- "Nowhere" is one word.
Try using italics instead of caps and single quotes for emphasis. It'd come over smoother.
Can't really picture Jack using words like "sensuality" and "negativity." Makes him sound a touch New-Agey.
You don't seem to make the case for why Will is there on the Pearl with Jack.
This could be cool if it were a bit more focused.
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