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Not Looking
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-20
For starters, I´ve got two things to say to the people who will review AFTER me, especially my esteemed DoJ members:
1.) Losers.
2.) We´ve really started changing the face of (FOB) ficwad, ladies. We´re going places I can smell it. (Oh, lunch´s ready.)
About this chapter...
a) "He was wrapped around her torso like one of the lost boys" -> the cutest phrase I´ve ever read, or at least one of them. ;)
b) ""I'm a dude, I'm not buying you vanity fair - can't you make do with some porn or something?" He asked.
"Sure!" Pete said shrugging." -> How could anyone not admire men for their simplicity?
c) the Patrick/Ollie scene that Pete observed: PURE SWEETNESS. My heart melted. You´re letting me develop a softer side, Katy. Damn you! ;)
d) ""I really wanted the latest Vanity Affair - I mean Fair." He said, Patrick snapped a look at him and Pete smirked." -> We love Pete for his puns. And hair.
e) the end of this chapter: Alright, MISSY. First you make my heart skip a beat with joy (see c) ) and then you rip it out of my chest and use it to wipe some plonk off your keyboard. I really hope Olivia can get things right again.
Man, why didn´t Joe die?... ;)Author's response
It wasn't Joe's time. Seriously - why would I kill a Jew??Not Looking
(#) Tawney 2006-11-20
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Seriously no! I'm sat in the big computer lounge at uni and while i was reading this i kept muttering and at the end i practically shouted "NO!" aloud. The person next to me didnt look overly impressed.....
Beautiful writing at the end though, really captured the moment. There better be a massive rewind thing though! Just as their relationship was getting so sweet and fluffy, he wanted her to meet his friends and family! How can he die? Its just not right!
Okay calm....deep breaths....Update soon or i may turn into a crazy person.XXAuthor's response
Ha! I love giving my readers head wrecks....Not Looking
(#) howshesews 2006-11-20
i'm horrible. i just now started reading this story....
and now i'm all spoiled and ready for more.
Patrick is so....patrick-y. this is how i would imagine him being in a situation like this. i like the way YOU get inside HIS head.
(you compliment me for that a lot, and now, it's your turn.)
i did accept the invite. and now, i'm reading everyone's stories...just cause i'm so excited.Author's response
I'd like to add that this is only how I want Patrick to be. Who knows what the hot little biscuit is truly like on the romance level but ach! I can try right?
P.S Wilkommen!! WELCOME! MUCHO GUSTO!Not Looking
(#) LOVELA 2006-11-20
ARGH!!! Your stories have been having such a TWIST on them, it is making me insane...well, I was already there, but it is just exacerbating my symptoms.
If I didn't know any better, I would say your goal is to make people cry. You are doing a good job at it. I have to give you a DoJ two thumbs up! Actually, I'd give you four, but I only have two. O'well.
Good Job on the Drama-Rama!
Smooches!Not Looking
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-20
choice quotable -"I really wanted the latest Vanity Affair - I mean Fair.". haha
holy f-bomb. that's was incredibly action packed. it was like BAM pete finds out they're having an affair, and then BAM they get into a car accident and patrick dies. but she can change it, so i'm not even gonna fret. i'm just excited to see how that plays out.
gah, i can't even tell you how fantastical you are. "end of."Not Looking
(#) patrickdance4me 2006-11-20
ok this is weird. at first i didnt get it by now i'm like hell yes! i love it. and she better fucking fix it. cause thats my man patrick over there dead. i would cry sooooo hard if he really died. i'd probably kill myself :[Not Looking
(#) Angelicgypsy89 2006-11-21
Woah!...This story is very good. I laughed, I cried, I wanted to be made out with like that...lol. Even though I kinda like Patrick not as much as Pete it made me like him even more and I love ur character Olivia she was good. The only thing that kinda threw me off was the whole flashback thing. I liked the idea but i was completely confused when you did it first but then explained it...but it was still kewl. And I hope Patrick doesn't completely die...I actually screamed at my screen like O did when she saw his body (yea I know I'm a big nerd). Anyways I really like this story and I can't wait to see what else you do to it.Not Looking
(#) x-xJafax-x 2006-11-22
oh geez seriously u had to do that 2 me ? mean comes to mind lol cnt wait to the nxt prt =)
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