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One Man Army
(#) einuom 2008-04-13
great story and Original plot just wish the chapters were longer.Author's response
heh heh, chapter four was one of my longer chapters. It took me 8 hours to write it.... rather than the whole week for chapter 3.One Man Army
(#) fety0101 2008-04-14
very good chapter, i agree with einuom that it is slightly short but that doesnt matter. I like how you described the other Clone majors i can see lots of building from them and whats in this chapter. from my original comment you replied about not knowing weather to bash GinnyHermione, personally any story that does is usually a good read except the thousands that have ginny in an arranged marriage with him and hermione spying for Dumbles.Author's response
I will probably make Hermione into a hard ass conservative that reject the belief in the force. As for Ginny, she will probably have an insane fangirl obsession with him/male clones. As for Ron, jealousy shall be his fault. As for dumbles, manipulative and ruthless. Both of them will most likely die from this.One Man Army
(#) cj_cold 2008-04-14
Great chapter.
Wonder if Harry is going to be up to see the finale of the battle.
Loved meeting more of Harry's subordiates. Will the clone captains and majors have names?
Speaking of which I don't think their was a major in the canon so what is the organization of Harry's Legion?
Wonder what the Kamino's who are observing think of the Legions performance?
Which reminds me, is the Legion going to come up with a nickname or symbol/emblem marker for thier unit. Maybe a stag, dragon, or phoenix emblem.
Is the Legion going to always just be clones or will they form the backbone and allow other volunteers to join Harry's Army. Maybe throw in some droids and get the best of both worlds from the Republic and Seperatist Forces.
More soon please.Author's response
They will most probably have an emblem, but don't know at the moment. You'll also see the the Kaminoans again next chapter. The 1st Legion will only be female clones. But the other Legions will not, so there will be possibilities of other races joining the army. I'm not leaning towards droids because they can be hacked sto serve another person. While organic legions are genetically created to 'be' loyal.
I use the Grand Army of the Republic's Organization for his army, here:
Systems Army—2 Sector Armies (294,912 troops) led by a High Jedi General (Jedi High Council member).
Sector Army—4 corps (147,456 troops) led by a Senior Jedi General (Jedi Master).
Corps—4 legions (36,864 troops) led by a clone marshal commander and a Jedi General.
Legion/Brigade—4 regiments (9,216 troops) led by a senior clone commander and a Jedi General.
Regiment—4 battalions (2,304 troops) led by a clone trooper commander, clone regimental commander, and a Padawan Commander.
Battalion—4 companies (576 troops) led by a major. (Speculated)
Company—4 platoons (144 troops) led by a captain.
Platoon—4 squads (36 troops) led by a lieutenant.
Squad—9 troops led by a sergeant.One Man Army
(#) Anaknisatanas 2008-04-14
Nice battle descriptions. I like this cross-over. There are very few cross-overs I enjoy, so take that as a compliment. Will Harry ever return to his own world?Author's response
Yes he will.... after he done a little conquests across the the galaxy. That's all I can say right now without ruining some of the future scenes.One Man Army
(#) Cateagle 2008-04-14
I'd rate this as a good action scene, you conveyed the gist of the action without getting too graphic. I do like the way the clones are developing different personalities and 'twill be interesting to watch Harry interact with them. I do applaud his "lead from the front" approach as it makes for a much more responsive effort and shortens lines of communcation when speed is vital to winning the battle. It remains to be seen, though, just how painful recovering Drrem City turns out to be but I'm certain Harry and the 1st Legion will be up to the challenge.Author's response
Heh Heh.... I only give the gist of the scene because I can't decribe it any further. Harry is a Gryffindor at heart after! It seems fitting to have him lead from the front. I'm not planning to have a vicious for it. After all he'll need his troops for bigger fishes in the galaxy.One Man Army
(#) zombiewolf 2008-04-20
I like it, the only potential problem I can see is geting the troops names mixed up. mabey you could put a list of their names and a one sentence description of them a the start of the next chapter so we can put that in notepad or something.One Man Army
(#) zombiewolf 2008-04-20
I like it. the only potential problem I can see is geting the troops names mixed up. mabey you could put a list of their names and a on sentence descrioption of them a the start of the next chapter so we can copy it to notepad or something.
Your Lord and Master
~Zombie WolfOne Man Army
(#) zombiewolf 2008-04-20
I like it. the only potential problem I can see is geting the troops names mixed up. mabey you could put a list of their names and a on sentence descrioption of them a the start of the next chapter so we can copy it to notepad or something.
Your Lord and Master
~Zombie WolfAuthor's response
heh heh, dude you sent me 3 same reviews man. I know of the problem. I will probably put their names on top of each chapter that they show up on. It gave me a few headaches writing chap.5
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