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Year One: Quidditch Trials and Christmas
11 reviewsHarry finds out some startling secrets in his new life
5Exciting
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Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) pi3142 2006-09-15
I think you are doing great and I do appreciate where you are taking this.Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) Kath 2006-09-16
just one thing.... I got the impression that Harry was in his first year... If he is, how come Cho is already so interested in him and flirting with him like she was older, and not a 12 year old child?
Love the story*Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) ironau 2006-09-17
just so you know three is NOT the first prime number.
Overall the story has the potential to be quite enjoyable, but it is unploished right now. The prologue is to short and disjoint. I was a great idea to attempt to set the tone for the metality of a war weary Harry. The flashback that you used in latter chapters would have been better presented as mournful reminicence from Harry. The prologue felt more like a bullet list of things that have happend instead of an actually story.
The vicious and jeolous Nevillie is interesting and I look forward to see if you can bring a new twist to the controlling dumbledore concept. I can't wait to see nev break down because it seems that even dumbledore is treating nev as not quite good enough.
I was disaapointed to not see any further consequencies from the Draco/Harry duel. though I think it will lead to a draco neville teamup.Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) REALITYBENDER 2006-09-18
I am enjoying this story greatly, I look forward to more.Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) The_Resident 2006-10-31
I as much as I like this story, I do wish you would keep it as updated as its vanilla version on ffn. Keep up the good work.Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) LSar 2007-11-18
Entertaining story so far, I hope it will be updated soon.
Added to favorites...Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) corran1327 2009-05-16
just want to add a fresh woo this is good like it comment. plot wise your great grammer is acceptible not that my spelling and grammer is better just my observation, and the charicters are actting beliveabley for the situations you put them in except for neville i do not like the way he is writtin but it not bad enough to say ahhhhhhh i wont read this its just not what i would do but you do not need to change him in anyway tooo hope you understand.Harry Potter: New beginnings
(#) tied 2012-10-20
Please continue this fic, I am interested to see where and why you have made some decisions
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