(#) CatscanFlyy 2012-06-01ooooooooh Mi gusta killer G.
This was really interesting and,obviously, vair, vair well written and it sort of had me on the edge of my seat because I'm one of those people that kills characters so I almost expected one of them to have died but the ending was much more fantastic! (Don't ask why my sentences are formed so horribly today, I don't know either) Like I felt sorry for Frank but I wasn't exactly sure why kind of thing?
IDK fucked with my head but in an entirely awesome way
The character relations were super awesome too, like when Frank was talking about the money it kind of made me question what kind of relationship they were in Y'know? Like there could have been some secret/not so secret sub dom stuff going on in there except I'm not supposed to say that because YAAYY suggesting S&M to someone you've never met
Also I have like a slight obsession with nursery rhymes so that whole part of the story was totes awesome! (like if I'm still in English Lit mode I can say that it showed Frank's innocence through more than him not being allowed to kill and trusting in G so completely)
And I still can't believe you're only thirteen! I did not know talent existed at such a young age Jay Zeus!
Update 19 soon or I will actually die like legitimately. Srs bsnss
I'm not sure what happened with the length and detail of this review but I'm sure you wont complain too much!
Author's responseAaaaaww when I read this it made me feel all glowy and nice inside :3
Not sure if my writing's as...advanced...enough to write S&M...?
And yeah, the whole nursery rhyme/innocence thing you got was right - glad that came across correctly - and nursery rhymes are just darn creepy anyway. I was trying to make Frank, like, really 'special' so, yeah, i dunnooo...
(#) scarlett_fitch2027 2012-06-02This and 19 are the best things you have ever written.
1) The writing was perfect and fit with the twisted, creepy theme fantastically. The way it presented Frank's thoughts in 3rd person was incredible.
2) The relationships were awesome. The way you described their feelings towards each other, the money and the death.
3) The theme/plot/storyline - where the hell did that come from?! This is beyond anything you've ever written before. And so dark! What happened to writing about teen crushes on hot ghost kids, huh?
:'( she's all grown up! And now she's a better writer than I am!
runs into corner and cries then remembers she has to get ready for tae kwondo and focuses all angry energy on kicking the crap out of a soft pad instead.
Author's responseI'm not a better writer than you! I'm not!
I just had some really dark disturbing thoughts from whats been going on at school...O.o
I told you there was something wrong with me!!
ANYWAY glad you liked, have fun at tkd
(#) PsychoticIsWhatsIn 2012-06-21Uno- I adored this story. :3 You're an amazing writer! Much better than I could ever hope to be. le sighs
Dos- Nursery rhymes mixed with Frerard-yness is my drugs. As the great man with the crimson hair once said, "Drugs gimmie drugs gimmie drugs"
Tres- I especially loved how you described Frank's feelings towards the money. It really made me want to know more about his and Gerard's relationship- but not like that. What I mean is like if they have any problems with each other or if Frank's a cunning little bastard and wants to kill Gerard because he's cue teenage girl voice cray cray.
Overall I loved this story. Awesome job!
P.S. I don't really say cray cray. .-.
Author's responseI believe you. And thank you!
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