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16 reviewsDriving home, the Titans go through a regular routine: rescue some citizens, get on eah other's nerves... hit a demon...
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Demons Within Me
(#) Arisey 2006-06-01
I woudn't be surprised with 53(now 54) reviews if I were you, you're SUCH a good writer. Naturally, people can see that in you. If bad writers(there are LOTS of them in my class) could be half as good as you, the world would be a better place...he he, yay for Atlanta actually thinking that Archie like-liked her....Demons Within Me
(#) Frimmy 2006-06-01
kills you
jeez. we already know atlanta likes him! oyish. he, just kidding. but seriously, could you have made it any more cliff-hanger-esque?
mou, nice. except for one thing. although they are very chummy chummy, i'd think that they wouldn't be best friends, but rather, Atlanta and Theresa. it makes more sense, and they do get along better, talk more, then let's say Archie and her. they could be really good friends, yes, but i wouldn't say best friends.
asides from that, loved it! keep writing!Demons Within Me
(#) StinkFace 2006-06-01
Iwill seriously kill you if you don't update soon. BLEAGH!Demons Within Me
(#) Kathrinewoot 2006-06-02
OMG that is SO good! I'm nearly tearing out my hair because I wanna know what happens next! Awesome chapter!Demons Within Me
(#) princessofoyownworld 2006-06-02
Update or I will have some-sorta-evil-thing come after you and eat you. Wait you are to good of a writer to kill. WAY WAY WAY WAY WAY to good. But still update of my some-sorta-evil-thing will sirously so that the only thing that you can do is update! UPDATE!!!Demons Within Me
(#) Pheonee 2006-06-02
UPDATE!! UPDATE!!! UPDAAAAAAAAAAAAAATE!!!!!!!!!!
No no no no! Please please please I will die if you don't update soon, try telling me I'm overeacting--you are barked-at meat, I know I'm blabbering and sounding more stupid with each word written, but that story just about knocked the wind out of me. This section is the nothing-but-praise but. Moving along to the constructive critism bit...
Just brushing by, there is nothing you could change, but even the best writer in the world will have a few faults. For example, I know this isn't a very good time, but you could drag a little more humour into it. And perhaps go into a little more detail about Tulias, and what he would have looked like to the gang. You're good at describing, so really paint a picture with the words! ~"The wolf was huge, larger than anything I had seen, adn its fur was think, shaggy, silky, and a deep gleaming amythest (Sp? amethyst?) colour, gleaming with wet even as blood (Was there blood? If he had been hit by the truck there would have been, and there was Archie's dribbling from its mouth) soaked into it. Its paws looked like buckets, gently padding over the ground, supporting its huge form..."~ Etc etc etc.
PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOON!!!Demons Within Me
(#) caity_party_princess 2006-06-10
PLease Update soon!!!!!!!!! Update! Update! Update!
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