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Chapte 20
19 reviewsKinda slow chapter. Mostly dialogue. Harry has a few gusts over, the Dursleys go to court, and Dudley tells his story,
5Ambiance
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JEDI POTTER
(#) sargentaaron2004 2010-08-26
I feel the end is near for Moldy-wart!!!Author's response
Not quite. He's got until June. there's also a twist in the next chapter that's gonna hack off a lot of readers. I have a very good reason for it!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-08-28
Good chapter and the talking moves the story forward just as much as action could, more so under these circumstances.
The meeting with the Queen went as well as it could have; she seems to be under no pretensions that magic is a cure-all and that there are limitations to everything. I do like the idea of setting the Taboo on the the cruciatus, that's generally the first one of the unforgiveables Tom and his minions use and it should help track them and catch them in action rather than just arriving to clean up the mess they left. The offer to help Amelia with the research was a nice touch as she's reminded that there's a lot that wizarding society blinds itself to; I suspect she's going to have a lot of blindspots revealed before things are over and will be a better Minister for it.
I reckon the five visitors are going to have some interesting reports that may well lead to more visitors, and perhaps offers of assistance in return for training assistance (or other considerations; I can see select units figuring that joint efforts would not be amiss).
It looks like Dudley is quite definitely getting it together and I hope he continues to actually mature and grow; he could be a most useful member of society, especially given his relationship to Lord Gryffindor (I can see him, if so choose, becoming one of Lord Gryffindor's "people" in the non-magical world). Vernon and Petunia, on the other hand, are right pieces of work and putting them in the situation they are now in is justice where just throwing them in jail and letting them be killed would give only a fleeting pleasure and would at least mar Harry's soul; this way he's keeping them alive while punishing and, perhaps unlikley but hopefully, rehabilitating them (I do wonder where that interview information Judge Stewart got from Dudley is going; methinks that's not going to improve someone's day - Dumbledore, perhaps?).
The bit with the glued mop at Hogwarts was a nice touch and couldn't happen to two more deserving folk. 'Twill be entertaining to see what more incidents befall them (wonder if Dobby is going to make a deal with Peeves to especially concentrate on Severus and Draco?).Author's response
Thanks for the kudos, Cat.
~The meeting with the Queen went as well as it could have; she seems to be under no pretensions that magic is a cure-all and that there are limitations to everything.~
Harry had to convince her that while he could use the force, he was no further along than Skywalker was in 'Empire'.
Her assistance is going to begin to change attitudes throughout the WW, including Amelia's. She was aware of the magical restricted', but like most witches and wizards, discounted them for being 'squibs'.
You are correct. they are basically tearing down a rotted building and rebuilding it from the inside. Never an easy thing to do.
Yes, the spec-ops guys will be writing their reports, and while having their troops attend the training, it would likely be a waste of time. they have similar physical training facilities at their own bases, and handling the lightsaber, requires touching the force. While there have to be a few Jedi-potentials, in the Army, there won't be that many.
Dudley has discovered the downside of being the neighborhood bully. there's always someone who want's your crown. Your idea to have him become one of Harry's people afterward, is a great one. It won't have a place in this fic, as I intend to wrap this up at the end of June, but I'll keep it in mind for any follow ups I might write.
~Vernon and Petunia, on the other hand, are right pieces of work and putting them in the situation they are now in is justice where just throwing them in jail and letting them be killed would give only a fleeting pleasure and would at least mar Harry's soul;~
that was exactly what I was striking for. "The best revenge is living well." Harry wants them to suffer as they made him suffer for so long. This way he can see them being tormented for the rest of their lives if he wishes, and he doesn't have to lift a finger. He also knows that they know that he is the only one who can end their punishment.
Thanks. that prank is just the kind of untraceable prank one would expect from a pubescent kid.
Peeves is involved, but Dobby will have to keep him under control so he doesn't blow the whole deal.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Kirijama 2010-08-29
on that note TURKISH REVENGE stabs buttocks... faster updates :)Author's response
As soon as I can. I've had the flu for the past week or so and it kicked my ass.
Also, be advised most of my pre-written stuff is already posted, and so, I'm writing on the fly.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-09-01
Oh, BTW, there's an amusing typo in your chapter description, "Harry has some gusts over" - I keep thinking of either a bunch of politicians he wants to persuade or a bunch of air elementals he wants good relations with.Author's response
I'll have to eliminate the gusts. Snicker!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) snowfox 2010-09-05
have you had problems updating because the latest update has not come throughAuthor's response
Couldn't tell you. I haven't updated in a couple weeks.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) drifter 2010-09-06
I have two Harry Potter cannon soap boxes: Dumbledore creating his suicide bomb weapon; and genius Hermione staying with mor/Ron. You have taken care of those nicely.
Like many other, I have read a lot of HP fanfics so I'm not sure who offered these interesting ideas: use the "underage use of magic" sensors to spot the use of unforgivables; use "Marauder map" of England to locate them; have scattered multinational quick response teams that could apparate to the locations quickly. I think this is a good response plan that would please the Queen. I think "Witches Secret" had a good idea in giving firstborns, half-bloods, and any other endangered magic children and their families emergency portkeys. Or was it "all" magica ls? I thank any of these would work well in your "Jedi Potter".
Thank you for a very interesting story. I look forward to seeing else you go with this.
May the MUSE always be with you!!!
~.^
Author's response
I have the same two basic boxes.
First, Hermione had to have dropped about a thousand IQ points to even consider hooking up wth teh walking stomach. The second being Dumbledore 's suicide bomber. I agree wholeheartedly.
One of the hardest things for me to write is a story where Dumbley is NOT a manipulative old bastard willing to sacrifice anything and anyone to attain his ends. He is unfortunately one of the three disparate personalities my father exhibited. When he was drunk, it was a combination of Snape and Vernon. When he was sober, it was 'I'm never wrong' Dumbledore.
The ban on underage magic is canon, as far back as the end of year one, and IMO, as stupid a law as any in existence. Only the mugglebornes and those living in the magical world who actually care about the laws, will comply. In essence it's a chance for the purebloods to practice over the summer.
The 'taboo' (Ugh!) wasn't introduced until the very last book. (Stupid, really!)but if it was used, it should have been targeted better. (I wonder who could have been involved with that?)
I don't think I've read 'Witches Secret'. I believe I stole the idea of emergency portkeys from Seel'vor, an exceptional author, but it makes a huge amount of sense to me. After all, as a former police officer, sailor and having served with the Marine Corps for so long, I have grown used to establishing an escape route from any room I enter.
I'm glad you are enjoying the story. Unfortunately updates will be sporadic for the foreseeable future. The A/N in chapter 21 will tell you why.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) ROBERT_1958 2010-09-06
Great chapter.
I hope to get a new Chapter soon as I already read Chapter 21. Chapte 20, then yesterday I revived an Alert letting me know there was a new chapter. I was hoping Chapter 22. Chapter 21 was ready to read.
BTW: Alorkin could you allow users to leave Private messages on this site for you?
Is there another website where we can find and read your fine stories?
I hope read a new Chapter soon.
Alorkin, thanks for taking your time in writing your stories.
Thanks for the replay,
RobertAuthor's response
I don't know why the alert went out. I've been dealing with RL, for the past couple weeks. I posted today and you''ll find the explanation there.
I have no problem with readers leaving PM's. (Actually, I didn't know it could be done!)
Just now, I only post here, but in the near future I'll be posting on FF.n.
Chapter 21 is up today (9/6)
As always, a pleasure.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Qellar 2010-09-06
This is confusing, updates says 21 chapters and yet I only saw this chapter. Where is the update or did you rewrite this chapter because I remember reading it before...
Author's response
No idea, man. I understand each post is considered a separate chapter, and I left a notice where chapter 6 should have been. That made the next post, 'chapter seven, chapter six'. (does that even make sense?)
Anyway, the next chapter is up today.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) zamia 2010-09-20
Fair enough with Dudley. Hopefully you have something nastier for his parents later on. I can see Harry using the old adage of speak softly and use a big stick to start getting a few of the archaic laws rescinded. Pity Filch didn't do more damage to the snake. Good read. Cheers.
ZAuthor's response
Basically, that's exactly what I've done. I've given them absolute worst punishment they could ever imagine. You'll see it this weekend.
The laws are on the way out, and the methodology is perfectly legal and above board. The old-line blood purists are gonna -hate- that!
Filch/Snake: Aah, but more damage would imply intent. It was an accident, after all.
(Snicker. Chuckle!)
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