Categories > Celebrities > Fall Out Boy > One Shot
Reviews
One Shot
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-18
okay, let me start out by saying i am not a fan of the one shot. i had this conversation with Alex, and my argument was that it doesn’t give enough time for character development, and I always seem to think you can expand on it and make it into a full story…
but i am in love with this.
which is the cue for an itemized list...
1.) the title of this story... "One Shot". how fucking perfect. "end of".
2.) the way you have harry and patrick interacting through the store made me swoon. i could visualize Patrick reaching for the macaroni.
3.) per our IM convo, i just thought i'd count this out for ya. (a)son of a bitch up (b)SHITzu (c) Now who was the bitch?
4.) "completely /stumped/." damn you and your ability to be clever. i smiled.
5.)choice quotable- "he smiled celestially. Oh if cherubs were human, they'd worship him." - this one sentence sums up how she feels for him. it's perfect.
6.) the plot blew me away. i did not see that coming. from the first "nobody move" i was reading as quickly as i could, and i thought my eyeballs were going to explode from the exercise.
7.) "Everything hopeful ended with one shot." - conclusions don't come any better than that. pure fucking genius.
("O) times infinity.Author's response
Technically, I didn't swear once....haha! So glad you enjoyed it, you know how nervous I was about it! I love you guys way too much, it's bordering on fornication.One Shot
(#) -LoVe-CaNt-SaVe-YoU- 2006-11-18
i am actualy really close to tears now that was a really good story :(One Shot
(#) patrickdance4me 2006-11-18
awwwwwwwwwww. that would suck major ass.
poor patrick.
poor harry.
poor son of a bitch lol.
that was really sad and very original.Author's response
I'm hoping I have induced a suicidal mood to the FicWad girls. eek! LOL, it was just a one shot and they are what they are.
One Shot
(#) LovelyxMistake 2006-11-18
Wow. That was really good.
:]Author's response
Thanks - I love invoking that reponse. ("o)One Shot
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-18
First of all, you´ve taken the one shot to a new level, Plankty (plonk + Katy).
A) „son of a bitch“ -> Ha ha. Kinda like the literal “Shit or get off the pot” thing that I had Joe say.
B) “SHITzu” AND sob: Katy, what was that with the fine line of swearing that you walk so well? ;)
C) First I thought Harry was a guy and I was like “YAY! More gay porn!” ;) But I guess not. Tampons… good choice.
D) The ambiance, woman! There´s tons of little details (eg. the explosion of the tangerine taste) which I think are even more important in one-shots than longer stories.
E) the little banter ( about “shortness”) = extremely cute and awkward, thus even cuter :)
F) I didn´t expect the kiss at all. Then again it´s a one-shot, so the characters have to hurry. ;)
G) “stumped”: I´ve been wanting to use this so desperatly in the Files. (That´s what happens when you read dictionaries like I do.) I´ve been thinking about a situation that could have Sheena say that but I haven´t come up with one yet. But I´m probably still gonna use it should my mind excrete something useful. I love to see that we come from the same Stump up the Volume-teasing planet. ;)
H) “no can do” makes me :)))) (even though the guy saying it was definitely not a plonker)
I) Needless to say that the robbery scene is PURELY ORIGINAL. (You´re making it difficult for me to decide what adjective I want to choose when giving you a rating point. :P) I´m loving it!
J) The ending is bizarre and a shock. Amazing, powerful, makes ya think. (Even me.)
I would be willing to share Hatrick with you, Katy. ;) Love you!Author's response
I'm glad you picked up the good bits too - I don't think anyone got my 'Sweet Tangerine' reference though. I was being super smart and dorky at this point.One Shot
(#) LOVELA 2006-11-19
Holy Crap that was amazing!!!
"Oh if cherubs were human, they would worship him." This line caused a giggle from me due to the fact that it is soooo true.
THEN! It takes this turn that was completely unexpected!!! Again I say, Holy Crap!!
Good One Shot! Holy Crap!Author's response
Technically Holy Crap is a huge Oxymoron but I won't go into that.
I loved the cherub line too. I'm in a morbid mood lately. Can you tell??One Shot
(#) GwenMerlon 2006-12-19
First of all, great title. LOVE IT.
And secondly, the banter between Harry and Patrick is amazing.
'"Technically, you're my partner in crime." I said smugly.
"Damn. You're sly."
"I'm short, I pull it off."
"Do I?"
"No."
"But I'm short"
"Not short enough"
"Oh, is there a requirement?"
"No."
"Right."
"Right."
"I'm confused."
"Well you're short, it happens."'
I actually laughed out loud. Priceless. Anyway, even though it was terribly sad, the suspense was written so well! As I was reading I found myself glancing down at the bottom of the screan involuntarily just to see what was going to happen (curse these eyes!). It was just simply amazing... I was moved. ;)
Sign up to review this story.