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Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) lycus 2008-05-09
Well it was a good chapter, but the last time I checked harry never burst into tears. and you made him a little wimpy. I hope that you make him a bit harder in your upcoming chapters.Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) Vanir 2008-05-10
I agree with lycus, please try and limit the waterworks. On the other hand, i do realise that you're rebuilding him right now, and that he'll be more of a badass later.
I really like this story. Not because of the literary qualities, because it doesn't have them, but because of the energetic style. Every chapter is biting the bridles to push on. The weaknesses are skills, which can quite easily be learned. You have all the tools. Now use them. Isn't it about time to meet someone he knows and start the Legend?
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(#) Dragen 2008-05-10
Sorry I too have to agree with lycus, Harry never burst into tears, speically over not getting a weapon, maybe at seeing his parents maybe, but not getting a weapon.
But from that great chapter, I love what happened to the weapons to make new sword for Harry. I like what the three potions did, very nice.
Shame about the Phoenix eggs.Author's response
I wanted to illustrate that the chamber was full of love! Even getting the weapon, it is full of many memories and generations of Potter history. It seems natural that all that family love would make Harry very emotional!
But thank you for the constructive critisism. It's nice to see it without people being mean and flaming! I promise that Harry won't cry nearly as much, if at all!Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) einuom 2008-05-10
dislike that harry burst into tears. that was a major let down. i will try to finish reading the chapter when i see some more chapters to see if he is a wimp or not.Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) Marshmallow 2008-05-11
"Like a snake, he wiggled his way through the hole and into the vault, and subtly, he entered!"
Did you mean to make it say 'sexily, he entered!'? because that would make more sense hehe.
Harry cries a lot. I wish I could hug him. Will he and Ginny get together? I don't really liek flur.Author's response
Lol! Harry would be sexy doing anything! But no, sorry, but I have an inside joke with some of my gf's about the word subtly and I just threw it in! I don't know what will happen with Ginny - I think she's SOOOO cute but more of a kid sister than a girlfriend for Harry...it just makes me think of incest and that's really icky. I mean, did you know that I once accidentaly clicked a fic that was Harry/Lily? EWWWWWWWW!!
But don't worry, Ginny is too good a friend and too cute and smart to not show up in this story! She will be important!Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) GryffindorDragon 2008-05-12
Well, given what all Harry has gone through, it's not too surprising that he needs to cry. So this is a pretty good chapter. But why wasn't there anything in Slytherin's vault?Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-05-21
Good chapter, Harry is a bit of a cry baby though.
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(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25
Much better on the length, keep working at it. I think that your review reply to Dragen illustrated more of the love than what you wrote in the chapter. I know that you could probably see it but you have to describe it for it to be properly conveyed.
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(#) joehundredaire 2008-06-13
“I AM HARRY JAMES RAVENCLAW BLACK MERLIN GRYFFINDOR SLYTHERIN HUFFLEPUFF JAMES POTTER!” Harry shouted, waving Merlin’s staff around.
This pretty much sums up everything wrong with the chapter, and the story as a whole...
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