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Chapter 12
11 reviewsPeyton Clarkson's boyfriend had just signed with one of the biggest recording companies around, and now hes heading out to tour with another major band, Fall Out Boy. What happens when he can't alw...
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(#) GwenMerlon 2007-05-07
Um, yeah, so I really should be studying, but you obviously know where my priorities lie. Yeah, that's right... reading stories on ficwad!!!
So I thought this chapter was expecially good: soooo full of emotion! Peyton should really consider working for some daytime soap opera... she could give them a few tips on how things are done.
I thought the break up was done wonderfully. We all knew Oliver wouldn't be a walk-over kind of guy and he certainly stayed true to his character. And the sibling issues were played up as well. I can honestly relate to the frustrations in having a sister and thinking one is continually doing something they aren't aware of (such as stealing attention etc). These little things always add up.
And Anna??? I had a feeling you'd mess with our emotions in that one. I was sad when Patrick's hands slid from around Pey's waist at seeing her. Shame shame shame.
Ok, so I rated as usual. I love you as usual.... any more 'as usuals'?? I don't think so... You're fantastic!!!Author's response
Gwendowlyn(sp) can I just say you sound like a writing critic! LOL which is a good thing. It makes me feel like I did something right. haha anywho
I thought the chapter needed emotion and a preview of whats to come. So I had to throw in the breakup...my first intentions were to just throw it out and just "pretend" that it happen and have you guess what was said. But I'm glad I did it this way. It came out better than what I had orginally expected.
hahahah The sibling rivalary...gotta love it. LOL I wanted to make it evident that this wasn't the first time things had occured like this between Peyton and Gwen. Their relationship is just so "falty" that it needs alot of mending..and I'm sure thats whats going to happen soon.
YES ANNA! lol you knew that one was coming sooner or later..I just chose sooner rather than the later LOL. Also I did need Patrick to kind of separate(sp) himself from Peyton in order to understand what is going on around him. You will see what I mean in the next chapter lol. I must say though, I was very proud of myself for having it flow nicely. I haven't done that in forever. I think I may be getting better at this "writing" thing lol
no no no you are fantastic Gwen! Kudos to your review and loveFalter
(#) patricksgirl84 2007-05-07
Oh, very exciting. Love it. How could Oliver bring her though? Very evil.Author's response
Oliver is just evil like that LOL He likes to stir the pot I say...Falter
(#) XTinkerbellX 2007-05-08
Oh my god.
Oliver is such an asshole.
I can't believe....No wait,yes I can.
It was a really good chapter though...I just hate the cliffhanger though.
lolAuthor's response
LOL I love how you called him an asshole and believe it too. He seems like hes the one whose causing the drama lol I hate cliffhangers too..but you know you secretly love them lolFalter
(#) angeltearsburn 2007-05-08
Damn oliver bringing Anna just when things are looking up those two get another dose of bad luck keep it up and ill keep readingAuthor's response
LOL for some reason I read your review and started to sing "Drama doesn't follow me, It rides on my back, I make it ugly, and they sure love to stare." HAHAHA idk why though...but I will keep it up so you had better keep reading lolFalter
(#) ssketchator 2007-05-08
Augh!
I make that noise, very loudly, every time a chapter ends. If I may be selfish for a moment, you ought to spend every moment of every day updating this story. AKA I don't want it to end and I love it more than most people love anything.
I'm also glad that Peyton finally got up the balls to bitch Oliver out, and that Gwen and Peyton seem to be smoothing things out, slow as it may be.Author's response
Augh! Can I just say I love your review LOL and you can be selfish..someone else told me I needed to quit my job and just write all day and night. That would kinda be hard LOL but I would sooo do it. I'm really glad you love the story, there is still alot more to come. I'm thinking of leaving the ending open to where there could be a sequel..I'm not to sure yet hmmmm lolFalter
(#) punkypromqueen 2007-05-08
GAH -
GAH
GAH!
thats the only sound that i can fathom right now.
soooo good.
xxo.Author's response
GAH
GAH
GAH
LOL thats a funny sound when you say it out loud. Thank youFalter
(#) fobgal1 2007-05-08
Ok I really really hate Oliver now!
Please please dont let Anna come between Patrick and Peyton!
That would be horrible.
And I hope Oliver doesn't get violent with Peyton.
He seems like the violent type.
Please please please update soon.Author's response
::hums::.....I'm sorry what? LOL Oliver is evil. Peyton and Patrick and Anna are my new love triangle. I will update asap...
If you didn't notice I skipped the violence for a reason...::continues humming::Falter
(#) LOVELA 2007-05-08
I'm pretty sure my heart just stopped. Amazing. I don't trust Oliver at all. I'm scared for Peyton. And ANNA! WHAT?! Just when you thought things were going to get better. Absolutely Wonderous! Let the dramarama begin.Author's response
LOL its like a train wreck though...and drama drama drama..I should just change Peyton's name to the Dramallama..cause thats pretty much what she brings with her...I'm glad you liked it!Falter
(#) riaryder 2007-05-22
Oh my!
I hate that damn Oliver. Just when things looked like sorting themselves outt, too. But, hey, I love the drama.
Bring it on!!Author's response
Oliver is a douche. End of story. Well..not really..then there really wouldn't be a point in me continuing...and yeah..that made no sense..but umm...I lalala Love drama as much as the next girl LOL
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