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Eleven - Next on Making The Video . . .
16 reviewsso music videos are cool - especially first scenes. Also thank you all for helping this story reach 100 fabulous reviews, i don't know what i would do without you.
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Broken Down On Memory Lane
(#) Melim 2007-03-31
Breaking your nice little even 100 reviews... I love this chapter, and even though I totally fell asleep while you were yelling at me to help you with it, it still came out nicely. "I knew you loved me when you washed my hair in the sink." And another one of my cousin's names in your stories...But this chapter was amazing.
"Secrets secrets are no fun unless you share with everyone."
Ahhh this was fun.Author's response
like it's my fault that your cousin have names that i want to use. lol. and yes i quotes myself except different - and yes you totally fell asleep as i talked to you last night, ass.
but you still rock my world cause without you this story would not be possible.
looooveBroken Down On Memory Lane
(#) GwenMerlon 2007-03-31
OMG Alex, you are amazing!!!!!
That sentence totally deserved all the exclimation points.
Well, you definately know how to write. I was sitting there with my mouth open for the entire second half. I mean... wow.
Sooooo... Patrick totally knows it's his. At least he's getting smarter, even if Kate pulled the whole 'only if there is another fetus' (ok, I'm not 100% sure those were your exact words, but it was somthing to that effect and it needed a paraphrase at least) thing. And their insults were too funny too. I mean, kissing a cut probably wouldn't be fun- I'll have to admit- but come on... It's Patrick!
And Pete... I had to love him in this chapter. Especially covering his eyes with his sister and refering to the Yoko Ono bit from chapter 10... totally like him to get all weirded out after he was in charge of the video and all. :)
And I dont know who this Gwen person is, but she seemed pretty great. :) Painting on boob covers and all... my kind of girl.
Ok, so I gave a 'moving' point as opposed to 'hot' because this just didn't feel smutty at all.
Soooo.... yeah. I also loved the other Sophia refrences. They were perfect... the comment about the ex and what to expect from the scene. Totally fantastic.
Ok, crappy review again... very sorry when all I really wanted to way was 'wow' about a hundred times.Author's response
AHHHH another essay for me to love!
i'm sorry you keep getting jipped out of first review, but you know no matter where your reviews are located they are always amazing.
i love how you pull the sophia bush refrences out, i think your the only one who notices which makes me smile.
also i have no idea who this Gwen character is, but she seems amazing to me.
as always your review was amazing.
xxxoBroken Down On Memory Lane
(#) danceislife 2007-03-31
damn....damn..Author's response
:D - i'm guessing you liked? lol.Broken Down On Memory Lane
(#) GwenMerlon 2007-03-31
Oh, PS... LOVED the 'What's My Age Again' refrences. I just watched that the other day... you know, bringing me back to my childhood and all... so that totally put a smile on my face!!!
Maybe I'll go watch that again... sigh Blink boys...Author's response
Blink boys were the good ones - now they're '+44,' and 'Angels and Airwaves' boys, which i don't think are as hot as Blink boys.
sigh Blink boys.
lololololBroken Down On Memory Lane
(#) patricksgirl84 2007-03-31
OMG!! Loved it!! I'm glad Patrick knows now. I couldn't go on much longer if he didn't. :) I love your writing!!Author's response
yes it would be stupid of him not to know it was his. lol.Broken Down On Memory Lane
(#) watch_the_sky 2007-03-31
you are far to gracious to us with your constant updates lately and i'm so grateful for it, this story has me laughing and crying and screaming and jumping in happiness. no joke. you're a graet writer and i love you well your words flow and transition. once again, AMAZING update, im glad patrick isn't an idiot. and i love that pete turns into a 5year old boy when it comes to dirty things and his sister. keep up the great work, as alwaysAuthor's response
this review made me laugh i love your analogies and yes, it is good that Patrick isn't an idiot.
thank you so much for reviewing so adamently.
xxxo.Broken Down On Memory Lane
(#) fobgal1 2007-03-31
LOL! I loved it! Aout damn time that Patrick realized it was his. And also poor Patrick, he just couldn't stop himself at the video shoot. Update soon please!Author's response
lol Patrick isn't THAT much of an idiot to not realize that Kate's his babys mama. and yes, Patrick can also not control himselfwhich i find very humerous.Broken Down On Memory Lane
(#) fob4ever 2007-03-31
woah. that was heated. haha. hot too. awkward, but hot. i looove it!Author's response
hahahaha, yes, thank you.Broken Down On Memory Lane
(#) duckapple 2007-03-31
Wow.
Tension.
Of the sexual persuasion.Author's response
lol yes, it was of the sexual persuasion.
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