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Moving Forward by Standing Still: Part II
Naruto is given a scroll containing the secrets of making women fall for him, a scroll he uses at first on the women around him but soon on the shinobi world as a whole, giving birth to the Ero-ninja
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Eroninja
(#) arrotzang 2016-01-04
Thanks for the chapter! A nice New Years chapter that fits well in your story as well as the real world context! I just noticed is Oboro a reference to Taimanin Asagi hentai I wonder... They do have ninjas... Oh well guess I'll have to find out.
Glad to see a bit of Anko, I heart seeing more of Komachi and Yugao and loving that she is happy despite the chakra color!
Your hard work is appreciated!Eroninja
(#) greysonfauchard 2016-01-04
Just found out about your "epic lemon" 2 weeks ago and have spent much of my free time since then reading and have finally caught up so I thought I'd leave my comments here.
I'm not a big fanfic reader (or fanfic writer, for that matter), but I do love smut and I do love a good story and seldom do the two get combined as well as they have here. I love the lemony goodness (your tastes in erotica appear to run similar to mine), the story and the world building you've brought to Eroninja. How much so? As much as I enjoy them, several times (well, actually only twice) I've scrolled through the lemon sections just to get to the next part of the story.
It could use some more editing / proofreading, (I'd volunteer to help, but I'm guessing you wouldn't be interested. If you are though, drop me a line and I'll see what I can do.) but that one point aside, I've enjoyed the erotic adventures of Naruto and the Family and can't wait to see what happens next.
Thanks for all the time, effort and energy you've put into this!Eroninja
(#) elchabon 2016-01-05
Happy New Year.
Very good chapter. The fight scene and the continuation on the promotion in rank. And the strategy, all very interesting. Although I am of the idea that a strategy, however well developed east. The raw power often renders it ineffective or largely reduced. Example. Goku, Luffy, Esdeath, Alucard, etc ..
Part of Moegi and Kurenai, excellent. But Suzume-sensei, you're not putting something without having an idea, then it could be part of the worship of the moon, or other organization.
The Raikage is a jerk. There are not enough words to discribirlo. And you what you portrayed perfect. It is typical that would make nuclear bombs or other weapons as disuatorios media. And we saw how it ends (Metal Gear, Big Boss). I mean in the Naruto manga and wanted to use Bee. Then kill Naruto. And The Last, the weapon that did develop in secret, sigh not going to end well.
Analysis of Yoshino charm me. The ability to connect things that at first glance seem totally and completely unrelated. It was good to having "recruited", right? Hahaha.
Anko is the fucking master. Introducing something you want, give to taste the forbidden fruit, and eventually deny him. Toki has already put the gift bow.
Second but no less important. The meeting presented very good so this ocurrindo worldwide, through the changes that are happening. That such Edea could be .......
I had fun with the auction. I was looking for this Oboro but could not find it .... weird.
Part of Look, just get me to the soul, I hope it achieves its purpose, I desire with all my heart.
Well I think that is all, good luck
Your reader and friend
Elchabon.
PS: Thanks for the list of chakras.
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Feliz Año Nuevo.
Muy bueno el capitulo. La escena de la pelea y, la continuacion, sobre el ascenso en rango. Y la estrategia, muy interesante todas. Aunque yo soy de la idea, de que una estrategia, por muy bien desarrolla este. El poder en bruto muchas veces la vuelve inefectiva o la reduce en buena medida. Ejemplo. Goku, Luffy , Esdeath, Alucard, etc..
La parte de Moegi y Kurenai, excelentes. Pero Suzume-sensei, no eres de poner algo sin tener una idea, entonces podria ser que sea parte del culto a la Luna, o de la otra organizacion.
El Raikage es un imbecil. No hay suficientes palabras para discribirlo. Y tu lo retrataste perfecto. Es el tipico que haria bombas nucleares u otras armas como medios disuatorios. Y ya vimos como termina eso (Metal Gear, Big Boss). Quiero decir en el manga queria usar a Naruto y Bee. Luego matar a Naruto. Y en The Last, el arma que hizo desarrollar a escondidas, suspiro no va a terminar bien.
El analisis de Yoshino me encanto. La habilidad de conectar cosas que a simple vista , parecen total y completamente sin relacion. Fue bueno el haberla "reclutada",no? jajaja.
Anko es la jodida maestra. Al presentar algo que desea, darle de probar el fruto prohibido, y finalmente negarselo. Ya Toki tiene el moño puesto para regalo.
Segundo ,pero no menos importante. La reunion muy buena presentado lo que esta ocurrindo a nivel mundial, a traves de los cambios que estan sucediendo. Esa tal Edea podria ser,.......
Me diverti mucho con la subasta. Estuve buscando a esta Oboro pero no la encontre....raro.
La parte de Mira, me llego justo al alma, espero que ella logre su cometido, lo deseo de todo corazon.
Bueno creo que es todo, mucha suerte
Tu lector y amigo
Elchabon.
Pd: Gracias por la lista de chakrasEroninja
(#) weird-d 2016-01-05
Hi Sage and Pervy New Year to you.
As usual, great chapter, incredible mix of interweaving plotlines with Kumo, the Daimyos, more women wanting to be bound by Naruto's Universal Tamer, Kuroshige being up to no good and probably more things that I missed - hey, reading this monster of a chapter took me hours.
On a minor note, you sometimes wrote Hanare instead of Haruna, which was confusing at times.Eroninja
(#) Real-Steel-Kouryuo 2016-01-05
I have to say that I have some reservations about Moegi being added to the harem. The situation between her and Naruto could lead to the two of them being intimate but his argument of the fear of being a cradle robber of sorts seems more founded than both he and the other women who are aware of this more founded. I realize all the women that Naruto has bedded in the past there were situations that were more extraordinary in comparison to the one between Naruto and Moegi but I don't think all of them didn't have the kind of personal history like now.
When the story reached the point where Konan was talking to A about asking for Yugito to join her new Akatsuki, it definitely felt more real on the part of how A responded to Konan's point. About how A and most of the other high-ranking village officials saw Yugito as more of a weapon than an actual person much less a kunoichi. There's definitely a rift now opened between Yugito and possibly the majority of the village whether it was an unintended action or not on Konan's part. I don't see A doing much to repair the rift but I can see it coming to a head soon.
I was glad to see Komachi getting back in on the action after a pretty long absence from the story and considering all the women that Naruto has in his harem as well.
Overall, this was definitely a worthwhile chapter to read. Please keep the excellent work up with this and other stories you have in the works.
Eroninja
(#) Zweig 2016-01-06
Yo,
i read your new Sage corner.
I myself instantly recognised the similiarities between Earth-country and the Soviet Union.
Personally i thought in regards to Water-country more of the Nazi-movement 70 years ago here in Germany. With the Bloodline-users basically the Jews of Water-country.
The comparison of Konoha with Great Britain was interesting. Though i do wonder which countries Wind and Lightning represent in your mind.
In regards to Ay. I agree that he is probably one of the most ruthless characters among the non-villains from Naruto. I have serious doubts if he would have joined the Alliance if he had not been made Surpreme-commander. He only got better after Bee defeated him in battle and even then he still tried to attack Naruto once more.
I do love that you have new chapter titles announced and am curious about them.Eroninja
(#) jupmod 2016-01-06
Well... Honestly, Moegi is consider 'innocent' by most fans, given Naruto knew her when she was 8 years old (Note: Moegi is 4 years younger than Naruto, not 2.). Even I just can not think of her as a romantic partner given she was a child when Naruto first met her.
Hanabi Hyuuga is different. I have no problems with her, given Naruto had not ever met her (in canon) when she was a child, thus she is not 'innocent' as Moegi is. This is why we have a lot of fanfics, art, and even hentai of Naruto/Hanabi.
Hmmm... I sure hope Mirajane does get to laid with Naruto. I always love the idea of Mirajane (from Fairy Tail) with Naruto. I know this is not the FT Mira you have in Eroninja, yet you sure are making her look and act like Mira given now Mirajane is working at a bar. Maybe Mira will get her dream come true soon. :)
Anyway, nice chapter. I know you're now aiming to have Naruto deflower Moegi and have her join the harem. Yet IMO, it would be better to have Hanabi join and not Moegi. (shrug)
Well, until next chapter! :)
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