- You're missing a question mark here and there and "Be" gets caps in title-style, but overall it seems to come through.
Jack's impressions are most chortleworthy. Very nice after a day at work.
"Whatnot" is one word.
It's usually spelled, "Yeah." "Yea" is pronounced "yay" and is used in formal things like "Yea though I walk through the valley of death."
"Pretty nice" doesn't sould too Willish to my ears.
I can't really buy Jack allowing Will to blast the crud out of the Pearl right after he'd gotten it back, but it's worth a little "huh" at the end of the story to get that conversation. Funny.
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