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Chapter 12 : We Are Just Empty Ships With No Cargo13 reviews
When you add corn flour to gravy, it thickens. Well I just added a load to this chapter.
(#) Trohmaniac13 2006-12-21WHOA!
I love this story so much!
At some parts I get confused, but...whoa!
You've stolen my heart=]
(#) MMMramen 2006-12-21When I saw this story in all its updated glory, I think I squealed with glee...consequently scaring the dog.
Anyways, that was a heavy chapter. I'm exhausted. My heart broke for Olivia. And your portrayl of her behavior was perfect. Just perfect. I must say, as fabulous as this chapter--this story--has been, I'm quite disappointed that their relationship couldn't withstand such a tragedy. But hey, that's life. I know they'll make it work once Olivia gets her thoughts and feelings together. Lovely chapter, my dear. Rating point for you.
(#) jessiearei 2006-12-21oh poop.
i hope they aren't over either!
thats so sad that she lost her baby!
update again soon!
(#) riaryder 2006-12-21Ah, beautiful.
Poor Olivia.And Patrick was kind of an arsehole. You nearly made me not like him, there. Her heartbreak was so well written. Have a wee point.
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-12-21“As for Pete, he just existed.” -> Short, catchy and powerful. And I don’t say that because I like to be mean to Pete. Not just because of that…
I bet going to L.A. with someone who has more money than you know must be almost as awful as getting the chance to go to two FOB concerts. Please, accept my pity at this point again. :P
Yay. Kilometers. Finally a measurement that means something to me. Too bad you don’t measure the thing in Pete’s pics in kilometers.
KATY! What did you do THAT for? (Losing the baby.) Well, I will NEVER forgive Them either. :I
“I would rather be dead than live life like a shell.” -> I like.
Angry Patrick. A new perspective. Did the cream filling of the Oreo just turn sour? (Yes, I think you should slap me for that one.)
Moving much. (Equals corresponding r. p.)
Also, thanks for the cooking instructions. I’ll keep them in mind next time I put a frozen pizza into the oven…
(#) LOVELA 2006-12-21Well there you go again. This chapter was absolutely fabulous due to the fact that you made Olivia and Patrick soooo real.
By the way, Angry Patrick = Hello Nurse!
Ok, on to boosting your ego some more. This chapter was filled with so many emotions I don't think my mind could keep up, and being as ADHD as myself, my mind can usually keep up with multiple anythings.
I love this story. Make it go on forever? K, thanks!
(#) Angelicgypsy89 2006-12-22Hey,
Another great chapter, the twists never stop coming in. Can't wait for the next one.
(#) ZippersOverYou 2006-12-26You know, I read this at 12 some am and it was quite amazing. I would like to say 'amen' to whomever said that angry patrick = hello nurse. That's gonna haunt me tonight like the curse that won't leave my lips. Sorry, in the middle of my next chapter and hoping no nosy 40 some year olds come down and try to read my fictional biography. Chiou.
(#) pixied_secrets 2007-01-01i'm your number one fan. seriously.
i read this chapter and thought "i should make a Katy is Number 1 t-shirt and wear it and never wash it so it smells terrible but it'll be for good luck n' shit". is that flattering or just creepy? either way i'm doin' it.
(#) jaredletoinconverse 2007-01-01My friend told me about your fic and I'm so glad she did! It took me on a few turns but its fantastic!! Please keep writing!!
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