(#) DisenchantedEnding 2012-01-12Oh no. Oh no. Oh lord. Drinking and beating and Gerard's cruelty. It actually is like a soap. I can't believe this. I can't believe what Gerard said. How are you so talented?! This is an amazing chapter. It really is. I love how protective Frank and Pete were, Pete especially, particularly when he started crying. Just.. amazing. Literally. Perfect.
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm really glad that you thing this chapter was alright! I'm not talented though.
I'm pleased thst you liked how protective Frank and Pete were, I wanted to give Mikey at least one little aspect of things going alright and having to fiercely protective people are what he really does need.
Thank you sooooo much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review! :)
(#) youcanstakemyheart 2012-01-12This actually made me cry. It's so sad, and Gerard is such a bitch to people who don't deserve it! It was sweet of Pete when he was crying. And took that much for Gerard to realize that he wasn't trying to use Mikey. If I weren't a scrawny asthmatic kid, and this Gerard was real, I'd punch him. That goes for the kids at your school too. Aw hell, just use a stun gun on them, lousy fuckers. Anyway, hope that boy doesn't kill you. You can always knee em in the nuts. Also hope that you'll update soon and that Gerard doesn't start drinking again! Which I did not see coming...Also, I'll be sure to use the term 'brotherfucker' sometime in the near future!
Author's responseI'm really sorry that it made you cry!
Gerard does have a tendency to be a bit of a bitch in this story, doesn't he? But at least now he kind of realises that Pete isn't using Mikey.
I hope that boy doesn't kill me either; I shall be using your advice should I need it.
I'll try to update tonight.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review, it really does mean a lot! :)
(#) KobraBlaze 2012-01-12This is just unbelievable. You are so clever! Oh God Gerard is going to go drinking. What a dramatic scene! I love it so much. Gerard's an idiot. Can he not see Pete really does care. Pete is such a sweet guy. I don't know what I could say about this chapter. I could write a thousand word essay on it yet I just can sum up how great it is. I hope tomorrow is better for you. Sorry for your crappy day!
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm soooo pleased that you tihnk this chapter is alright!
Gerard is definitely being an idiot in this story, but at least he can kind of see how badly he has messed up now.
Thank you sooo much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) TheDisenchanter91080 2012-01-12I love this so much. I can't begin to explain that this story is my life. I love this so much and I would read this over and over again. Poor Mikey :( I hate it when I read a story and Gerard drinks it makes me sad that he actually used to drink that much and hurt the ones he loved the most. But I love it so much!! This was so perfect it made me cry. I cried for about 10 minutes. I love it and I hope you I've a better day tomorrow ;)
Author's responseWow, thank you so very much; it's so amazing to know that you think you could read this over and over again, I was really worried that it was dead dull so to hear something like that has definitely put a smile on my face!
Yeah; poor Mikey. Very poor Mikey. I actually kinda felt mean writing this chapter, I really haven't been the kindest of authors towards poor little Mikey.
I'm sorry that it made you cry.
Thank you soooo much for taking the time to leavd such an uplifting review! :)
(#) PatbtrthnPete 2012-01-12Poor. Mikey..
I'm glad that Gerard sees that Pete actually cares
But bad Gerard DX
Author's responseI couldn't agree with you more; poor Mikey, bad Gerard. But at least Gerard does see that Pete isn't a user now.
Thanks for taking the time to review! :)
(#) SyraStrange 2012-01-12Aw, man... I was so happy when Frank was like, "Pete! 'Sup, duuuude?" as if they were like friends, and Gerard comes in with his 'my mouth is going to start spewing shit before I think with my actual mind' crap, and I'm was like, goddammit. PFFFTT... Internet has been down and that's why I didn't get a chance to review the last chapters...forgiven? MAN... I swear, the second Gerard puts that cup to his mouth, he's going to regret it. BIG TIME.
ZOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG.... UPDATE PLEASE!!! EXCUSE MY FANGIRL MOMENT IT'LL PASS AS SOON AS YOU UPDATE, EVERYONE HAS CRAPPY DAYS, THURSDAYS ARE MINE... BUT I'M SORRY JUST THE SAME. SHIT, THE CAPS LOCK BROKE AGAIN... :D
Author's responseI was being kind of cruel, what with having things go so well with Frank and then Gerard coming in with his whole 'I'm-not-going-to-think-before-I-speak-because-I-am-right' attitude.
Don't worry about not reviewing the last chapters, just that you'd take the time to review one chapter means the world.
I'll try to update tonight.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) tortillachip 2012-01-12This is great!! I haven't commented in a while, which is really due to the fact that I've been swamped with homework and that I've been studying like crazy because midterms are coming up soon, but I have been given a break and I am back with my review-typing fingers and my fanfiction-reading eyes! Anyway, I really liked that this was in Gerard's point of view. He's the reason why all of these bad things keep happening and doesn't want to put himself at fault for that, maybe because he doesn't want to accept it or maybe he just really doesn't know it. It's always really interesting to see how he thinks and how nothing ever works out for him. I kind of feel sorry for him, but my anger outweighs that because he was a total jerk to Mikey. I feel sorry that the only thing he really wants is for Mikey to see him as a big brother. The kind he can run to if he has a problem and the kind that just looks out for him. They can barely even talk without Mikey stuttering up a storm and they can't hug or do normal brotherly things without Mikey pulling away. He's frightened of Gerard, and I'm sorry that that's the way it is, but it is the way it us because Gerard is a frightening person. He tries, sometimes his hardest, sometimes not, but it never works for him. You never know what he could do or say, and hr let's his temper get out of control. Sometimes I think his own problems, are just as bad as Mikey's. Never worse though. He doesn't have to deal with a brother who's words hurt just as much as his fists did and he doesn't have to deal with a short tempered, irrational jerk. Sure, Mikey may not think this, but it's the truth. Well, maybe he does but he doesn't want to believe it because that means he'll be a bad brother and all he ever wanted was to be a good little brother. I'm glad Pete punched Gerard. He deserves it whenever he talks to Mikey that way. Why can't Gerard get it through his head that someone really does love Mikey and aren't just going to use him? Is it impossible to love someone who has a few things wrong with them?? Well, obviously not if Frank loves Gerard. Gerard is so unfair to Mikey. I'm mad at him. While it's never surprising that he will take things too far, that's just who he is, the things he says to his brother always shock and disgust me. I'm also glad Frank can tell Gerard when he's not needed or wanted. I'm glad at least someone was able to make him go away. I hope Gerard doesn't do anything stupid after he goes for a drink. I'll be even more angry with him. I mean, I love the way you write him out and he was the nicest brother ever it wouldn't fit in this story, but his behavior disgusts me. Your writing really amazes me. You have an incredible ability, and when you write I kind of forget that it's just a story. I get so wrapped up in it. This was a wonderful, fabulous, terrific job. Also, sorry that you've had a bad day. I hope you have a better day tomorrow.
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm really glad that you think this chapter was alright!
Don't worry about not commenting, just the fact that you take the time to review any of the crap that I write is more than enough. Good luck with your midterms, I've got my science and English and History GCSEs coming up next week so I feel your pain. It's great to have you back!
I'm pleased that you liked that this was from Gerard's perspective, I wanted to use that to make it look like he isn't just being a dick (which he kinda is), that he does have some sort of twisted reasoning behind it. I'm pleased that you found it interesting, I was worried that it was all dragged out and boring. All Gerard really wants is for him and Mikey to go back to how things were before he started drinking, something which will be extremely hard (maybe even impossible) to make happen largely because Mikey is so frightened of Gerard. Like you said, Mieky can barely talk around Gerard without stuttering and Gerard can't just go up to him and hug him whenever he wants without making Mikey jump half a mile. It is definitely Gerard's fault that his relationship with Mikey turned out this way and I think that he kind of knows that, but not fully and just doesn't want to accept it.
I think that, deep down, Mikey does think all of those things you said about Gerard but because of what's happened in the past, he feels like he can't think them because that would mean being a bad little brother.
Gerard definitely deserved that punch from Pete, at least now Gerard kinda see that Pete isn't just some user.
Thank you so very much for taking the time to leave such a lovely, friendly, detailed review; I can honestly not describe how much it means to me! :)
(#) asialovesrevenge 2012-01-12WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK GERARD. This chapter was so awesome, it made me so mad xD It seems like every time Gerard comes close to making the right decision he fucks it up by insulting Mikey! Poor kids. I am soooo excited for more :D
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm sooo pleased that you think this chapter was alright!
Gerard needs to stop insulting Mikey, even if he doesn't really mean it at the time, because it does fuck everything up.
Thank you for taking the time to review! :)
(#) fearsgottahold 2012-01-12Oh my gosh Gerard. Whenever he talks I just want to gag him so he doesn't say anything else stupid, but at the same time I think 'whatever, he deserves what he gets' but then I think 'this is Gerard fucking Way we're talking about, he's just feeling over protective!' And THEN I think 'yeah, but being overprotective doesn't mean saying all that horrible stuff.' Gah. You got me head in a twist, and I still don't know where this story is going! But I do know I love it. Maybe some more dialogue would be nice, for future chapters? That's the only bad thing I can say about this, the rest is just fantastic. You are an amazing writer and you should be proud of what you come up with. Xx
Author's responseIn this story I think that it is a case of Gerard needing gagging, but he is only trying to protect Mikey although it never quite turns out the way that Gerard hoped.
I shall try my hardest to do more dialogue in the next chapter; dialogue is something I struggle with but I will try my hardest!
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a nice, helpful review! :)
- Can we just sew his mouth shut?
We can give him a little feeding tube and teach him sign language and bind his hands when he's upset...
Gerard needs to stop blaming other people for shit he does, and Mikey needs to stop blaming himself for shit other people have done.
Frank is pretty much perfect. Except he's not aggressive enough. But then Gerard would get angry with him really fast and they'd break up and that is no bueno.
Pete is a beautiful being. He has slight anger issues, but I'm glad he punched Gerard. Gerard even knew he deserved it. I'm really glad he controlled himself so well.
The previous chapter, when Mikey and Pete were being unbearably adorable, I squeaked. Well, it was more than a squeak...
It sounded like a strangled cat.
I literally couldn't deal with the cute.
I burst out laughing and had to take a little break to compose myself... I probably would have seemed insane, laughing like a madwoman, alone in my room...
I love this whole story so much. It's really sad, but in a good way.
I mean, a thoughtful way. It's not just sad to be sad, it's emotional and insightful.
Author's responseI really like your idea of sewing his mouth shut; it would definitely have prevented a lot of bad shit from happening.
You're absolutely right about how Mikey needs to stop blaming what other people do on himself and Gerard needing to stop trying to shift the blame.
With Pete punching Gerard I wanted to show that Pete is definitely not afraid to use violence when it comes to looking out for Mikey and that Gerard did feel genuinely bad about what he said.
I'm really pleased that you thought the last chapter was cute; I don't want the entirety of this story to be all doom and gloom.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed review; it really does help me write! :)
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