachina on FFn. HE seems to have abandoned it, but what he's got ifs funny as all hell.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) slickrcbd 2010-08-19
As I can't find an easy way to respond to the previous review on this site anymore, I'll touch on that first.
When I tried the tape recorder trick my own tape recorder was 1 foot by 6 inches by 3 inches. The one I borrowed from my grandfather had been an expensive piece of equipment and it was slightly larger than a TI-8X series calculator, (TI-81 82, 83, 85, 86, or 89). I don't know why he was allowed to keep it when he retired, but he was. I do know it had been used in his office and was expensive for '80s technology.
I realize that the TI-80s calculators were mid-90s technology, but they are common enough among high school and college students for the last 15 years as to make a good comparison.
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I wonder why the Queen is demanding an explanation? Didn't Harry tell her that he needs time to train his forces because they are virtually all pretty much untrained children and the normal wizarding forces aren't under his command?
I'd say they were fortunate that the Death Eaters had a textbook case of murphy's law, as I understand normally live ammunition would be tightly secured at a training facility and would take time to open the armory and distribute it, during which the casualties would be much higher. Yet they happened to strike on the one night they are doing a live fire exercise. Not to mention picking the wrong target.
That might actually be something to consider, letting them hit a regular military base to prove that there must have been traitors to cause such horrendous casulties for so few dead muggles. They'll still take casulties in the end, but have the attack go well at first with many other soldiers getting killed because they have unloaded rifles or no weapons at all in the barracks (whatever is normal for the British Army).
Amelia on the other hand has more to answer for, such as why the Aurors didn't respond to spellfire in a muggle area. They can monitor muggleborns for underage magic, but they can't monitor Death Eaters for unforgivable in other muggle areas? Just how does that monitoring work? That should be a good question for Amelia. Perhaps they should refocus their survalience from penalizing muggleborns from using magic to monitoring for killing curses and other dark magic? Especially since Hogwarts is in session and presumably all the muggleborns are in school.Author's response
Yeah, during the seventies, my my cassette recorder was the same one. Panasonic, I believe. I'd imagine your grandfather had one of the first of the micro-tape recorders.
My 'good stuff' was on my Stereo, or on my 8" Reel to reel. (a machine I found busted n a dumpster and repaired.)
The Queen is less interested in Harry's explanation than Amelia's. She know little about the force. I'
d imagine she's seen one or all of the three Star Wars films, but in those first three, the force is presented as an all-knowing font of information that can help the Jedi take over people's minds and guide them in the use of magical swords. It really wasn't that well explained. What she wants, is to know why nothing was done to prevent her people from dying. She's pragmatic and understands that in war, men die, but she is more concerned for her people than monarchs.
Harry's explanation is going to be pretty much along your line. In addition, Harry has six functional lightsabers, (Harry built the rest as training units only.)and only Dobby has the qualifications he needs to go into battle.
Yeah, the Deez screwed up badly and the idiot who made the mistake, paid with his life. Unfortunately, Voldy ain't gonna be satisfied without his pound of flesh. This is why Blue-Cross won't cover the Death Eaters.
Unfortunately a regular army base wouldn't stand a chance. Not because they are not well trained, but as you said, the arms and ammunition are kept separate. They would also be facing a nearly invisible enemy far more mobile than they and well-used to striking and fading. By the time a tangible defense was arranged, it would be too late. Spec-ops, on the other hands are trained differently. More: they were already engaged in a live-fire exercise. The terrorists in the airplane were special mannequins, filled with sand and having cameras to record performance.
They didn't choose the 'one day' the SAS was doing live fire. Training facilities like hat base are in use pretty much all the time. Live fire exercises are quite common in such situations.
I intended to have Voldy draw back a bloody mitt every time he strikes. Having him hit an army base would guarantee him a solid victory. As for the wrong target, the Deez are bigoted purebloods, for the most part. It's not surprising that Selwyn mixed up the words 'special operations' and 'special needs'.
Just now, Voldy is going to have a temper tantrum, He'll try again with somewhat better results on the winter solstice.
Actually, Amelia was as much in the dark as Harry. I'll explain in this next chapter. Also, the Antiterrorist training area is a real one, and though it is 'nearby' a town, it is still very much isolated from said town.
BTW, your thoughts on monitoring mirror my own.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) juggler196 2010-08-19
Another good chapter in a story that has become one of the best I've read in at least 4 or 5 months. Please keep writing.Author's response
Thank you. I appreciate your kind words. -blushes-
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-08-20
The interview with the Queen should be interesting. Harry did warn that there were terrorists out there and is doing what he can to prepare to take them down; she can't fault him there given the time it takes to properly train people up. I rather suspect Amelia is going to be given royal direction to conduct a "house cleaning" to find out why spellfire in a muggle area wasn't detected and reported so that the Ministry could respond to it; that is going to cripple the other players in this game as some of their "cover" is gone. I also wonder if perhaps we may start seeing greater collaboration between the non-magicl and magical governments.
I find it interesting that Albus is going to Tom what Tom tried to do to Harry with that adulterated potion. Given that what goes around comes around, how soon before Harry, or someone, ends up "enhancing" Dumbles' lemon drops with purposed potions? It strikes me that such, if possible, would be a sneaky way to leach Dumbles' power, or something else equally important, away from him.
I loved that pureblood ignorance led to disregarding the difference between "special needs" and "special operations" and led to something of a debacle for Tommy-boy's forces. A more cynical person with a sense of humor might comment, "Isn't that 'special'?" I rather imagine that Tom's growing problems are not going to help his situation with regard to recruiting and keeping new troops.
Ernie didn't get all tat he deserved and I do hope some of the witches are waiting for him when he's de-tubed. Unlike the skivers, his behavior is not redeemable and he's paying for it. I thought the compliment to Megan was a nice touch as was the help in the Force for dealing with the emotions Ernie engendered.
BTW, the witch in the last group, Elizabeth Moon, was her name inspired by the writer of that name? Could be appropriate because I understand the lady writer is a former USMC officer (apparently that came out in a discussion with Jim Baen after he initially rejected her first Paksenarrion fantasy novel and said something about who'd believe women warriors). In any case, 'twill be most interesting to see if and how Ron and Seamus are fully redeemed to join Harry's forces.
It should be rather interesting to see ALbus trying to find out what happened on Halloween since Snape only knows the bare basics and he no longer has his sources in the Ministry or with the non-magical government. I'm sure that the lack of information and control, something he's always imposed on others, will vex him severely; good for him, it'll help him understand why others are often vexed with him and it is, of course, for the "greater good" of magical Britain.
The "fire fight" felt right and the families of the soldiers who died will at least know they died fighting terrorists not in some nameless action for some unannounced goal. I suspect, though, that any returned muggle-born or squibs in the military may well be brought together in a new joint operation to deal with these magical terrorists from the non-magical side; that could come as a considerable shock to Tommy and the purebloods (damn, that sounds like a band) and will likely provoke severe discussions and reactions that will be aided and abetted by their ignorance of the non-magicl world.Author's response
Harry did tell the queen that Tom might try to do some damage to the muggles, but he will tell her why he didn't respond to the trouble.
Amelia is in a similar position, from different sources. She and the queen have already been in contact(off camera, but I alluded to it earlier)an she has that injunction. By this time most of the overt and quite a few of the covert Voldemort sympathizers, have been located and sacked. there are a few, but they re of less influence than they n4ed to be.
The problem is, just now, the queen sees both magic and the force as panaceas.
As for the spellfire, that camp is in an isolated area for a very good reason. Live fire exercises are ongoing.
The cooperation between muggle and magical will begin, but not quite like you propose.
Since Dumbledore didn't know what Voldemort was planning the two incidents were actually unrelated. Both saw an opportunity to weaken or destroy their enemy and both used the same methods to do so. However, 'cause and effect' is the strictest law in the universe! The lemon drops will be playing a part, but it won't be potions.
Pureblood ignorance: Isn't it amazing how the combination of ignorance and arrogance has brought so many empires tumbling to the ground? Unfortunately, there will always be people willing to pursue the easy buck. Fortunately, by the time this is done, there won't be that many left.
No, Ernie didn't get all that he deserved, but he might have liked being spanked by all the girls in camp. This way, he serves as a warning to the rest that utter stupidity will not be tolerated.
Megan: One should recognize quality work when one sees it.
Elizabeth Moon. Yup. I didn't know she was a former 'Reen, but she is one of my favorite SF writers. Since JKR didn't give us a first name, I used one I already knew.
Snicker! I'm amazed Jim was dumb enough to say that, especially given that Anne McCaffey was already writing under the Baen titles.
Ron & Seamus. I've got some hard times planned for both, and both will show their character in the process.
Being as he's persona non grata at the ministry, Ol' Twinkles is gonna get nothing from them and Snape is going to be of very little use, as he only knows about the aftermath.
I figure he's going to take to drinking...again.
~...it'll help him understand why others are often vexed with him and it is, of course, for the "greater good" of magical Britain.~
The problem with Dumbledore is that he still believes his (former)press. Obviously, he is working for the 'Greater Good' and so anything he does is OK.
~The "fire fight" felt right and the families of the soldiers who died will at least know they died fighting terrorists not in some nameless action for some unannounced goal.~
I've been in firefights just like that. And the second part of your statement is actually going to be a specific point in the next chapter.
Forming a muggle/magical unit would be a long term goal, and not really in the scope of this story. Good idear though.
Tommy and the purebloods: I can see Johnny Fever saying: Now, we have a special treat for you, straight from England with their new hit: 'I hate Everything' it's Tommy and the Purebloods!"
As always, thanks for writing.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) twistyguru 2010-08-20
Yet another excellent chapter.
Here's a test for pain response that a Chief Resident of Surgery taught me years ago: clamp a hemostat down on the nipple.
I guarantee that this technique has a 100% accuracy rate in detecting people who are trying to fake unconsciousness (or a pseudoseizure).
And, I can't wait until Voldie goes into opiate withdrawal, which is not fatal--just awful enough to make you pray for death!Author's response
YEOWWW! (Winces in agony and covers both nipples!) Why not just stab electrodes into his scrotum!?!
While your method works, in combat, it is impractical.(Body armor and such things) However the hands are freely available.
I had to watch over my brother Joseph, in heroin withdrawal when I was sixteen. I think I'd prefer to keep him hooked, y'know?
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Disruptor 2010-08-20
It's been a wild ride so far.
I think that phony propechy that Dumbles cooked up might become real. Dumbledore is the Dark Lord in the prophecy and Carolyn Chapman is the one marked as an equal and the power that Carolyn has is the Truth. Did Dumbles kill Carolyn's dad?
People hyped up on drugs are impossible to predict. It might seem like a good idea, but Voldemort is going to make irrational and illogical decisions that will be unpredictable. Like sending a team of Death Eaters to set fire to the magical bookstore that kids buy there textbooks from or maybe destroy all the toliets at the London Zoo.
Still a fun chapter.Author's response
The prophecy has become real. By setting it in motion, Dumbledore made certain Voldemort would act on it. By acting on it, and marking Harry as his equal, Voldemort made it real. As long as he believes its real, it's real.
I believe Dumbledore is a dark lord. whether he's the one in the prophecy, or not, he's as bad as Voldemort.
Carolyn's dad: Undecided.
Irrational decisions: As a former narcotics officer, I know all too well, how unpredictable addiction makes one. I can arrange the arson, and blowing up the toilets sounds like a lark. the damage can be controlled, ans since the children are all at school, it would be relatively harmless. On the other hand, Borgen & Burkes is due for some 'spring cleanin'. Amelia has formed small rapid action groups, for instant response, and has enough extra Aurors on tap to handle any real problems.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-08-21
Er, Anne McCaffrey's work for Baen came, I believe, after this incident (since at least one work was, IIRC, a collaboration with Elizabeth Moon who was already a Baen writer by that point); still the preponderance of ms. McCaffrey's work, at least the f&sf part, has been published by DelRay (I don't remember if they published her romances or not - note, the romances are good reads, too). In any case, that was a story Jim told on himself and laughed about since, apparently, he wasn't alone since Tom Daugherty of Tor Books had reacted similarly.Author's response
when you're tright, yuo're right. I don't know anything about her romances, as I thought the scene between Menolly wand Sebell in 'Dragonsinger' was kinda lame, so I never pursued that topic.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2010-08-21
Regarding " Tommy and the Purebloods" ........ they'll never outsell the Beatles, the Rolling Stones, Elvis, or Michael Jackson! And just imagine Voldy as lead singer, Bella as his back up, Snape on drums and Lucy on bass...... and a chorus of the DE grunt squad! I can see Dumbles showing up as a guest performer! :)Author's response
Snicker!!JEDI POTTER
(#) twilliams1797 2010-08-25
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uMXpokrfblM&feature=player_embedded
I saw this video clip and thought of all your descriptions of the training and creation of Harry's Jedi
Author's response
Heya Tim!
OUTFRIGGINSTANDING! I'm nowhere as good with a staff, and as for blades, I prefer the rapier.
'Concrete Hustle' is also exceptionally well done. You'll find it on the drop-down on the same page. It deserves a look.
Alorkin
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