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Domination
(#) kcgx23 2008-02-27
I like the story and would love to read more, I do have a question, are Tonks parents dead or was that a typo?Author's response
ahh im such a idiot. Mistake form the first chapter, they are alive! I will put it in the authors note of next chapter.Domination
(#) Maxtaf 2008-02-27
Wow! This has the potential to be a really yummy story! Porn WITH a Plot, the best kind.
Let's see. My take on the various additions to the harem, in the order that I would like to see them.
Ginny. Would have been my first choice, then Tonks, but I can see why you chose the order you did. I can also see Molly trying to keep her away from Harry, now that it is known that he is a Master Dom. By force if necessary. Either that, or Molly will bring her around intentionally, knowing that her daughter is a Sub. Maybe the reason behind Molly's prudishness has been an effort to keep Ginny from making the same mistake that Tonks made (not remaining a virgin). Molly is a Dom, so she would know what her daughter's future man would want. I also see Ginny a bit of a masochist. Not into humiliation or anything, just gets off on pain. Maybe a sideline of her having been raped in the Chamber by Tom.
Gabrielle. Young hot Veela slut. OH, Yeah! Sirius-ly, I've always liked Gabrielle as a Harry match, Veela nature aside. I guess I just like the Knight-in-shining-armour-who-saves-the-girl theme. Ginny in the Chamber, Gabby in the lake... I can see her either as another Complete Sub, or as a Sub-in-name-only because her Veela nature (or prevailing laws) requires that she be bound to someone. She has very little personality in cannon, so you could do as you wished. I kinda think her with a true Dominant nature, with predjudicial laws that require her to be bound into subservience due to her race, would be a really fun combo. She would be Sub to Harry, and would learn to enjoy it somewhat, as Harry would support her in whatever she wanted to become, even if that was Mistress of his harem, second only to him.
Luna. A serious Subbie, partially realized at a young age, but not bound, which explains her odd behavior, as you said that insanity was the result of an unbound sub. Fully Recognized by her Dom, Neville, but he died before he could bind her and she slipped even further into insanity. If Harry finds her and binds her, she may regain ALL her sanity, leaving her not Loony at all anymore.
Hermione. I have always thought, from Book 1, that Hermy was a serious unrealized subbie. Her (subconscious) Nature wants to be totally controlled, hence her ongoing love affair with rules and authority. Her conscious mind, raised to loathe slavery in all its forms by a Western Muggle education and liberal parents, rejects this entirely, and she ends up at war with her own nature. S.P.E.W and her rant against house elf slavery are aspects of her fighting her own submissive nature, in denial and refusing to admit to wanting to be a slave. She can eventually make peace with herself, accept that freesom is not for everyone and that House elves may have a racial Submissive nature, and restrict her adoration of authority to just her Master. She still is a fanatic about following the rules; she just follows Harry's rules now. I think she would either resist the Call to Serve for a long time, or the Call will pull her in immediately, and force her to be bound right then. If she resists once in the bond, Harry would let her have what she says she wants, but she will have to watch as the other girls are getting the domination that she truly craves, and she'll eventually cave.
Fleur. While she could be in the same boat as Gabby, somehow I just don't see it. Fleur would be a sub if I were writing it.
The Patils. Exquisitely beautiful, exotic, erotic twins, raised in a society that accepts polygamy, and expects women to be subservient to their men, and to learn how to please them physically. The same society that produced the Kama Sutra. 'Nuff said.
Lavender. Ummm. No.
Daphne. The Ice Queen/Princess of Slytherin. Just the title reminds me of a character in another story, who got the same nickname, for much the same reason. The story is named "The Favor", and is on asstr.org under the author name of MWTB, and has been the basis for my view of Daphne since I started reading Fanfic. I see Daphne as a girl who realizes that she is a serious submissive and masochist in her first year, and is stuck in a House where, if she were to let it out, she would instantly find herself as a sex toy for Draco and gang, and anyone else he felt like impressing, including the Dork Lard. She's smart enough to want more from her life, and knows that if it ever got out, her life would effectively be over. So she refuses everyone, and gets the Ice Bitch rep, hoping for someone she can trust to be her Master. Enter Harry, stage left. Again, 'nuff said.
Anyway, really just letting my fingers babble. Feel free to borrow any ideas you like, or not. Won't bother me none either way.
Author's response
I already have sent Luna away, she has disappeared in to South America. HErmione I am leaning towards not including her, but I am not sure why. I think I have just been reading a lot of Hermione and kind of sick of it. I already have a plan for the Patils, thye will be introduced soon. I have already begun writing Ginny's chapter (AKA next chapter). Fleur and Gabby I want to add, but I am still trying to figure out how. Daphne will be added, but probably not for a while. Thanks for the cool ideas.Domination
(#) jabarber69 2008-02-27
Hey great story! But I would like to point out that you might want to change your mind about Hermione and here's why:
I know this woman, been friends with her for about 10 yrs she is drop dead gorgeous, worksout and keeps her body in outstanding shape she is also the exact same character as Hermione in fact I would have to say that rowling woman copy her hermione character from my friend: No-it-all bookworm. according to her she is always right and I and of course mostly guys are always wrong! Very bossy nature, dominate right! Wrong, I found out one night were sitting around drinking wine on a weekend night, after first bottle (weve always been able to talk about anything and everything including sex, were friends only, never been intimate with her but have seen her naked alot, loves to walk around naked in front of me)she dropped a bomb on me, she admitted after awhile that she has always had this fantasy of being tied up and dominated, after much more coaxing I found out she was very subservant, in the bedroom dept but had never gone thur with it, not being able to trust a guy enough. I guess I should of seen it earlier cause she will do alot of things to please me, like walk around naked, but since she's more like a sister and even though I find her very attractive I dont get turned on by her, but she wanted me to tie her to a bed once while she was naked, she just wanted to know what it felt like, hell she even told me if I was horny and needed to get off then go ahead and do it, in fact at that time she told me if I ever needed sex or to get off she was available, in fact she told me she would pull her pants down and bend over a desk or chair anytime I wanted, really submissive, but again you wouldnt see it unless you were looking for it.
So again you might want to change your mind about making Hermione one of his slaves.Domination
(#) icyflame 2008-03-06
You might want to fix your first chapter, you stated that Tonks' parents had died near the beginning of the war yet they are alive in the second chapter.Domination
(#) zlaker1001 2008-03-08
Came out a little late on this site, but ts all good. Reread all of em, good show mate...Domination
(#) neosin 2010-03-07
well, there was a few things that I did not like, but the story (so far) is very likable, I hope the smut does not squash the storyline. I have yet to find out. beyond that I was wondering how dumbledore has managed to stay alive, not criticizing your story but a lot of them Dumbledore manages to stay alive. the guy is like a cockroach (sorry I got off topic)
-NeosinDomination
(#) LabRat 2012-08-25
A headpiece? Whatever happened to the all purpose collar?
She was not a virgin and while he knew that shouldn’t bother him, it did. No offense, but this part bothered me as being arrogant and stupid. Given the fact that she was a grown woman, as well as her nature, he couldn't have honestly expected her to be a virgin. For him to do so would make him either incredibly naive, or quite frankly a dick.
Another part that botherd me was the anal part. Again with her nature, he was asking a bit much. And her comment that she was saving it for him was beyond silly, since she couldn't have possibly known that he was going to be a master, that she would ever even encounter a master, or that she was going to be his pet.
Treasure seems like a mouthful for a nickname or pet name.Domination
(#) MrNorrell 2014-08-27
Just having read through Chapter 2 I could definitely see Dumbledore bringing Hermione into this to try to cause trouble for Harry. Also, in order to throw some variety into the types of Natures Harry has to deal with, and as a way to eventually bring her into the fold, you could have Hermione be some kind of Combative/Dominating Submissive. While it's in her Nature to submit, her Nature (read canon personality) won't allow it until that person proves themselves equal to her physically, magically, argumentatively, etc. or any aspect of the above.
That's not to say that this dominance is permanent though (even though the relationship might be). It's only once the emotional battle's engaged that Hermione would start revving up. Should someone get the better of her she'd love nothing more than to be fucked by them in all their glory. Should she win though, she'd fuck him and fuck him hard so that they'd know who won the fight. After that they'd go back to normal/relationshippy normal until the next fight.
Being a Master of slaves is one thing, but eventually having no spirit in those he's Dominating would make it one long boring endeavor.
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