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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-10-13

  Hey, welcome back! I hope things are going better for you.
  
  I loved the return of the Dursleys to Privet Drive and I especially applaud the way Harry took the whole neighborhood to task (it's going to be interesting to see what he learns from Arabella Figg; methinks it's not going to bode well for certain parties). I quite appreciated the hazardous duty that guarding Rita is and I think they've found the perfect guard dog for her.
  
  The training seems to be going well and I hope that Luna is able to get Ron up to where he should be; I know there's a lot of Dumbles' meddling to undo, but he does need to grow. The same for the others who are lagging in training (methinks that Seamus is not going to enjoy having Neville mentoring him, but he will learn).
  
  Finally, I suspect that Tom's plans to attack that dance are going to introduce another side of Dudley, especially if Dudley realizes that this is what his cousin's been fighting (be amusing if the attack gave a shock stimulation to dormant magical ability in Dudley; the fallout would be most enlightening and entertaining). I seriously doubt that Harry's left them there without various watchkeep or other wards and sensors in place and Tom's attack may well get him quite the unpleasant surprise. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

  Author's response

  Thanks for the welcome, Cat. Things are till up in the air, but seem to be settling a bit. Still, I'll be posting as I can.
  
  Dursleys: And there, is the perfect punishment I decided upon. For them, social climbing phonies that they are, their reputations are in ruins, their neighbors know about their crimes and they have no way to escape.
  
  BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
  
  And I firmly believe in neighborhood watches. After all, "It takes a village to raise a child."
  
  Somehow,I really cant feel too bad about Rita. Yes, she is (mostly)working for Harry, but she's done some naughty things that should be dealt with. Minuard won't actively threaten or harm her. He's just going to be there, waiting behind her, quietly watching for threats to her life, and as an added bonus, driving her completely paranoid.
  
  While a great deal of Ron's attitude does come from Dumbley, he has been free of those constraints for the past several months. From there, it's simply his being used to it and seeing no reason to change. For instance, he specifically mentions enjoying the Tai Chi training, but not understanding the need, and having difficulty touching the force but shoving that to the side by failing tounderstand what good it would do him.
  
  Luna will be introducing the 'stick and carrot' principle to Ron in the next chapter.
  
  Seamus: Yeah, he's gonna be hating life, but as I've planned Ginny being sweet on him, I couldn't keep her in the loop.
  
  Are you practicing legilimency on me?
  Dudley will indeed get some screen time, and the Deez are going to learn muggles aren't as helpless as they thought.
  
  Dormant magic: While not what I had in mind, It is a great idea. Maybe for another story.
  
  Either way, Voldemort is going to pull back a bloody hand.
  
  Wards, etc: Yup. 'Member the Granger's house?
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Celexs 2010-10-13

  Anther great chapter, I really enjoy this story, I like the way you are having Harry deal with the slackers, and I look forward to seeing how that will all play out. I also liked the idea of having Dobby test Harry and Harry test Dobby at the same time. It was a great way to show that even harry has room for improvement. I look forward to the next update.
  
  Cel

  Author's response

  Thanks, Celxs.
  
  I'm glad you are enjoying the ride.
  
  The slackers: I would never consider taking an unqualified soldier into combat, and I need Ron and Seamus there, so I had to give them a little push. It'll all work out.
  
  Dobby -v- Harry: Yeah, it was the only reasonable way. Both are nearly equally qualified, but each has advantages the other doesn't. So far, Dobby's advantage is greater than Harry's and as you said, it shows that Harry has not become a Harry-Stu.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Teresa 2010-10-13

  It's good to see you back Alorkin! I hope that you and your family have begun healing, and that the good memories of your sister give you the strength to deal with her loss. As for the chapter, it was excellent, and I enjoyed seeing the various threads that you've set into place. Rita got a definate wake up call, and it should take this time between her quality time with her guards, paticularly Mr. Rochleau. For some reason I kept getting the image of Rochfort in Disney's version of the Three Musketeers.......just with an even nastier attitude. Also, I'd bet that Dobby would have done wonders with that duct tape! The return to Privet Drive was also well played, and Harry's speech might actually get through a few thick heads. Will he have an interesting conversation with Mrs. Figg? His idea for a neighborhood watch might be useful with Voldy and Snape's plan to attack during the holidays. I also hope that there are plans in place to deal with a possible attack since Voldy and Dumbles would love to strike out at innocents. Hmmm..... does Dumbles plan to warn the Queen about this attack in order to work his was back into favor? Dumbles, Snape and Voldy are all skilled at cross and doublecross after all. And does Dumbles think this might be a chance to snag Harry or Hermione? The training sessions were interesting, and hopefully Harry's plans for tutors, etc brings Ron and the others up to speed. As for the purebloods who are considering joining Voldy because their privliges are being lost well, if they end up facing either the Aurors or the Jedi it could just be "good riddance to bad rubbish!" Thanks for the chapter! :)

  Author's response

  Heya Teresa. Thank you for your thoughts. Things are still up in the air, but beginning to settle.
  
  'Dear' Rita: Though she's unofficially working for Harry, she's been muckraking for far too long to just let it go now. On the other hand she knows she has real enemies, who would think nothing of torturing her to death. As for Minuard, he's a professional. He'll keep her safe, but his 'other' assignment it to keep her off balance where Harry&Co. are concerned. There's nothing like having someone you think would happily skin you alive, being responsible for your safety. Truth be told, that was one of FireLemming's last ideas to me.
  
  Disney's 'The Three Musketeers' is an excellent movie. One of my favorites, in fact, and Michael Wincott, who played Rochfort would have made a wonderful Snape.
  
  Dobby and Duct tape: Too cruel! We all know how exuberant Dobby is. By the time he's done, she'd be wrapped in miles of it!
  
  The return: Let us hope so! Harry basically rubbed their faces in their own apathy, and his challenge was made on live television. As social climbing as most of that neighborhood is, they'd 'have' to do as he said just to be seen as doing something. (Harry knows all their foibles and his unintentional training under Dumbledore, in the arts of manipulation and subterfuge, has come in handy.)
  
  Harry will have a little chat with Mrs. Figg, and take an action Dumbley definitely does not want.
  
  Voldy's attack: Yes, the Aurors have a plan in place. Their rapid reaction force is ready for immediate combat, but the actual attack is going to be a bit more personal...with a nice twist. More next chapter.
  
  Snape is going to keep the attack quiet unless Dumbledore specifically asks. He knows that Voldemort's sanity is more than suspect, and any slip ups will cost him more than he's willing to pay.
  
  Even if Dumbledore did know, he has no reason to interfere. He's a closet blood-purest, out of favor with the Queen, and they are, after all...'only' muggles.
  
  So far as Dumbledore knows, Harry was hiding from him. HE sees Harry as his pawn, and to him, she's just Harry's mudblood friend. A friend that he can use to get what he wants.
  
  Harry's appearance on Privet Drive forced the old bastard off his arse, but by the time he arrives, it was too late. That will be described in the next chapter.
  
  Then tutors will do their jobs. As I told Cateagle, I would never consider taking an unqualified man into combat and I need Ron and Seamus there. (I've also decided to pair Luna with Ron and Ginny with Seamus. Neville gets both Hannah and Susan, but none of the hanky panky is going to be on-screen.)
  
  Many of the disillusioned purebloods will join Voldy, but they'll be canon fodder. Harry said in July that he was going to 'deal' with the purebloods, just not like Andromeda thought.
  
  Until next time.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Wonderbee31 2010-10-13

  First off, wonderful to see you back, and hoping that things have gotten better, as I'm sure the pain of your loss is still with you, but knowing that your sister loved you, and you loved her, that you will be able to continue healing. A great new chapter here, really enjoyed seeing Harry bring the others up to speed, as well as his giving Ron one more chance, something that JKR didn't do in the canon imo, and would be curious to see just how hard a taskmaster Luna is here. Will look forward to Tom's upcoming attack, and if Harry might have a surprise for him, as well as seeing if Dudley and his new female friend make it through this challenge. Also liked seeing the Dursley's called to the carpet, as well as the rest of the neighborhood, and will be curious if Harry's lesson sticks? Again, it'd great to see you back.

  Author's response

  Thank you for your kind words. Things are still up in the air, but beginning to settle. Fifty times a day I find something she would have thought funny or thoughtful and I think: "Wow! Marion's gonna love this! And then I realize she never will. Damn! I'm gonna miss her.
  
  
  Harry has been left out to dry so many time he understands what it feels like. Here, his best friend has set aside his comfortable life to be by his side, and he's going to do his absolute best to make sure Ron goes home.
  
  Luna: I really love writing Luna because I Don't think there's any wrong way to do so. She's already got the hots for Ron, ad so, will be applying the old Stick and carrot approach. I'll let your fertile imagination take over.
  
  Voldy's attack: I decided when I started this that win, lose or draw, every time Voldy strikes, he's gonna draw back a bleeding hand. There will be an interesting twist.
  
  Neighborhood/Dursleys: the neighborhood, is typical of most. it took Harry's calling them out to make them understand it is their responsibility to take action if they see something wrong. As for the Dursleys, given that the they're going to be faced with their shame for the next thirty years, I really don't think they can avoid learning a lesson.
  
  Thanks again. I'll post again, as soon as I can.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) zamia 2010-10-13

  Good to see Voldie still having those headaches. Loved the description of the sabre training. Will be interesting to see how Voldies attack on the school and Dudley being back will create pain for someone. Cheers.
  Z

  Author's response

  Heya Zamia.
  
  Thanks. Voldemort is still addicted and Harry and Hormone are still making love. Sooner or later, he's going to learn hos to get past Snape's safety protocols. (Insert evil chuckle here.)
  
  I really enjoy swordplay and so, I passed some of that into the story.
  
  Basically, you read my mind. More than that, I won't say.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Wolfric 2010-10-14

  Fine chapter. I do hope Snape comes up against Harry, Dobby or one of the elite fighters. I would like to see him get his head handed to him. Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  Thanks Wolfric.
  
  Snape is being protected from both sides, just now. He won't be seeing Harry's lightsaber until it's far too late...and it won't be his head.
  
  Until next time.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Disruptor 2010-10-14

  I see that the upcomming attack might help Dudley. For some reason, I seem him grab a sword and shiled off a wall and proceeds to hurt some DEs and the shield blocks the so called unblockable since it is IRON.
  
  Won't Dumbly ever learn that Harry has his own genda and can stop Dumbly at any time.
  
  Sadly, I can see the purebloods doing just what they did in joining Voldemort because of the Squib surge uncovereing all the problem laws
  
  As to that baker comment about burning yourself, since I used to be a donut maker I can attest that tempatures can be a lot lower. Certain types of hot coffeee that his been in the news can give 3rd degree burns and that is nowhere near 451F and more like 180F or 190F.
  
  Hm. I wonder if there are going to be little floating balls firing stun bolts to help with deflection training.
  
  Ron is starting to remind me of Rosh Penin.

  Author's response

  Heya Disruptor.
  
  Dudley will be involved, but he won't be swinging any blades. Sorry.
  
  Good idea though.
  
  ~Won't Dumbly ever learn that Harry has his own genda and can stop Dumbly at any time.~
  
  Nope.
  
  Purebloods: Bigots are bigots. They have been the empowered few, for far too long and as a result, they blame others for their problems.
  
  I've burned myself on many things and I know how little heat it actually takes. Still, when I bake bread, it's usually at 450 and that seemed a reasonable ballpark. 'Sides, Ray Bradbury wrote a strange and frightening story called 'Fahrenheit 451' about a dystopic future where literature, reading and independent thought was forbidden and books were all burned by the 'firemen'. Its title comes from the fact that book paper, (newsprint) begins to burn at 451F.
  
  By the way, a third degree burn is where the flesh is charred. A red mark is a first degree, and blisters indicate second.
  
  The remotes will make a appearance in February...only they'll be using stingers.
  
  I agree. Like Penin, Ron is arrogant and lazy. Here, he's not as bad as in canon, but the potential is still there. One of Harry's biggest fears is that Ron will allow himself to be swayed by the glamor and fall to the dark side. I think I've mentioned that character flaw a few times. Yoda's induced knowledge would be constantly warning him of this potential.
  
  Technically, Harry made a huge mistake allowing Ron to train at all. Now he's dealing with it.
  
  Thanks for the feedback.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) anonmg1 2010-10-14

  Very tired, so I'll keep my points brief
  
  Item one: my deepest sympathies on the loss of your sister. After reading your note, I halted reading in order to hug mine.
  
  Item two: another excellent chapter, amusing and, at times, chilling, in all the right ways.
  
  Item three: as a baker, I can confirm that objects in the 350-450F range do hurt like an SOB for the brief second it takes the brain to register the sensation.
  
  Example one: pulling a rack from a 425F oven, one of the rack's wheels hit something and it started to tip towards me. The only option I had (other than letting it hit my already sufficiently ugly face) was to stop it from falling with my un-mitted hand. In less than a second, the latex glove I was wearing had melted onto my palm, and my left hand was useless for a couple of days.
  
  Example two: 375F, again pulling a rack from that same oven, I bumped my elbow against the inner surface of the door. That spot is actually still visible on the door from where some of my skin burnt onto it.
  
  So yes, paper-burning temperatures, while not instantly, seriously harmful, still hurt quite a bit. You've asked a baker, and a baker has answered, and proven once again that exhaustion makes him ramble.

  Author's response

  Hello Anonmug.
  
  I appreciate your sympathies. Our families are out lives. My wife and our unborn son, died in '96, and I've been raising my daughter since. We moved up here to SW Washington when my mother died, to let my sister know she was not alone. Now, she's gone, and all we have is each other. Hugs are the best thing for us.
  
  Tell your siblings you love them hug them and wish them well.
  
  As for the story: I'm glad you're enjoying. Amusing and chilling, huh. Much like life, neh?
  
  Item three example one: YEEOWWWITCH! I've had burns from jet fuel, and I expect having latex meting into your skin is much like having kerosene burning on it's surface.
  
  My daughter did much the same thing when I was teaching her how to bake bread, but grabbed a rack to pull it out, had a nice little line burned into the underside of her fingers for a week or more. On the other hand, she won't do that again.
  
  I used the paper burning example for the reason I mentioned, and I'll give two demonstrations next chapter.
  
  Stay tuned for more fun n games.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Teresa 2010-10-15

  Sighs.....you're right about Ron's potential to fall to the dark side! Here's hoping that Luna and whatever strength of character Ron has can prevent that......or I forsee Harry and Ron having a duel. It might not be on the slopes of Vesuvius or Kilauea but it would hurt Harry and Hermione if Ron turned. And if one of them actually had to kill him......shakes head. Perhaps Harry souldn't have trained him, but if Ron gets his act together he could be an excellent jedi! Crossing fingers, and hoping that Harry isn't faced with a situation like Obi-Wan's! As always, you story rocks! Take care now, and bye! :)

  Author's response

  Heya Teresa. I agree. Ron is precisely the psychological type spymasters look for when recruiting agents. That's why Harry is so upset. Jedi-wise, he is most at risk of falling to the dark side.
  
  Luna is a most unusual character and I think my solution is a fair one. Needless to say, she has a system to keep him on track. Still there is plenty of time until the final battle.
  
  More than that, I can't say without giving away the ending.
  
  Thanks for the kudos.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) twilliams1797 2010-10-15

  Having been to too many funerals in the last couple years, I greive for you my friend.
  That said, I am glad you are working on something like this story. I find doing creative things helps get my mind right.
  I have all the comments made by other reviewers and the answers you have given make me anticipate your next installment.
  I know next to nothing about martial arts and sword handling, but I feel as if I had observed some advanced classes here.
  Any day you don't learn something new, you might as well quit.
  
  Thanks .
  Tim

  Author's response

  Heya Tim.
  
  I hate funerals. Even the funerals I write. No matter if I know the person or not, I always think of my Pauline.
  
  I think I'm going to post 'The Unthinkable Choice' when this story is done. It's a particularly tragic tale with a happy ending.
  
  While I believe in keeping myself busy, 50 times a day I see or read something that I think she'd love to see.
  
  Sigh! I'm gonna miss her!
  
  I thank you for your anticipation. Next chapter is going through the final edit before posting.
  
  Martial arts: Actually it was Mr. Sulu and that epee of his that got me interested in fencing, waaaaaaaayyyy back in '67. It's interesting to note, that my father, was an expert with the blade. In fact he was arrested in Toledo more than once for swordfighting in the streets.
  
  I agree. Masterharper Robinton once said: "The mind that refuses to admit it has more to learn, is a mind in danger of stagnation."
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

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