- Quite the covocation there, beyond space and time. I found it interesting that both Albus and Yoda got something of a lessoning from the discussions (though for Yoda it was a thought-provoking discussion while Albus got properly and publically "spanked"). It's going to be right interesting to see how -this- Harry fares when he returns. Methinks the Albus there is going to be rather suprised by just how obfurate Harry becomes after losing his godfather to Albus' manipulations; that's likely going to be the least of his worries as Harry's obviously not going to go back to the Dursleys and is likely to be unfindable by but those he wants to find him. The results should be quite interesting, especially as he moves to protect and support Amelia Bones (I'm sure Tommy-boy will pitch a fit when that mission comes a cropper). With a knowledge of the force and of lightsabers (though he's still going to have to learn, at least the muscle memory, to use one and then to train others), it should be quite a spectacle when he and his friends open a "can of whupass" on the Deez and Tommy-boy; though I suspect Albus will be in for his share of abuse, too.
I did enjoy your depiction of Yoda and the way he was thoughtful rather than just reacting. Methinks he likely learned at least some patience during his years of hiding in the swamp.
Author's responseHey again, Cat.
It's funny how when I started out, I never intended it to be a 'go-back'. I'd wanted the rest of the crew to tear strips off Albus, grab hold of their balls and go fight Voldemort, taking casualties along the way but eventually hoisting both his and Dumbledore's heads on matching pikes.
My sister and sometimes Beta told me I'd done that before, and so I started to think. Shudder!
The odd thing is, My daughter was watching ANH while I was writing Harry's death scene, and as I scrapped several thousand words, I heard Han say: "May the force be with you." and that gave me the idea.
Yoda: I think it's simply of looking at the problem from a different viewpoint. Yoda is the oldest Jedi in the SW 'verse. Surely he's seen a great deal. That aside, it makes no sense to me, that an order based on life would divorce the thing that makes life what it is. Since the Sith relied heavily upon emotions, the Jedi council could have a target for their 'revenge', as it were. Rewriting the code after the Sith uprising would have been their knee-jerk reaction to something they considered to have caused the massive loss of life in the Sith wars.
Dumbley: The sooner, and the more intense, the better! The man is the worst sort of criminal!
He will be unpleasantly surprised at the 'new' Harry.
Finding Harry: You've hit it on the head. Nuff sed there!
Amelia: Again, right on the money. (And he will.)
Knowledge: Once again You and I are thinking along the same line. He will not be the mystical super-warrior. Yoda gave him the knowledge he needs, but he's going to have to work hard to use that knowledge.
The can of whup-ass comes much later, and surprisingly, Harry won't be abusing Albie...much. That abuse will come from pretty much everybody else.
Yoda has always struck me as a firm but fair teacher. Though I'm basing this on ANH & ESB, his personality was more a combination of all the episodes. He won't be making any more appearances...I think.
Thanks for the detailed review. Without giving away the show, your guesses were surprisingly accurate.
- One other note, I congratulate you on a different approach that I've only seen Clell use, the idea that Dumbledore kept Tom in that orphanage to make him the tool to defeat Grindlewald with and then tried the same approach to make Harry the tool to defeat Tom with. 'Twould be better just to do the bloody job himself.
Author's responseClell and I tend to think alike. He's one of my favorite authors.As for Dumbley/Tom, it's the only thing that makes sense. Tom found out what he was being groomed to be and said 'No thanks!' so Albie had to fight off Grindelwald himself.
When Tommy came back as the big, bad, Harry became Tommy boy, Mk II.
'Twould be better just to do the bloody job himself.
Albus never does things personally. He always uses proxies. It's how he can affect innocence and purity for the unwashed masses.
(#) twilliams1797 2010-04-01one such abuse of children in the UK would be the Magdalene laundries..
What you have written here and in ch1 bring the focus in clearly on that which I want to write,
quite nicely done.
Author's responseHaya Tim.
I did not know about the Magdalene Laundries. I was actually thing more about the Triangle Co. factory. Half the women who died there were children. There were also the shoe factories, in which many thousands of children were injured, maimed or even killed...all for profit. The upside to that was that the unions got a foothold.
I used 'Oliver' and 'Annie' because they were more easily recognizable examples.
If you've gotten an idea, then "Write-on, man!'
- Very good. Here's a discussion of the Jedi code you might find interesting.
Author's responseI read that article. I both agree with it, and disagree. A great deal of that disagreement is because the discourse is anything but. It is the opinions, informed or not, of the writer. Still, I have marked that link and will refer to it from time to time.
Thanks for pointing it out.
(#) longreachjones 2010-04-01Another nicely written chapter, but please be careful as I can clearly see the makings of a Mary-sue on the horizon.
Please don't "crank the power to 11" so to speak immediately, I've always found that it tends to spoil the story more often than not.
Author's responseI will try my best to keep Harry believable. Canonically, he is very powerful, as witnessed by his use of a spell in his third year, which is supposed to be so difficult few adults can use it. There are other references, but that and his summoning his broom from over a mile away indicates he's something to be watched.
His only problem with power is his lack of studying, which I can lay at the feet Albus Toodamnmanynames Dumbledore through his 'best friend' Ron, who has ambition but no drive.
It also stands to reason that his magic has been bound. In canon, Dumbledore has shown no compunctions about abusing Harry...through proxy, of course, and binding his magic, is well within his character. It would also prevent him from performing well unless he really needs to.
He's going to be doing some impressive things, but he is now in possession of a branch of power he never had before. To others he may seem to be horribly powerful, but only because he can do things with the force that they cannot.
- Well they did have to justify the fact of Luke and Mara Jade marrying, and having offspring.
I can't wait to see how harry and the Ministry Six will develop and I suggest Ginny go with Neville while 'Harrmione" add's Luna as their 2nd spouse! Remember they have to have a balance and Hermione-Harry-Luna balance quite well!
Oh and as for Ron, Give him Susan Bones to mature him and get his head straight, as Madam Bones will still be around!
Author's responseI assume you're talking about the new -v- old codes.
While the ministry six will be involved, I have already selected the pairings.
Celestial Harmony is a difficult threesome to write, and not applicable here. I want this to be mostly serious. With those three, I don't think it can be.
Ron is going to be Ron. That's all I can say for now.
(#) jadesabrexiv 2010-04-02I think it was Zahn and Kevin Anderson who came up with the 1990's Jedi code.
good fic, i like the action and the future flashbacks are sweet.
looking forward to C3
Author's responseZhan is one of my favorite SW writers. Anderson is close behind.
Chapter three is due in about a week.
(#) jabarber69 2010-04-02Hey while I simple loved the first chapter, I was wondering how you were going to bring star wars into this....but now after reading this 2nd chapter, I to be totally honest am blown away!!! This was great how you brought his parents, sirius and of course merlin into it and then had the time advance and his freinds told him what happens, well want go into more of the story for spoilers purposes, but man you have one hell of a story going here, cant wait to see what happens next!!!
Author's responseThanks, Jababar!
To be honest, I don't think this particular twist has been tried yet.
Merlin was someone he really respected, and he also acted as an avatar.
I had to bring all his people there both to let him know he was loved, and to give him a solid reason to go back. Spanking Albie wasn't enough. Getting rid of Voldy wasn't enough. It had to be something really important.
The nexus was actually FireLemming's idea. I needed a way for them all to meet, but none of them were dead yet, so, I used the 'outside time' bit.
Thanks for your praise. The next chapter is coming soon to a computer near you!
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