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• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) red_jacobson 2008-02-08

  very very nice! glad to see another chapter of this story; and can't wait until Dumbles get his very public spanking GRIN
  
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• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) banner 2008-02-08

  Wonderful combat with Flitwick - he's woefully underused. I really enjoyed the glimpse into his mind, also.
  I can't help feeling sorry for Draco, though. He's a useless jerk, but he's lost everything, one bit at a time. I still don't like him, you understand.

  Author's response

  - The little guy is fun to write.
  
  - Draco, sadly, has made his bed. He could have acted like a human being all these years and none of this would have happened to him...

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) Entilzah 2008-02-08

  Woa... Very well done. Excellent characterizations (loved the Filius - though I wonder how he could get to be 1/8th goblin if 4 generations were not allowed to have permanent relations as you noted) and action scenes. It is always good to see Snape taken down hard.
  
  Good scene with Hermione and Daphne as well.

  Author's response

  - I should have explained better. Since his great grandmother (a biker babe type) strapped on a security goblin following a drunken Hogwarts graduation party, filius is the first in his line to manifest the Goblin stature. The others could all 'pass'...

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) Meteoricshipyards 2008-02-08

  excellent chapter! Wonderful action from both Justin and Filius. Loved Amelia's pre-arrest conference, too.
  
  Thank you so much for an exjoyable story.
  
  Tom A.

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) scruffy1 2008-02-08

  OH MY!!! finally someone has used a mad Filius Flitwick and highlighted his dueling talents. it is obvious that he teaches because he loves being around children. and I can see the entire scene play out in your words. Snape being over confident and Filius forcing him to stand in one spot for the final two curses. Very well done.
  
  You did him justice something JKR never did.
  
  
  

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) MonCappy 2008-02-08

  That motherfucker otherwise known as Snape is finally beginning to get what he deserves.

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) vasilis01 2008-02-08

  Excellent chapter after the false update earlier. i loved the scene with Flitwick. Keep writing.

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-02-08

  I absolutely loved your Flitwick. It shows a new depth and a spirituality to the deminitive man. I do hope that you do not leave us hanging as this updated only gave the briefest of tastes of things to come. Update soon.
  
  Geovanni Luciano

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) TimeMage 2008-02-08

  Excellent chapter! Loved the Justin/Luna moment!
  
  There should be more fics about duelers. I only remember reading one where Harry was a professional dueler(at least when they went into detail for it)

• The Acts Of Betrayal

  (#) Cateagle 2008-02-08

  I definitely loved the way you gave us a look inside Justin and Filius and both rang true. -wry grin- I loved the way things "just happened" to bring Luna and Justin together and how deeply and quickly they bonded. I'm certain Michael Cormer never expected that response from a Hufflepuff. Filius definitely seems to be awakening a part of him he's left sleeping for some time and I suspect 'most everyone, Severus especially, had forgotten about it; 'twas thoughtful of Filius to give Severus one free lesson as a going away present.
  
  I loved the depiction of Madame Bones and the auror team making such a professional effort; it's what I'd expect from a no-nonsense person like her. I expect Albus is going to be rather upset but not in the position to do much (though I suspect he'd like to take Severus out of the picture completely before he spills too much) and that's going to add to the pain when he falls.
  
  The initial scene where Hermione and Daphne are realizing just how much they've bonded was good for defining them and I loved the discussion about the "fractured Harry". That "I'll clear my calendar" line should sent shivers through the Dursleys, no matter where they were; they won't like what's coming to them at all.

  Author's response

  - As I see it, like most guys in new relationships, Justin is just hanging on for dear life, trying desperately to figure out how he got here.
  
  - Filius was a machine in his younger life (I was tempted to give him a 'quiet man' backstory where he accidentally killed a friend in a exhibition duel but that seemed a bit cliche.) At some point he lost the fire that drove him to prove himself and settled into the quiet life of a teacher, picking up his wand occasionally to demonstrate to arrogant young turks that they aren't as good as they think they are. Snape's actions offended Filius deeply. He didn't go looking for trouble, he allowed the Aurors to do their job, but he suspected that they would underestimate Snape. When they did, he stopped the man from escaping. He's a little ashamed that he enjoyed it so much, but willing to live with it.
  
  - I see Amelia and her hand picked Aurors as being what most cops try to be.
  
  Hermione and Daphne are becoming more relaxed with each other, and besides (in my experience) women enjoy discussing just how messed up their men are. These two just happen to share said man and know him considerably better than most women know their men.

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