- You know, it never occured to me that a Harry raised by his parents or close family friends would be deliberately provocative and adverserial towards Snape. Good on you for realising that! A totally innocent Harry would be boring, anyway! ;-)
Should be interesting to see how the Hermione/Ron/Troll incident plays itself out in this universe.
BenRG's Rating: 7/10
Author's responseYea, that's totally what I was waiting for. Years of hearing stories from the Marauders about Snape, would create a volatile situation. Especially since Harry has such a resemblance to Harry, he'd get more flack than Nym did.
I'm working on the troll scene currently, and I'm still debating how I pull it off. Thanks for reading and taking the time to review.
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2006-10-23It's the subtle differences that make this story the brilliant piece it is. Harry's reaction to Snape was perfectly in-character given the fact that James and Sirius are both alive.
Pity Corner is such a stupid ponce, though I suppose you might be setting him up for a future conflict over Ginny. Something to look forward to, I say!
Author's responseThank you for your kind words! Harry certainly has his mind set when it comes to Snape, he also feels a bit invincible considering how protected he's been and who he is. The future incidents will alter his reactions in both ways. Yes, one thing I am striving for is for their to be other rivals/enemies in Harry's peer group. His fame and relationships will bring up jealousy, envy, which both lead to anger and hate. Corner, Smith are definites. Probably Dean and Seamus because there can be conflicting moments. They'll slowly build throughout the years.
- i really like this story so want to see more. i hope ron gets yelled at soon by harry he is an ass and needs putting in his place.
Author's responseThank you for taking the time to review. I see Ron as very rough around the edges and slightly insecure considering his family's wealth so he feels slightly intimidated by the studious Hermione. It's an interesting mix, but I do think the insults will slowly leave after the troll. Harry isn't exposed to the situation as much as he would've been had he been in Gryffindor so he does his best.
(#) TheIllusiveOne 2006-10-23I like the fic, but now that Harry's at Hogwarts he seems to be exactly the same as he is in Canon. Can't you make him at least a little more adept at magic? A little more intelligent? He's exactly the same average student he is in canon, despite growing up around magic his entire life, travelling to different countries, and being sorted into Ravenclaw. Can't you at least make him a good student, or adept at magic? Other then that, though, I do enjoy the fic.
Author's responseThank you for the review. To your point, he's only a first year. And as of the first week at Hogwarts he's had his wand just around a month. Never having used spells before it's not something he'd pick up quickly. Growing up in a magical family, he'll know the wizarding world, the animals, and I think Lily and the girls would've taught him at least History of Magic since that could be interesting if told uniquely. He'll be slightly better as time goes by compared to those in his year, but he's just starting out.
- hey, nice story. Harry seems a bit stupid for a Ravenclaw. I know the questions Snape asked were beyond 1st yr level, but nevertheless. I find it hard to beleive that Sirius or James, have not taught him anything. If he is to pull of pranks then he should know some spells. Also Lily being as smart as she is would have taught her Son something. Along with Remus and Andy and Cissa, they all seem to adore Harry.
For a child of a brilliant witch and the son of the Mauraders he seems to be an idiot, has no or very little tact. Sure he can sweet talk a few people.
I don't mean to make him a genious, who should be taking his NEWTs or OWLs, but right now he is a fool.
Anyway i live the interactions with ALL the girls. Penny is nice. The guys don't seem all that interested or important in your story.
Congrats and Update soon, i hope wht i said makes sense above. cheers
Author's responseThank you for taking the time to review. To your point I'm doing it from my perspective, Hermione knows so much because she felt inadequate and that she'd be behind. Harry's been there all along, so why would he read the book before going to the class? Isn't that what the class is for to learn these things? He's pulled pranks using items from a joke shop or without using magic, he's only had his wand for a month. It'll be pointed out later that he's been shown History of Magic, thus why he gets bored with Binns. In regard to the situation with Snape, it's very volatile and Harry being only 11 won't be the most fluent when his emotions are so intense. I honestly thought he looked just like another first year. Harry grew up in a mostly female dominated environment, so yes he'll be more interactive with them. A lot of boys that age will have contradictory feelings concerning Harry's fame, and since Harry is receptive to girls it's like just a mutual thing to happen. One of the big reasons for putting Harry into Ravenclaw was Penelope, she'll definitely be an important figure for Harry with Nym not always around do to being in another house. Again thank you for your thoughts, I loved responding to them.
(#) jabarber69 2006-10-25Hey dont have much time, but wanted to say this is a very well written and quite intriging story, hope to see more of it in the future.
Author's responseThank you for commenting! I'm definitely putting my all into the story and I'm glad you're enjoying it.
- Good to see that Harry's not falling down the pit of being Ron's friend.
I've always thought that he'd have done much better without Ron's rather negative influence, especially since Ron never did all that much anyways, except for play chess. (PS: panic and play chess. CoS: get him in trouble with the car, break his wand. PoA: He didn't join the time turner exhibition. GoF: Jealous git. etc)
Author's responseThanks for commenting! I think Ron's world is very black & white, especially in the early years that it would have been hard for my story's Harry to cultivate the unique group of friends if Ron was an integral part. He has his merits but I find the interaction between Ron & Hermione as the best part of the characters to be included into my story whenever they pop up here and there.
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