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Chapter 36: Target Rin
Naruto is given a scroll containing the secrets of making women fall for him, a scroll he uses at first on the women around him but soon on the shinobi world as a whole, giving birth to the Ero-ninja.
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Eroninja
(#) Incandescence 2016-03-07
On my re-read through I've noticed that you do a good job at pacing too. It's sometimes a subtle thing and sometimes quite blatant, for example you'll cut out fights or whole potential interaction scenes as they're unimportant but focus on the parts which matter to the story.
I really like this as often a writer can get carried away on tangents that unfortunately aren't that interesting to the reader (I'm thinking of a particular book here which almost half of it I skipped through and missed nothing relevant to the plot : / )
This is more noticeable with the limelight and black book being separate as it's up to the reader if they're interested but the main work is a bit more streamlined.
I have to say that counter to this are the bulky sex scenes :P But that's the nature of the genre so no fault there.Eroninja
(#) Ironwolf911w 2017-06-17
Like many of the other reviewers, I thought this was a well thought out (excellent) chapter.
However, I'm disappointed that you choose to add Rin to the harem... IMO, a nicer touch would have been for Naruto to plot out a path returning Rin to Kakashi. Another med-nin in the mix is just padding.
And yes, I know this criticism is coming 50 chapters too late... but it still needed to be said.Eroninja
(#) Daniel2610994 2017-11-20
Damn rin sure had it rough being a passenger in her own body but kushina erased all her painful memories so instead all she knows is that she lost her virginity to naruto, and that is alright with everyone :3 but damn poor kushina is going crazy over all the pleasure naruto inadvertly gives her when he is with one of his girls but thankfully for her she gets her son to love her as a woman in the end, oh and something that I must say man the part where naruto thinks that with each and every woman he comes to love hus heart grows was simply majestic and beautiful.Eroninja
(#) milessmith1111 2022-07-24
The backstory you made for Rin in this chapter was very interesting. It is a very brutal thing to be able to see what you're doing but unable to do anything about it. This turn of events will probably make the situation between Naruto and Kiyomi even worse than it already is. It also looks like that Kashina just took a big step into accidentally furthering her addiction to feel pleasure by her son's hands. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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