(#) goofyball132 2006-08-16Great story so far, keep up the good work.
In one of the later chapters (I can't remember which one) you mentioned that Ollivander's dissappeared? or was it Harry dissappearing into the wizarding world. and was the mystrious figure watching Harry home a DE or a new player? go H/Hr :)
In a straight magical duel(no martial arts) Ron would have a better chance of beating Harry, simply because he has 5 years of using magic not a 100% chance just a better one.
Author's responseThanks. Ollivander disappeared. The mysterious figure isn't a DE but could be a new player. Well said.
- I really like the story you have written so far,i haven't read a fanfic that has come from this kind of direction before.Im looking forward to your next update, so plz hurry before the suspence kills me
Author's responseThanks. Sorry to keep you waiting. I'm still tweaking the next chapters. :)
(#) aya_celestial 2007-08-26I just started reading this story and when I started, I couldn't stop. This is definitely one of the best fiction I've read. You keep your readers wanting to find out what happens next. It's refreshing side to the Harry Potter story, so keep writing. I can't wait for more.
Author's responseThanks. I'm glad you like my story. I'm already writing the next chapters.
- This is a fun story to read.
I like how you turned most things on there head with the storylines.
I carn't wait for you to add more chapters to this story.
I like how you made Harry a thinker and Nevel a wineer.
Author's responseThanks. I'm still working on the next chapters.
(#) Terdwilicker 2007-11-19Interesting story. Needs a bit of editing, mainly for spelling/word-choice errors. You sometimes use singular words for plural and vice-versa, and many of your idioms... are wrong. Please get a Beta reader to go over your story, chapter by chapter, and fix all the problems. There's at least one per page of every chapter. Its distracting from otherwise good storytelling.
Author's responseBad word editor, bad.
- I'm liking the story line, finding a few bobbles in word use (mostly tenses, which I'm dreadful with myself) but the plot works well enough for me to skip over them without to much trouble. I am hoping the Harry and Neville can settle their differences as they are both on the same side. very much looking forward to the next update.
Author's responseGlad you like the story. I guess I trust my word editor too much.
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