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Chapter 22
12 reviewsHarry tests Neville, Hermione and Luna, Rita gets a new bodyguard, Harry and Hermione discuss ‘tanking’ Ron. The ministry mostly accepts the squibs. The Dursleys return to Privet Drive, Dudley ...
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JEDI POTTER
(#) LordMesron 2010-10-18
Firstly, my sincere sympathies on the loss of your sister. Having lost both of my parents in the last couple of years, I kind of know how you are feeling.
That said, I liked how you dealt with Ron and Seamus. Hopefully, Luna and Neville will be enough to pull the two of them through it.
As for the return of the Dursleys, I look forward to seeing what happens with them in the future. Especially Dudley. I don't know why, but I always enjoy a reformed Dudley story.
I look forward to more of this story soon, but take the all the time you need to properly grieve for your sister.Author's response
Hey LordMesron.
I thank you for your thoughts. Death in the family is never easy to deal with.
That said, Ron is a central character. I need him whole. Seamus, is,believe it or not, a walk-on. He'll get some more screen time, but honestly, i have five different threads weaving through this story, sixty three students to train and three major and two minor bad-guys to screw with.
The Dursleys. I just picked the one thing that would hit them the hardest. If they went to prison, Vernon (and Petunia, I suppose) could pretend it was the wizarding world that caused it. Here, they're going to have their nose rubbed in it every day.
Harry's feelings are mine. Recently a child was snatched in a neighborhood near where I live. they had an effective neighborhood watch and the kidnapper was caught before he could get five miles. The little girl was recovered scared but safe. (and grounded for thirty years for getting into a car she didn't know.)
you'll see more of Dudley in the next chapter.
It's funny. Writing helps me relax. While she's gone, and I miss her, she had a very Jedi view of life and death. If she were here, she'd dope-slap me if I didn't press on.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Staryfury0901 2017-11-18
I highly approve of this type of Harry Potter. Though I've never read canon What I've heard about that one is he was a doormat even after beating Tommy-boy. I also like that Harry's with Hermione. Normally I'd be asking you why Ron was even allowed to be there as he's turned his back on Harry multiple times. But having read that the ol' brainless bearded wonder blunder bespelled him to be like that I dropped my disapproval of him. Now that he's got Luna cracking the whip over him, so to speak, I 'm quite sure he'll improve. From the hints so far, I think her rewards system will see fast improvement. Now there's only one thing left for me to say, I WILL FINISH THIS DAMN STORY IF IT KILLS ME THIS TIME!! I've started it at least three times and lost it as many.
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