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17 reviewsLavender Brown has two guardian angels. It's a long ride on the Yuletide Train. *Warning: contains sweaty snuggle-bunnies!*
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Achieving Clarity
(#) dexterz 2009-04-22
JKR's canon has left me jaded towards ron :S
he is portrayed a walking recycling bin capable of topics such as quidditch food chess...
its nice what you have done to the tertiary toons here....good going...waiting to read more
-DexAuthor's response
Yeah, I have to agree, Ron is not my favorite side-kick, why couldn't Harry have had a Tonto? Or a Toto for that matter?
Ron is neither hero nor villain in this story, he just is. Think of him as furniture.
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(#) DarQuing 2009-04-22
I liked how the girls helped Lavender with her problem. I don't think we got to see enough of Lav to know how smart she was or what she was into, so this is a perfectly reasonable way to portray her. :)
I look forward to the next chapter. :)Author's response
Thanx, to be honest, I wrote Lavender as any one of a thousand high school girls I've taught who found themselves desperately in lurve.
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(#) jjracer24 2009-04-22
Great chapter!!! I liked how it's now Potter's commandos and not Dumbles Army, never really was I think. Are you going to add the rest of the DA to that or keep it a small elite squad? Also, wasn't sure if you came up with it or not but I thought the King's Cross Express was quite clever. Keep up the good work and see you next time.Author's response
Thanx,
I agree, it never really was Dumbldore's Army.
Potter's commandos will be a small, well organized squad. think of them as minutemen with wands!
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PS The Kings Cross Express, or Yule Express is all mine.Achieving Clarity
(#) issabissa 2009-04-23
Loved the chapter as usual! Keep up the great work!Author's response
Thanx, keep reading!
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(#) MonCappy 2009-04-29
Did you have to bash Lavender in this chapter? Ron is utterly worthless as a human being, wizard, canon fodder. There is no reason for Lavender to be infatuated with the piece of trash.
Hopefully in a future chapter, she'll dump him like the bad habit he is.Author's response
In the long run, Lavender will be the better match for Ron. Yes she is somewhat shallow, but looks fade and I can see Lav getting comfortably fat while minding the next Weasley brood.
On a personal note, my High School crush, Miss Unattainable, Nineteen Seventy Something, at our ten-year reunion was still single and had morphed into the shape of a beachball.
Meanwhile, my wife, plain and ignored by her HS classmates was the bell of the ball!
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(#) FreakyRufus 2009-05-02
Just as a quick FYI, Kasmir is a disputed territory between India and Pakistan. On the other hand, cashmere is a type of wool, named for Kashmir goats, from which it was originally produced.
> "It's from Cashmere." She breathed.Author's response
Nicely caught, but remember, Geography is not Luna's long suit - remember, she thought Viet Nam was a shoemaker!
I wonder how many people, besides yourself, caught that particular gag?
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