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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) zamia 2010-06-26

  Mate, Loved Liz's tirade at Bumbles. Good to see she took notice of Lord Gryff. As they say, All's fair in love and war and this is war! Glad to see Harry get the Grangers involved. Looking forward to the action to come. Cheers.
  Z

  Author's response

  I had to do a huge amount of research to get Elizabeth's character right. I'm glad you like the result. I've mentioned before, that she's one of the very few national leaders I actually respect, partly because of her integrity and partly due to her actions during and after the war.
  
  Harry kinda forced her hand. Using the diplomatic status of a sovereign nation is underhanded but it does work. As you said, 'Love and war'.
  
  Grangers. Can you imagine any parents as close to their child even considering staying behind? Not me.
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Vanir 2010-06-26

  Insanely interesting. As i, unread and all about Jedi, finds them, the Jedi use their innate natures. The teachings of Jedi allows them to curtail and channel these natures, and as such, i believe Dobby is certainly a true Jedi by his actions. Funny as hell, too.
  This is a fascinating story and i don't review enough. Every time i see a new chapter, i read it immediately, and other responsibilities be damned.
  Thanks
  
  Vanir

  Author's response

  Heya Vanir.
  
  I am fascinated by the Jedi as well.
  
  Until he was killed in a stupid hit/run one of my kiddle'
  s favorite teachers espoused the Jedi teachings. Not the use of the force or lightsabers, but pretty much everything else. He was killed by some jackass who was texting while drag-racing on a public street.
  
  Dobby is taking the place of Yoda, but not entirely. He has the deepest connection of them all to the force, but I'm trying to keep his character as close to original as possible.
  
  Luna is playing the part of Jiminy Cricket, and will be making cameos from time to time. Hermione is the sex interest and she and Harry will be providing the nearly constant headaches to keep Voldy off guard.
  
  I'm really glad you are having fun, but please, don't lose your job because of this story!
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Wolfric 2010-06-26

  Fine chapter. I continue to enjoy your wonderful story. Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  Thank you Wolfric.
  
  There's more coming.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) jabarber69 2010-06-26

  another excellent chapter....but why not take out dumbydork when the queen had him all but neutered with those magic supressing bracelets on!?! hell the queen knew how bad he was why not either go ahead and kill him or better yet throw him into a muggle prison cell like nuremberg along with ponce buddy grindelwald!!!

  Author's response

  I want him to SUFFER! BWAH BWAHAH BWAHAHAHAHA!
  
  The Queen is a Constitutional Monarch. Despite what Dumbledore thinks, not even she can order an execution without due process, and since he is a wizard, A trial of his 'peers' would have to be wizards as well, Now since he's trained the current generation and at least one older one, it's not likely they will convict him of anything brought forward by a 'mere' muggle...queen or not.
  
  'Sides, I have something much better in mind! BWAH BWAHAH BWAHAHAHAHA!
  
  As I have mentioned before: Gellert is dead. He's a stiff! Bereft of life, he rests in peace! He's pushing up daisies, his metabolic processes are now history! He's off the twig!
  
  He's kicked the bucket, He's shuffled off this mortal coil, run down the curtain and joined the choir invisible!!
  
  He's an ex-dark lord...
  
  That said, I will not be using anything from either book sux, or book sux part deux. (unless I already have in which case, 'twas an accident.)
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-06-26

  He needs a sample of Dumbledore's blood? Considering his promise to not use Blood Magics, he's still got lots of options between what he might be able to do "in the Force" and what technology, especially bio-technology, would be able to do. I rather suspect there's going to be an exceedingly shocked Albus Dumbledore when Harry springs his "surprise" on him.
  
  Meanwhile, I like the way that Minerva and Filius are working together, especially after Filius was contacted by the Goblins; 'twould appear that Harry's embrassive attitude is encouraging others (this could make life -very- interesting for those who hold exclusionist views of any kind). Too, I liked the new Weasley family tradition, it's such a useful one for when you don't want to leave a magicl trace.
  
  The initial meeting of Harry's Jedi training class seems to have gone well as Harry's most certainly chosen carefully and they all seem impressed by what they've seen and been told. Certianly the presence of Fawkes and his obvious approval of Harry should go a long way toward easing concerns (wonder what they'd think if they knew that Faekws was deliberately abandoning Albus?). Methinks they might feel a bit different after their first rounds of physical training. Still, his academy looks to be off to a good start. 'Twill be quite the scene when that big, thick letter arrives informing Albus that he's lost a whole lot of capable students along with their tuition payments; I'm not sure which will hurt him more.
  
  The whole sequence with Her Royal Highness was nicely done, especially all the steps taken to convey the distrust and distaste in which Albus is now held after Lord Gryffindor's exposition under a truth spell. Methinks Albus was hoping to leverage the non-magicals' fear and concern about Tom and his merry men into greater control over that side of Britain; that plan has just ocme to a screeching halt; so has his control over the rest, but that's going to come at a slower and much less obvious pace until it's a /fait accompli/.
  
  I can see why the Queen didn't have him "terminated" while she had him magically neutered, she really didn't have firm enough evidence of direct misdeeds to do so. Mind you, I suspect what she did do hurt him more than just killing him would.
  
  Oh, something I didn't comment on earlier, that was a nice throw-away line about Colin selling pictures of Harry to the Daily Prophet; considering taht Harry now owns controlling interest there, it wouldn't do Colin much good, anyway.

  Author's response

  Heya Cat!
  
  As Clarke said: "Any sufficiently advanced technology..."
  
  I'm surprised you missed it, though you came damn close. "...and those thoughts led to a place far from where he’d begun. A place beyond the outer rim territories, in fact."
  
  While Harry has only seen (or heard) episodes 4,5&6, his knowledge is imparted to him by Yoda who is considerably more informed. There will only be a short foray into the 'prequel', and that only as a reference.
  
  ...and Dumbledore is gonna be shocked out of his skin!
  
  ~I like the way that Minerva and Filius are working together, especially after Filius was contacted by the Goblins; 'twould appear that Harry's embrassive attitude is encouraging others (this could make life -very- interesting for those who hold exclusionist views of any kind).~
  
  Precisely. Filius has always been one of my favorite characters. it was obvious from the start that he was half-goblin(until Cuarón gave him that Godawful comb-over!), so it makes sense that he would be involved. He's always been described as very fair, and being a Ravenclaw, he has to be intelligent.
  
  Also, since one of the mandates was to get the sheeple to think for themselves, Inter-species cooperation would be a very good way.
  
  Tradition: It's always a good thing to know how to knock somebody out with a club! Snicker!
  
  The first meeting: Believe it or not, my introduction to police work at the regional training academy in Santa Fe, was very much like this. It was relaxed, and at the same time informative. We were given the liberties of adults and we were expected to behave like adults.
  
  More on that in the next chapter.
  
  ~Certianly the presence of Fawkes and his obvious approval of Harry should go a long way toward easing concerns...~
  
  Yes. Since the WW Sees the phoenix as a purely light creature, hey cannot conceive of anyone so favored as being Dark. Harry is currently playing on that prejudice while at the same time trying to change their thinking about it.
  
  ~(wonder what they'd think if they knew that Fawkes was deliberately abandoning Albus?).~
  
  Either he's been led astray, (Dumbledore might push that one)or Dumbledore is so totally corrupted he shouldn't have had Fawkes in the first place. (Which the rest of the people will be voting for.)
  
  PT & Dumbley's reaction: You're actually right on the button. Evil Chuckle!
  
  Probably losing all that loverly gold.
  
  The Queen: Her Royal Majesty. Highness refers to the prince and princlings...and some lower nobility.
  
  It took a lot of work to get The Queen's personality down, as straight as I could. My grandmother actually knew her, During WWII, but most of what I know was from watching Carol Burnett.
  
  Security measures: Yup. Every step the dumb schmuck takes, he's reminded of how badly he's screwed things up.
  
  It's also the reason it took so long after Harry's visit, before she summoned Dumbley. She hadda get everything ready. Dumbledore is still an exceptionally dangerous person.
  
  It was more that he wanted the Queen to trust that he and he alone could solve the problem...as long as she let him do things his way.
  
  Now, most of his influence is gone, and the rest will be sanded off over the year.
  
  As I told Jabarber, she's a Constitutional Monarch. She can't do that anymore. Dumbledore is still living in the past when a king or queen could.
  
  Colin: Very true. My bad.
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Teresa 2010-06-27

  Hmmmmmm.......Dumbles is feeling even more heat now!(snicker) Why, even the animal kingdom has it in for the "Dark Lord of the Lemon Drops"! He'd better avoid Hagrid's pets as time goes on; it seems that word is travelling quickly about him and his misdeeds. I'm glad that Fawkes is enjoying life while watching Dumbles suffer! It's only fair, Dumbles was wearing him down for years and nearly killed him. The preparations for his meeting with the Queen were excellent, and I loved seeing how her staff set him up for the fall and then her grand finale! Dumbles really has a blind spot courtesy of his delusional attitude; and I suspect that despite her warning he'll try something and get badly burned. Will it be a collaboration with the goblins and/or Harry or just her personal security forces who'll deliver the message? The man just can't catch a break, he's facing determined people in both worlds who have finally gotten his measure and are prepared to whittle his external power and influence away compleatly. One factor that has helped Harry and his allies is their flexibility; and that's something that Dumbles has little chance of understanding. Harry's meeting with the jedi students was very well done; and it was good to see how he answered their questions and concerns honestly, without the dodges that Dumbles and his ilk would have spouted. Harry and Dobby's training sequence was terrific! I also thought that Dobby's stealth manuver to get that blood sample was also very well done. The relationship between Dobby and Harry is excellent; and it's good to see that Harry is willing to take responsibility for dirty work, whether he's directly involved or not. That's one of the things that makes him a better leader and a better person than Dumbles. I also enjoyed Harry's meeting with the Grangers, and seeing Ginny learn the Weasley family version of stupefy! It's so good to see families enjoying themselves at home, doing stuff like working on a car or playing games like trivial pursuit.......a kodak moment! As always, your chapter was fun and exciting! Thanks again! :)

  Author's response

  Well, lessee. The owl was bought by Harry, probably trained by Hedwig, and is owned by the queen. I don't think Dumbley had a chance!
  
  I can just see Luna calling him "DLoLD".
  
  Just now, Hagrid is still Dumbledore's man. Minerva and Filius have a year to convert him, though. They'll also be approaching Pomona and the rest of the staff on a person by person basis. Binns is out, of course. Hmmm...I wonder...?
  
  Fawkes is in a twelve step program just now. With Luna to nurture him and Harry to guide him in mischief, he'll recover soon. Quite honestly, I never could understand how a creature so 'of the light' as a phoenix, could stand to be associated with someone so cruel and obviously dark as Dumbledore. (Sigh! Go figger!)
  
  The preparations to meet the Queen: Security has always been my forte. I simply took what I know and applied it to an enemy who had so many advantages. The filigree bands, are goblin made but the goblins have been shown that the muggles are easier to deal with than the wizards. It's to their advantage. If either dark lord wins, they lose. The PE-4, is something we can do now. Regardless the form, energy is energy.
  
  For the time being, Dumbledore will heed her advice. Eventually he might decide to try something slick, but for the now, he's reeling from the blows.
  
  ~The man just can't catch a break, he's facing determined people in both worlds who have finally gotten his measure and are prepared to whittle his external power and influence away completely.~
  
  Basically, that's exactly right. He's learning that he's not quite as untouchable as he thought. So far, Harry has managed to eliminate his gold, three of his most impressive titles, a fifth of his students and most of his influence, and corrupted his phoenix. More, he's protected most of the potential pawns from retaliation and and has done more damage to Voldemort in two months, than Dumbledore did in fifty years...and is still going strong! Dumbledore still has the school, and the gift of gab, but that's just about it.
  
  Dumbledore's basic problem is that he has begun to believe his press. He ain't as bright and shiny as he wants the world to believe, and soon enough that tarnish is gonna start showing through.
  
  He's also very set in his ways, while Harry&Co. are learning a whole new dance. Voldemort's guerrilla tactics are so effective because there's no defense against them. Harry is applying the same tactics to his enemies, and neither one of them can understand it.
  
  Harry's meeting: Having served for so long in both the Navy and Marine Corps, one of the things I used to hate with a passion was the phrase: "The bigger picture". What they want you to think is that the bigger picture is good for every one. What it really means, is 'Shut up, do as you are told and let those of higher rank do your thinking for you, because you are obviously incapable of doing so for your self...stupid! 'The bigger picture', and 'the greater good' are neither.
  
  That said, I had Harry deal with the troops like I did. I treated my people like people, I was honest and direct with them I told them the upsides and the down. I took interest in their problems and helped them through the red tape whenever I could, and as a result, I had a more dedicated group of people, willing to put up with a bunch of shit in order to get the job done.
  
  Harry/Dobby: Actually, I got the idea from 'The Pink Panther'! Constant Vigilance, man!
  
  Harry/Dobby II: Harry and Dobby have always had a love/hate relationship. Here, I'm trying to tame it. Since Dobby is now bonded to someone he actually respects, he's going to do his very best to please him. Since Harry is responsible for Dobby's welfare, he's going to do his best to ensure it. Which is why he takes responsibility for Dobby's actions. They both know better than anyone what it's like to be left hanging in the breeze.
  
  I like the Grangers. Of all the walk-on characters, they are two of the most important, and yet they get the least air time. Here, I've made them into a family. They don't always get along, and they don't always agree, but they're always there for each other. That's how I've tried to raise my daughter.
  
  Ginny and the boys: "It's a tradition!" Every young girl ought to know how to handle a cosh! It keeps the boys polite!
  
  Speaking of Kodak moments, wait until the next post.
  
  Glad you enjoyed the show, and thanks for the positive feedback!
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) erik 2010-06-27

  A very well thought-out pre-meeting security check and a great Dobby. Well done & thanks.

  Author's response

  Thank yeeeww! Security is a specialty of mine.
  
  And Dobby is one of my favorie characters.
  
  Alorkin
  
  Sorry; favorite

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-06-27

  "The Big Picture" was always a warning phrase to me, it meant someone was going to try and justify something unpleasant (generally a management type out for himself). Mind you, there is a need for the narrow use of the term as a description of an overall project or endeavor, but you can't really do "the big picture" without care of all the little details that go into making up that picture; that concept doesn't seem to have taken root too well.

  Author's response

  It's that too. In the nav. an Admiral will spout the 'Our people are our most valuable resource" line of bullshit until the Carrier is sponsored, and then he won't look twice a the EM's.
  
  Like the self serving upper level managers, an officer is usually out for himself. Int eh 23 years I served, I met more than 4000 officers. I trust three, and I like one.
  
  Without the little details, the 'big picture' is incomplete.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Teresa 2010-06-28

  Chuckle, I always loved the Pink Panther movies! Those stealth ambushes were great! Besides, Moody would be the first to say that "it's not paranoia when someone's really out to kill you!" At that point it's just proper precaution and preparations!(snicker) Actually, I started thinking about the whole phoenix companion = good person: since the relationship is rare to begin the information must be extremely limited. Dumbles might be the first "fallen" companion and that lack of information helps preserve his image. A sucessful bond between Fawkes and Luna might help other phoenixes if they were caught in a similar situation. Did Dumbles take out Grindlewald and decide to apply similar ideas with a bit more sutblety? Having a phoenix would be convincing in that case, and poor Fawkes would be trapped! I wonder if being in Hogwarts and the students helped him resist Dumbles' poison all those years? Is Harry going to use that blood sample in a mixture of current and future technology to add something to Dumbles' lemon drops? Something that might block his ability to use his magic without other effects? I remember a few things in Star Wars that could block force ability. Then again, if he sent Dumbles a bright and shiny dodad that might work too! Dumbles does have a taste for such things! As for Harry and the owls, the Gringotts owl bit him too, that's why I think his true rep is making the rounds everywhere! By the way, wouldn't Dumbles' lose not only Harry's jedi, but their siblings if they were attending Hogwarts? All that lovely money gone.......poor Dumbles!(snicker) I'd love to be a fly on the wall at the next board meeting! With McGonagall and Flitwick whispering their concerns into parental ears his rep is going to tank even faster! Who knows, Dumbles might eventually look back at those interviews with the Queen and Dak Grawswold as "the good old days!" I can't wait for the next chapter of Dumbles' torture.....er, reeducation! I'm looking forward to more Voldy torture as well! Many thanks! :)

  Author's response

  The Pink Panther was always one of my favorites too. My daughter prefers Martin, But for me, it's Sellers all the way!
  
  I intend to follow through with something like that in a few chapters just to ensure the students stay on their toes.
  
  Phoenix=light: I can't say why, Perhaps he's the one who spread the rumour. Mr Ollivander makes his wands from three basic kinds of cores, so Phoenixes can't be all that rare, or none of them would work against each other. In this story, I've implied there are many others throughout the world, though being bonded to one would be somewhat more rare.
  
  Dumbles might be the first "fallen" companion and that lack of information helps preserve his image.
  
  I doubt he'd be the first to fall, but he might well have been able to 'edit' any references to that. He is, after all, a successful politician, and that's the lowest, most underhanded form of criminal life on Earth.
  
  A successful bond between Fawkes and Luna might help other phoenixes if they were caught in a similar situation. I hadn't considered that. But you have a valid point. Still, unless a phoenix bashes through my window, I think I'll let it alone...in this story, at least. (Damn! You and Cateagle give me such great idears!)
  
  Did Dumbles take out Grindlewald and decide to apply similar ideas with a bit more sutblety?
  
  Basically yes. I won't be going into their history, but IMO, Dumbley killed Grindelwald, because Gellert threatened to expose him. (I don't know if it's true but it would be a great plot-bunny.) He's also threatened to both have Euwings killed, and his granddaughter raped. Not exactly the epitome of the light, there!
  
  Having a phoenix would be convincing in that case, and poor Fawkes would be trapped!
  
  In both cases, yes. Luna is his escape, because of the weakness of the bond to Dumbledore.
  
  I wonder if being in Hogwarts and the students helped him resist Dumbles' poison all those years?
  
  An intriguing thought. That the castle has aided him at least once, would tie into that. Hmmm...
  
  Is Harry going to use that blood sample in a mixture of current and future technology to add something to Dumbles' lemon drops?
  
  Basically, yes. Remember, it's from 'Beyond the outer rim.'
  
  It can't be a doodad, because those can be lost, or broken. It has to be something that cannot be affected by environment.
  
  Gringotts owl: The goblins don't like him either! I figure the owners' feelings as have a lot to do with how the bird reacts.
  
  Money: It's not just that. Since the Mugglebornes pay three times the tuition a pureblood would, then the school would actually be losing a disproportionate amount of money.
  
  The Board of Governors ain't gonna like that!
  
  Fortunately there are so few families with more than one child, Harry's got pretty much all of them mentioned in canon or the infamous 'list'.
  
  Still, given that two thirds of Harry's crew are mugglebornes with less than a dozen being purebloods, Dumbledore stands to lose up to 50% of his funding. He's gonna have some 'splainin' to do!
  
  
  And standing to the side with a smile on his face, and a huge bag of gold in each hand.....
  
  Speaking of flies, I think it's time I got Rita involved again.
  
  I have to be very careful with Minerva and Filius. Dumbledore is anything but stupid. There are only so many avenues of information into or out of the castle. If they start a whispering campaign, and the parents started to complain about things that shouldn't be known outside the castle, he'd be certain to trace it back to them.
  
  Dumbledore is definitely going to wish for the old days! After all, education prepares one for the future!
  
  The headaches are going to continue but for the time being, Voldy's laying low...ish. Every time he send his death eaters out to do some mischief, he ends up needing some replacements.
  
  He'll resurface in the middle of September though.
  
  As always its been a great pleasure.
  
  Alorkin
  
  A little request. While I love your reviews, could you please double space between paragraphs, or ideas? It's so difficult to wade through such a large block of text. Thanks.

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) ROBERT_1958 2010-07-02

  What did Harry use DumbleDORK’s DNA for?
  What gift did Harry send to DumbleDORK?

  Author's response

  Harry is still working on his 'gift'. (Evil chuckle, here!) 'It's from beyond the outer rim territories.'
  
  Alorkin

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