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Cronus has captured someone very important in one of our heroes' lives. The search is desperate since all the creatures Cronus has used ARE BACK!!Will they find the person before death reigns?
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The Last Fight
(#) Pheonee 2006-05-31
Ooooooooooooooooooohh. Jay's never gonna forgive himself for this XD Keep going, nice gentle cliffhanger like an egg about to fall.
I reckon you could work on your grammar. And Jay would barely call Theresa a "spoiled brat" or a "freak" if he like-liked her. I love the descriptive lanuage you wove into it. Try making it deeper, so it's like you are there only you can barely see it; like it's through a haze of white mist that threatens to engulf it all...sounds like that kind of story.The Last Fight
(#) Arisey 2006-05-31
I agree with Pheonee, Jay wouldn't call Theresa a spoiled brat or freak, plus he wouldn't talk about Theresa's mom like that, but it was still really good. I love how you use 'descriptive language' (as my teacher would say).The Last Fight
(#) princessofoyownworld 2006-05-31
Nice job (still working on my compliments, cant seam to write anything but nice job.) Its very good. Please continue.The Last Fight
(#) Pheonee 2006-06-28
As much as I try, I can't see Jay being so caught up in his work. He is an empathetic peroson. He would definetly feel for Theresa over that big a loss. Otherwise, it's great.The Last Fight
(#) irish_ping-pong 2007-06-28
OMG! I just love (that's L-O-V-E) this story. I read every night before I go to bed! :)
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