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The Mistake
(#) XTinkerbellX 2007-05-31
I'm so happy you updated.
I was Yay!Gwen finally updated.lol.
Anyway,I love Rindi and Alex already.
Like always its amazing.The Mistake
(#) punkypromqueen 2007-05-31
ok so Gwennie this was fabulous - and i didn't think it could get any better than what i read last night but you totally just went above and beyond.
The beginning was kind of sad, i just wanted to hug little Ava and tell that creepy man to peace out - i hope he didn't do anything to her or else i'm going to have to morph myself into fiction world and kick his ass - and i'll do it too.
the second part of the chapter literally made my life - and who are these Alex and Rindi characters? they sound amazing and fabulous, lol.
Such a great job Gwen really. No need to worry about this chapter you did fabulous - you don't give yourself enough credit.
i'd give you all my points if i could but for right now i think i'm going to settle with exciting cause i would put funny but the first half of the chapter wasn't funny - so exciting it is.
love you times infinity.The Mistake
(#) punkypromqueen 2007-05-31
this is me reviewing again just to prove to you that this chapter is amazing!
it made me smile like this -> :D
so don't worry anymore,
you did great.
xxo.The Mistake
(#) hips-n-hearts86 2007-05-31
..Gwen....my dear...LORDY LORDY ITS ABOUT DAMN FREAKIN TIME!!!! lol ya know I love you..ok ok ok okokok?
sooo you sent me half of this yesterday and I told you it was already perfect..but how could you make it more than perfect..you cease to amaze me my dear friend cease to amaze...
ok onto the review...HOLY SHIT was Ava rapped when she was younger? or am I just getting that vibe..I soooooo get that vibe...atleast I think I am...OoOo or is her momma hustling..LOL I know that can't be true but I can atleast try ya know..haha but something with that old man..hmmm....does her mom get involved with the Mob too? Idk...something has to link these...and I will find a way..I'm very tempted to call you right now and like get it out of you haha
ok...the whole Ava and Patrick scene with Pete in the background was TOTALLY cute haha I like swoooooned the entire time...I was like AWWWW LOVE!!! lol
and whose the whore named Rindi..geeezz she seems sleazy wtf at that HAHA no but I love how you captured me...I don't have the manicured nails..although I should really get them done soon...haha and I can't believe you got all this from me driving a BMW LOL an old one to be exact...I love you..didn't I say that already LOL but I think you did an awesome job on figuring me out..you know all about my obscene language and you got that to a tee...thank you LOL
and Alex..lalalalalalalove the BFF vibe between her and Rindi..they totally play off each other so well it was incredible...I need a friend like that..lol oh wait I do have one..lol only I think me and her would have to switch roles LOL
ok so you know the usual is coming up...write more yada yada yada..I will hound you until you do you know...lol I'm very good at doing that..I wanted you to update when you were drinking the long islands but sadly I see I didn't win that time..but I lalalalaloved the chapter and I lalalalalalove ya!!!! your awesome...I think a road trip is in order soon my friend
Rindi.
Ps. WHOA! Totally forgot about the "errand" Patrick has to run..wtf is up with that..what is the errand...hmmmm I might call you LOLThe Mistake
(#) FallOutGrl 2007-06-01
Brilliant.
Just brilliant.
Pete is intensly beautiful.
KEEP IT UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!The Mistake
(#) rejected_smurf_god 2007-06-01
YEAH!!!!!!!!! YOU UPDATED!!!!!!!! I LOVE YOU SO MUCH NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
coughcough Ok, uh-uh, just add another one soon....
-Peter-The Mistake
(#) ssketchator 2007-06-01
Oh you had better write a new chapter.
How much do I love Rindi? Drugs, curse words, high heels, sass. Wonderful.The Mistake
(#) FrostedGlass 2007-06-01
First off: YUCK! Was that greasy dude creepy. Good job on that one.
This made my day:
/"Right." Pete continued. "Because that's the kind of attention I want; the near death kind." He shook his head, causing the hood he had pulled up to hide his identity slip slightly. "No thank you."
Patrick shrugged. "I, personally, think it's better than being about some random scandal, or anything having to do with whom I'm currently dating... or my penis."
Pete blatantly ignored the 'penis' comment. "That's because you're never dating anyone interesting- no offence, Ava."
"None taken."/
Also, since I am an Alex, too, I am psyched. ;)
Another wonderful chapter! You must have a point.The Mistake
(#) thatgirlinthecorner 2007-08-14
this is one of the BEST fanfics i've ever read.
seriously.
update soon!
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