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Tears of the flame
6 reviewsWhat will happin to atlanta? what will happin when she is in the den of the dragon. AND IT MY BIRTH DAY ON THE 10th OF JANUARY!
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The leage of fire
(#) Jessi_Girl9 2007-01-02
Hey, I have a few things to say... Happy Early Birtday! You're an exceptional writer for an almost-10 year old. :) I think it's spelt Odie, not Oddie, but I' not entirely sure. Also, I'm also pretty sure Class of the Titans takes place in Canada. Be sure to capitalize the first letter of all names, like Hera, Jay, Pompeii, and Herry. You may want to try adding a little bit more description, like someone's face showed worry/anger/happiness/etc. or what people, creatures or landscape looks like. Finally, make sure to hit the enter button before someone new talks, it helps to clear confusion sometimes. That's just some help in case you want to improve, only if you want to. You've got some great talent already. I can't wait for the next chapter. You've got a great idea here, and excellent writing skills! :DAuthor's response
Thanx for the advise. I try pretty hard so it is hard to remember things. I really need a bit of helping when it comes to writing on ficwad. And thanck you for the happy birth day and all others. No onder you are such a good writerThe leage of fire
(#) Ace_Fan_12 2007-01-02
Great story!! And you're gonna be 10? WOW! You're a great writter for a small age like that!;) Anyways happy early birthday and Update soon!Author's response
Thanx and sure thing Ace Fan THE UPDATE IS COMING Trumpets start playingThe leage of fire
(#) fingecko 2007-01-02
I think the description is great. You can almost feel it. See it. Keep it upThe leage of fire
(#) kool_kat 2007-01-03
wow ! i cant believe your 10 and you write like us!!!! its sooooo kool! plz update ! and HAPPY BDAY !!!!=D hope you have a great party with lots of presents and may alll your wishes come true cuz you ROCK!!=D anyways WOW story and happy bday!The leage of fire
(#) dancechickie222 2007-01-03
Great job! It's really getting good now, very inspirational. And I'm glad to see the chapters getting longer lol. Well, happy birthday, can't believe you're only 10 years old.. your writing is exceptionally good.
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